CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from eragon
This is a wonderful poem and I am jealous of it because I have tried to do this form and I just can't do it. But I son't get why you would want your fears exposed.
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This is a wonderful poem and I am jealous of it because I have tried to do this form and I just can't do it. But I son't get why you would want your fears exposed.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2009
Comment from Hitcher
Many seeds of strength lay dormant.
I seek the source to make them grow.
I want to live! Let it rain
They don't come much better than that Sue,
Awesome opening to your Nonet[I do like the Nonet, suits you as well]
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2009
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Many seeds of strength lay dormant.
I seek the source to make them grow.
I want to live! Let it rain
They don't come much better than that Sue,
Awesome opening to your Nonet[I do like the Nonet, suits you as well]
Comment Written 07-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2009
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Hey Hitch! I'm glad you liked this one. I, too, like the nonet. Whatcha been up to? I was lying low for a little bit and now back. How about you? Been busy?
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sue....this is a fabulous nonet poem. You picked a subject that everyone can relate to. We have all needed strength at one time or another as life has many pit falls. Well done....good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
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Hi Sue....this is a fabulous nonet poem. You picked a subject that everyone can relate to. We have all needed strength at one time or another as life has many pit falls. Well done....good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
Comment Written 07-Apr-2009
Comment from adewpearl
one's fear as fraud - seeds of strength lying dormant - I like this - Sue, the philosopher triumphs once again, and the lines are composed in solid nonet form. Brooke
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one's fear as fraud - seeds of strength lying dormant - I like this - Sue, the philosopher triumphs once again, and the lines are composed in solid nonet form. Brooke
Comment Written 07-Apr-2009
Comment from NightWriter
"The Source" is another beautifully written and perfectly stated nonet poem. The last half which read ... Let there be light to expose my fear as the fraud that it is ... can be true of so many things. Fear has a way of stopping progress, stop growing, and remaining dormant. Well done as always! :)
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"The Source" is another beautifully written and perfectly stated nonet poem. The last half which read ... Let there be light to expose my fear as the fraud that it is ... can be true of so many things. Fear has a way of stopping progress, stop growing, and remaining dormant. Well done as always! :)
Comment Written 07-Apr-2009
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue
Clever the way you've used the right length words to create the perfect shape.
'expose my fear
as the fraud
that it
is' - brilliant metaphor of hope and positivity. I guess all our moods are 'frauds' which we perpetuate ourselves.
Here's to relief and happiness! Cheers, Ray xx
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Hi, Sue
Clever the way you've used the right length words to create the perfect shape.
'expose my fear
as the fraud
that it
is' - brilliant metaphor of hope and positivity. I guess all our moods are 'frauds' which we perpetuate ourselves.
Here's to relief and happiness! Cheers, Ray xx
Comment Written 07-Apr-2009
Comment from LynnRadford
What a deep piece this was!
Your nonet was successful both in its form and adherance to syllabic count and its ability to convey a message in poetic fashion.
Wish you the best.
Sincerely,
Lynn Radford
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What a deep piece this was!
Your nonet was successful both in its form and adherance to syllabic count and its ability to convey a message in poetic fashion.
Wish you the best.
Sincerely,
Lynn Radford
Comment Written 07-Apr-2009
Comment from Carol D Parker
This is excellent as is all of your work. If you already know your fear to be a fraud then you have it 98% defeated. Be thankful for all the time you have left to receive that light and strength. It will come and more. (Sorry to be so preachy) I just envy you your youth. Your talent will take you far. Just expect it. If you can see it, you can be it.
Delora
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This is excellent as is all of your work. If you already know your fear to be a fraud then you have it 98% defeated. Be thankful for all the time you have left to receive that light and strength. It will come and more. (Sorry to be so preachy) I just envy you your youth. Your talent will take you far. Just expect it. If you can see it, you can be it.
Delora
Comment Written 07-Apr-2009
Comment from rama devi
Superbly powerful closing phrase:
Let there be light to
expose my fear
as the fraud
that it
is
This is simply exceptional.
Bravo and kudos, dear Sue. This is a winner!
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Superbly powerful closing phrase:
Let there be light to
expose my fear
as the fraud
that it
is
This is simply exceptional.
Bravo and kudos, dear Sue. This is a winner!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2009
Comment from Judian James
Wow, this one packed a wallop Sue. Very powerful piece in so few words. Yes, the fear of not knowing, not growing, of just life, sometimes can be overwhelming. Bring on the light and the rain and be strong again. Well done
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Wow, this one packed a wallop Sue. Very powerful piece in so few words. Yes, the fear of not knowing, not growing, of just life, sometimes can be overwhelming. Bring on the light and the rain and be strong again. Well done
Comment Written 07-Apr-2009
