CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi kiddo,
Lovely poem and such an artistic presentation with the double V's. It would have been fun to see this one centered although I realize the rules said that was a no-no. Great job. Thanks for sharing.
Whizpurr ^-^
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Hi kiddo,
Lovely poem and such an artistic presentation with the double V's. It would have been fun to see this one centered although I realize the rules said that was a no-no. Great job. Thanks for sharing.
Whizpurr ^-^
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
Comment from tammipratt
I loved how this poem physically sat on the page, but that's obviously the nature of the poem. I thought it was great, and great image to go with it.
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I loved how this poem physically sat on the page, but that's obviously the nature of the poem. I thought it was great, and great image to go with it.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Sixteezkid
I had fun reading you poem I can recall watching trains come into the railroad station waiting for a friend at the railroad station
Love the clickety-clack -sounds
the best to you
Gert
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Hello Sixteezkid
I had fun reading you poem I can recall watching trains come into the railroad station waiting for a friend at the railroad station
Love the clickety-clack -sounds
the best to you
Gert
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
Comment from JoeKarbo
Really nice layout, great artwork, and message.
You adhered to the structure and form very well.
Your lines and images are strong, making this memorable and strong.
The ending line has high impact..
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Really nice layout, great artwork, and message.
You adhered to the structure and form very well.
Your lines and images are strong, making this memorable and strong.
The ending line has high impact..
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
Comment from The Cowboy Poet
I really like the way your lines flow in your short poetry. Too many I read have a herky-jerky cadence, which I feel hurts the poem. I believe that one thing which makes your poem appear smoother is the alliteration of the "W's" and "C's". The onomatopoeia was a nice touch. Rhymeman.
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I really like the way your lines flow in your short poetry. Too many I read have a herky-jerky cadence, which I feel hurts the poem. I believe that one thing which makes your poem appear smoother is the alliteration of the "W's" and "C's". The onomatopoeia was a nice touch. Rhymeman.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
Comment from MJMuraco
Considering the tough rules of this contest, I think you did an excellent job on this work. The imagery is great and the artwork fits perfectly. Nice work Sue, Mary Jayne
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Considering the tough rules of this contest, I think you did an excellent job on this work. The imagery is great and the artwork fits perfectly. Nice work Sue, Mary Jayne
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
Comment from moosegal
Well done and a big ouch to the message. I like the moment in time experience of the couple sitting at the train crossing, and of course, the symbolic "this train has been going nowhere and it's over". Not an easy poetry style. Good job!
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Well done and a big ouch to the message. I like the moment in time experience of the couple sitting at the train crossing, and of course, the symbolic "this train has been going nowhere and it's over". Not an easy poetry style. Good job!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Sixteezkid ...
This is a strange format but you appear to have
responded to the challenge very well, making a meaningful statement in the process.
There is nothing to suggest changing and, as it is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
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Hullo Sixteezkid ...
This is a strange format but you appear to have
responded to the challenge very well, making a meaningful statement in the process.
There is nothing to suggest changing and, as it is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
Comment from findingmyroom
This form is one of your specialties, and this poem is delightful. The image I like best is "Comforted our silence" which I interpret to mean it was a comfortable silence into which the sound and commotion of the train happened to fall. It's a beautiful scene.
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This form is one of your specialties, and this poem is delightful. The image I like best is "Comforted our silence" which I interpret to mean it was a comfortable silence into which the sound and commotion of the train happened to fall. It's a beautiful scene.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
Comment from fastdigits
So many different formats of
poems that were hidden away in
dark corners of vacant houses, and
now we have the FIB.
No matter the forum or style
of poetry you write uniquely and
so interestingly with words that
roll as smoothly as the clickety-clack
of your train today and come to the
end of the ride with such aplomb and
style
Well done and good luck
e
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So many different formats of
poems that were hidden away in
dark corners of vacant houses, and
now we have the FIB.
No matter the forum or style
of poetry you write uniquely and
so interestingly with words that
roll as smoothly as the clickety-clack
of your train today and come to the
end of the ride with such aplomb and
style
Well done and good luck
e
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009