The Ice Princess
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Chapters 10 - 11"Love, Hate, Conflicts and Fear
26 total reviews
Comment from second thought
Fanstory. Keep reviewing for two outstanding reasons. It helps me to see how others relate events. Second reason is that ambition or desire to achieve causes me move forward. Not a bad ride.
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Fanstory. Keep reviewing for two outstanding reasons. It helps me to see how others relate events. Second reason is that ambition or desire to achieve causes me move forward. Not a bad ride.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2009
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Second thoughts
You are truly an inspiration and certainly will obtain your goals. Carol
Comment from anabellapongasi
Good job of keeping the readers in suspense in this chapter. The police have a lead now. Could the man and woman who were last seen with Macy be Trent and Sherrie? Maybe, maybe not. I can't wait to find out.
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Good job of keeping the readers in suspense in this chapter. The police have a lead now. Could the man and woman who were last seen with Macy be Trent and Sherrie? Maybe, maybe not. I can't wait to find out.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2009
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Annabella
I just love your enthusiasm. It is so uplifting. Thank you so much. Carol
Comment from BJean
Sorry , Sometimes I skip to get a jist of the story.
Will follow another time, have to sign off. Saw no
mistakes. good story line. Jean
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Sorry , Sometimes I skip to get a jist of the story.
Will follow another time, have to sign off. Saw no
mistakes. good story line. Jean
Comment Written 11-Oct-2009
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Jean
No problem. Thanks for stopping by. I really appreciate it. Carol
Comment from lola29
Carol, this chapter is excellent. You managed to gracefully to combine the scenes making it an effortless and enjoyable to read. I'm very intrigued with the right amount of suspense that you've injected, and especially how you concluded with an ending that leaves me wanting more.
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Carol, this chapter is excellent. You managed to gracefully to combine the scenes making it an effortless and enjoyable to read. I'm very intrigued with the right amount of suspense that you've injected, and especially how you concluded with an ending that leaves me wanting more.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2009
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Lola
I really needed that encouragement right now. Check your PM if you have time. Thanks so much! Carol
Comment from L.lora
Carole this is excellent,
very exciting and fast
paced, a most enjoyable
episode. Your writing is
spot on, dialogues are
superb, articulate and
believable. In your well
executed writing you've
left no holes, all flows
uniformly without gaps.
You've definitely held
the reader's attention,
and have kept the tension
at a level that will bring
the reader back for the
continuance.. great job.
no nits.. :)Lora
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2009
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Carole this is excellent,
very exciting and fast
paced, a most enjoyable
episode. Your writing is
spot on, dialogues are
superb, articulate and
believable. In your well
executed writing you've
left no holes, all flows
uniformly without gaps.
You've definitely held
the reader's attention,
and have kept the tension
at a level that will bring
the reader back for the
continuance.. great job.
no nits.. :)Lora
Comment Written 11-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2009
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Lora
Thank you so much for the encouragement. You have no idea how much that mens to me right now. I truly appreciate it. Carol
Comment from Phil Kitom
Excellent enjoyable story Carol, keeping the readers attention...
I think you have missed out the word (be) in the paragraph below.
No, don't do that. I suggest you lie still for a while. Give your body a chance to recoup." The paramedic patted her arm. "We're gonna find her and she's going to ( ) okay. She'll need you when we do."
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2009
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Excellent enjoyable story Carol, keeping the readers attention...
I think you have missed out the word (be) in the paragraph below.
No, don't do that. I suggest you lie still for a while. Give your body a chance to recoup." The paramedic patted her arm. "We're gonna find her and she's going to ( ) okay. She'll need you when we do."
Comment Written 11-Oct-2009
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Phil
Thank you for catching that oops! for me. I shall fix asap. I am glad you enjoyed the story so far. Thanks so much for the kind review as always. CArol
Comment from c_lucas
The only thing I find unbelievable is to have the key in Macy's name. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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The only thing I find unbelievable is to have the key in Macy's name. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2009
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I didn't think it would matter since it was just a message left at the desk...like at a hotel...Maybe I should rethink.
Thanks for the review.
Carol
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You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
Comment from adewpearl
One can only imagine the agony of a mother in this situation, but you do a great job of showing her panic and concern for the safety of her beloved child - the sketch is a great lead.
The plot thickens. Brooke
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One can only imagine the agony of a mother in this situation, but you do a great job of showing her panic and concern for the safety of her beloved child - the sketch is a great lead.
The plot thickens. Brooke
Comment Written 11-Oct-2009
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Brooke
My goodness...you have been a busy reader this morning. Thank you for taking the time. There are only two chapters left to the book and I hope you have found it enjoyable. Carol
Comment from BethShelby
This is very good. I like the way you are showing some of the clues to what is going on through the News paper stories. I think you are doing a good job of showing Reilly's anxiety.
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This is very good. I like the way you are showing some of the clues to what is going on through the News paper stories. I think you are doing a good job of showing Reilly's anxiety.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2009
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Beth
Thanks so much for all your time and reviews. I sincerely appreciate it. Carol
Comment from dmjones
This is getting exciting. A very well written chapter and I only have comment here.
In the first sentence before this you are talking about Max, Dennis and the Pastor. Making the pronoun in the sentence below vague. I think if you change he'd to a name or to the Pastor or even Michael's it would clear it up.
Originally, he'd failed to connect another incident at the church with Macy's disappearance. When shown the surveillance tape, he recognized the man in the video.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2009
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This is getting exciting. A very well written chapter and I only have comment here.
In the first sentence before this you are talking about Max, Dennis and the Pastor. Making the pronoun in the sentence below vague. I think if you change he'd to a name or to the Pastor or even Michael's it would clear it up.
Originally, he'd failed to connect another incident at the church with Macy's disappearance. When shown the surveillance tape, he recognized the man in the video.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2009
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Donna
You are right. I'll fix that. Thanks again for the encouragement. Carol
