CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Minglement
Well, this is very well done, as always, little miss. What truth you speak in your quiet way. Lovely verbiage and great presentation. Good luck.
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Well, this is very well done, as always, little miss. What truth you speak in your quiet way. Lovely verbiage and great presentation. Good luck.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
Comment from c_lucas
A very well written poem with a very smooth flow making for an easy read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
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A very well written poem with a very smooth flow making for an easy read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
Comment from chaswriter
Sue - How in the world do you think of these poems? Trust is based on history. Hmmm ... very interesting last line. I bet there is some personal history there. I enjoyed it.
Charlie
PS - I have finally posted a seriously bad poem on FS. Let me know what you think cause it's your fault.
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Sue - How in the world do you think of these poems? Trust is based on history. Hmmm ... very interesting last line. I bet there is some personal history there. I enjoyed it.
Charlie
PS - I have finally posted a seriously bad poem on FS. Let me know what you think cause it's your fault.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
Comment from Carol D Parker
What a great contest entry. "Trust transends the written word" What a profound statement. I wonder if Franz Kafka would have agreed with that. But it is a beautiful statement as is the whole poem. You have a deep mind, girl. Great job.
Delora
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What a great contest entry. "Trust transends the written word" What a profound statement. I wonder if Franz Kafka would have agreed with that. But it is a beautiful statement as is the whole poem. You have a deep mind, girl. Great job.
Delora
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
Comment from Brandenpaul
You managed to nail another one. You are so good at these. I liked the analogy you use here. Trust is seen, not heard. It is by ones actions that create trust, not in what they promise. Good luck in the contest.
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You managed to nail another one. You are so good at these. I liked the analogy you use here. Trust is seen, not heard. It is by ones actions that create trust, not in what they promise. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is a clever use
of words, Sue - presented as
Tetractys - and ideal entry
for the Contest
Good luck, my friend.
Margaret.
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This is a clever use
of words, Sue - presented as
Tetractys - and ideal entry
for the Contest
Good luck, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
This is a beautifully constructed poem. I have never tried to write a tetractys myself, but I can see from the criteria you have listed in your author notes, you are an expert! No criticisms.
Warmest wishes
Kat
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This is a beautifully constructed poem. I have never tried to write a tetractys myself, but I can see from the criteria you have listed in your author notes, you are an expert! No criticisms.
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
Comment from Winslow
Dear Sixteen,
Trust is such a fragile thing, it is by our actions that it is judged. The keystone of this valued feeling is honesty. Good structured poem.
Warm regards,
Winslow
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Dear Sixteen,
Trust is such a fragile thing, it is by our actions that it is judged. The keystone of this valued feeling is honesty. Good structured poem.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
Comment from Rottie
Okay, I can see you are the keeper of all that is not rhyming nor free verse. Well, actually this is free verse. Let me say it a different way. . . Damn your good!
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Okay, I can see you are the keeper of all that is not rhyming nor free verse. Well, actually this is free verse. Let me say it a different way. . . Damn your good!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Good morning Susy. You nailed the style and entered a great piece for the contest. I enjoyed your very clear and precise single thought. Good luck, Loyd
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Good morning Susy. You nailed the style and entered a great piece for the contest. I enjoyed your very clear and precise single thought. Good luck, Loyd
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009