CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Daydreaming"A collection of poetry
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Comment from Firefly54
It was a little fun, indeed.
"I think I'll take a long vacation in my mind today " The only problem is, its the only sort of vacation I ever seem to have these days...
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It was a little fun, indeed.
"I think I'll take a long vacation in my mind today " The only problem is, its the only sort of vacation I ever seem to have these days...
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
Comment from Minglement
A little fun for you, a lot of fun for us! What a great read this was, taking the reader on a little imaginary journey! I enjoyed it!
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A little fun for you, a lot of fun for us! What a great read this was, taking the reader on a little imaginary journey! I enjoyed it!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from Annelisa
That was lots of fun! Thanks for the adventure. Its nice to escape once in a while. This poem was a treat and a delight to read!
Annelisa
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That was lots of fun! Thanks for the adventure. Its nice to escape once in a while. This poem was a treat and a delight to read!
Annelisa
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from BethShelby
This is a neat poem. We really can to some traveling that way if we have a vivid enough imagination and maybe a little help from google. I do a lot time traveling. I like to relive some of those special memories from the past. On thing for sure, it's surely less expensive that way.
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This is a neat poem. We really can to some traveling that way if we have a vivid enough imagination and maybe a little help from google. I do a lot time traveling. I like to relive some of those special memories from the past. On thing for sure, it's surely less expensive that way.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from Dklrdmcches
not as powerful as your other works, but it was not meant to be. this was a fun little piece and every once in awhile we need a break from the serious stuff. this was playful and thanks for sharing...DKLRD
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not as powerful as your other works, but it was not meant to be. this was a fun little piece and every once in awhile we need a break from the serious stuff. this was playful and thanks for sharing...DKLRD
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from Carol D Parker
Hope you had a great time. I sure enjoyed it. I gotta take a trip like that soon. But I'm too busy flying this computer. I imagine you are too. The poem is delightful, full of fun. I love it.
Delora
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Hope you had a great time. I sure enjoyed it. I gotta take a trip like that soon. But I'm too busy flying this computer. I imagine you are too. The poem is delightful, full of fun. I love it.
Delora
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from womanwriter
I can so relate to this poem - especially now that we have internet LOL
I traverse the world on a daily basis - and never leave the comfort of my home. LOL
Great fun reading it - you went to some of my all-time favorite places.
Warm regards,
womanwriter
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I can so relate to this poem - especially now that we have internet LOL
I traverse the world on a daily basis - and never leave the comfort of my home. LOL
Great fun reading it - you went to some of my all-time favorite places.
Warm regards,
womanwriter
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for quick trip to some of my favorite places--I think of Maui as paradise (especially since it's only five hours away) and I want to return to Australia after I've completed my A-list of travel venues. I also enjoyed your rhyme scheme and bits of alliteration and your use of "aloft" and "spree" to add to the sense of relaxation.
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Thank you for quick trip to some of my favorite places--I think of Maui as paradise (especially since it's only five hours away) and I want to return to Australia after I've completed my A-list of travel venues. I also enjoyed your rhyme scheme and bits of alliteration and your use of "aloft" and "spree" to add to the sense of relaxation.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from tammipratt
I'm heading for Down Under where it feels like old home turf
And hang my ten in 8 foot waves; the best place one can surf
I wondered if this line could be Australia, but then I saw San Deigo! Oh well! Great write.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2009
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I'm heading for Down Under where it feels like old home turf
And hang my ten in 8 foot waves; the best place one can surf
I wondered if this line could be Australia, but then I saw San Deigo! Oh well! Great write.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2009
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Yep. The great Down Under is Australia. Love it there. Thanks for your review. Sue
Comment from rhymelord
Nice work, Sue.
That wide imagination shows again to produce this whimsical little journey through the roving mind. However, in 4th line, "airstrip", which in normal conversation is a trochee is forced by the format into an iamb. I am sure you can fix it.
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Nice work, Sue.
That wide imagination shows again to produce this whimsical little journey through the roving mind. However, in 4th line, "airstrip", which in normal conversation is a trochee is forced by the format into an iamb. I am sure you can fix it.
Regards
Reg
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2009