CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Betrayal"A collection of poetry
41 total reviews
Comment from Minglement
What a terrific entry for the Pleiades poem contest. This is a new form, to me, and you've used it well to paint a painful vignette of pain. Great job. Good luck in the contest.
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What a terrific entry for the Pleiades poem contest. This is a new form, to me, and you've used it well to paint a painful vignette of pain. Great job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Very well written with very good use of words strong descriptions well done another well written contest entry good luck regards Fuller
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Very well written with very good use of words strong descriptions well done another well written contest entry good luck regards Fuller
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Good afternoon poet friend Susy. Well, you have created a fine example of the poem challenge. I enjoyed the good message as well. I wish you success, Loyd
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Good afternoon poet friend Susy. Well, you have created a fine example of the poem challenge. I enjoyed the good message as well. I wish you success, Loyd
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
Comment from Carol D Parker
You blasted betrayal. The worst feeling in the world besides rejection. You put a label on it in this poem. Excellent medaphors. You nailed it.
Carol
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You blasted betrayal. The worst feeling in the world besides rejection. You put a label on it in this poem. Excellent medaphors. You nailed it.
Carol
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
Comment from jaeladarling
You've written yet another poem that many, if not all, can relate to. It's a sad thing, but you just never know who you can trust anymore.
Great style and form, good sentiment. Thanks for sharing!
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You've written yet another poem that many, if not all, can relate to. It's a sad thing, but you just never know who you can trust anymore.
Great style and form, good sentiment. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
Comment from Rottie
Well, again you write a well presented structured poem. And this time the picture lets the words pulsated like a rapid beat off the screen.
Another winner.
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Well, again you write a well presented structured poem. And this time the picture lets the words pulsated like a rapid beat off the screen.
Another winner.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
Comment from fictionwriter
That is a really different kind of poetry. I like the message, I'm just not to crazy about the kind of poem. But to each his own. Fine work.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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That is a really different kind of poetry. I like the message, I'm just not to crazy about the kind of poem. But to each his own. Fine work.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Yeah, I'm not crazy about it either. Saw the contest and had to give it a go. Thanks for your generous review. Sue
Comment from just2draw
Oh, such a difficult format - but you have done well. Betrayal is everything you describe here, nice clear theme - this is good.
Good choice of art to accompany the poem! Defiantly suits the atmosphere of the writing!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Oh, such a difficult format - but you have done well. Betrayal is everything you describe here, nice clear theme - this is good.
Good choice of art to accompany the poem! Defiantly suits the atmosphere of the writing!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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just2draw, yes, it's a very different format. Had to try it out in this contest. Thanks very much for your great review. And glad you noticed the artwork! Sue :-)
Comment from chaswriter
Sue - I am seeing poem forms that I have never seen before. And you write it well with Betrayal. You have good flow and express the feeling of betrayal well. Good job and good luck in the contest. Charlie
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Sue - I am seeing poem forms that I have never seen before. And you write it well with Betrayal. You have good flow and express the feeling of betrayal well. Good job and good luck in the contest. Charlie
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Charlie, this is a strange one, but had to try. Thanks very much for your great review! Sue :-)
Comment from sharon fallis
Nice writing! Very well thought out and portrayed. Good context and good word choices and usage. The gist of the poem is portrayed in each line and leads well into the following line. Good job! Sharon
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Nice writing! Very well thought out and portrayed. Good context and good word choices and usage. The gist of the poem is portrayed in each line and leads well into the following line. Good job! Sharon
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Sharon, your comments and compliments are very much appreciated. Thank you for your great review. Sue :-)