CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Another Statistic"A collection of poetry
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Comment from jeslaf
That's one helluva short summary of what's likely a very long story! Like the dam/crack/tears metaphor and subtlety of the final line. Good one, Sue. :)
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That's one helluva short summary of what's likely a very long story! Like the dam/crack/tears metaphor and subtlety of the final line. Good one, Sue. :)
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from joan marie
I believe when we start thinking we are forever we doom ourselves. The dam cracking is a great metaphor for the feelings that flood out. Great write and good luck, joan marie
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I believe when we start thinking we are forever we doom ourselves. The dam cracking is a great metaphor for the feelings that flood out. Great write and good luck, joan marie
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from RADIO
The format may be simple but
the words have deep meaning
as the winds of change blow
into the dream of forever.
Your poems are always power packed
with beauty and wisdom.
Radio
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The format may be simple but
the words have deep meaning
as the winds of change blow
into the dream of forever.
Your poems are always power packed
with beauty and wisdom.
Radio
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from prodigal
Great cinquain, my friend. I like how you were able to shift gears mid way through and show a contrast of emotions in such a short, structured poem. Well done- Sam
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Great cinquain, my friend. I like how you were able to shift gears mid way through and show a contrast of emotions in such a short, structured poem. Well done- Sam
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from fastdigits
A Cinquain of life itself
the joys the tears which you
have expressed so beautifully
in this stinted contest of words
where words are at a premium.
You have so artfully phrased your
thoughts.
Well done and good luck
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A Cinquain of life itself
the joys the tears which you
have expressed so beautifully
in this stinted contest of words
where words are at a premium.
You have so artfully phrased your
thoughts.
Well done and good luck
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from Hitcher
I'm caught up...YES! Two bloody days just trying to catch up, don't think I'll do that again, sorry Sue. This is a very good cinquain, I've done one so I know they aren't easy, I hope it does well, not as well as mine of course but well, ha ha. I'm still buzzing from your tramp stamp ha ha
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I'm caught up...YES! Two bloody days just trying to catch up, don't think I'll do that again, sorry Sue. This is a very good cinquain, I've done one so I know they aren't easy, I hope it does well, not as well as mine of course but well, ha ha. I'm still buzzing from your tramp stamp ha ha
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from stormwolf2
Cleverly put together with a strong sense of passion. I especially liked: Thought we were 'forever' So simple and yet, to me it says so much!
Good Luck with the competition.
Stormwolf2
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Cleverly put together with a strong sense of passion. I especially liked: Thought we were 'forever' So simple and yet, to me it says so much!
Good Luck with the competition.
Stormwolf2
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from benjan
Very nice cinquain. I liked the juxtaposition between the first and last lines. The fourth line presents a solid visual reference point for the reaction in the last line. Well written for so few words - none are wasted. Good luck in the contest.
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Very nice cinquain. I liked the juxtaposition between the first and last lines. The fourth line presents a solid visual reference point for the reaction in the last line. Well written for so few words - none are wasted. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from rama devi
Very strong metaphor and perfectly phrased for maximum impact. You are gifted with composing in this form. Should do well in the contest. Awesome artwork combination. You are so talented, Sue!~
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Love rd
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Very strong metaphor and perfectly phrased for maximum impact. You are gifted with composing in this form. Should do well in the contest. Awesome artwork combination. You are so talented, Sue!~
:)
Love rd
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from LairDog5
I really enjoyed this poem. I like the metaphor between lines 4 and 5. It has a Crapsey feel to it just without the title used as an extra line. Line 5 really lends a sense of finality to the piece. This will be tough to beat, good luck!
LairDog5
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I really enjoyed this poem. I like the metaphor between lines 4 and 5. It has a Crapsey feel to it just without the title used as an extra line. Line 5 really lends a sense of finality to the piece. This will be tough to beat, good luck!
LairDog5
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2009
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Wow! Thanks for your great review and compliments! So much appreciated! With regards, Sue :-)