Comment from dportwood

Excellent

Terrible and dangerous thing - jealousy. Your poem give great expressive definition to the word. Well done and I wish you good luck in the ocntest.

Duane

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2009

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

The Clarity Pyramid form was the perfect vehicle for your poem about jealousy. I loved all the sound play in your poem from the use of alliteration to the "Want/wanton" resonance. Your last line is so very powerful. Brilliantly conceived and executed!

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2009

Comment from Slush Pile

Excellent

Every word of this poem holds a powerful truth. Jealousy is all empowering and you've captured this truth in the precision of your words. Very nicely done. Blessings, Slush Pile

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009

Comment from Hitcher

Excellent

Always showing off!!! Sorry, ha ha, this is brilliant Sue, you are the Clarity Pymarid Queen my friend, every word is woven with precision into your poem and the effects are awesome. I have a feeling your going to do very well with this one. Sorry if I'm a bit late reviewing, I've been struggling to get on site for more than 10 minutes at a time, I'm playing catch up.{bloody hard work}

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2009

About reviewing.....I'm riddled with guilt! Anyway, I've got back into it today. Yes, just had to show off my brilliant skills with the clarity. Ha!! I really do love this form. Thanks much for your big vote of confidence and great review. Suc :-))

Comment from amada

Excellent

This is an excelente choice of the choice of poetry, it emphasized the strong words you chose to start: Want, cover, blind desire. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

Sue, this poem is poignant and descibes jealous emotions quite well.

I love the alliteration and play on words. That last line wraps/weaves the poem together.

Incredible write! It was my pleasure to read it.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009

Comment from joan marie

Excellent

Excellent ending line for this clarity poem. Definitely will be reading and voting in this one. This is a great entry. Good luck, joan marie

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

A very well written poem that goes to the heart of matters. There is a very smooth flow of words in this fast paced poem. Good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009

Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr

Excellent

Good Tuesday morning to you poet friend!
Susy, an interesting new style, a clear message for sure and a job well done.
God bless and I hope you have a wonderful Easter!
Loyd

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009

Comment from Judian James

Excellent

"envy erodes and corrodes cardinal needs
by seizing and choking truth" Really, really good Sue! The clarity pyramid is not as easy as many seem to think it is, which is why so many blow it. Not you! excellent

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009