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The Followup to Chasing the Elusive Dream

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Comment from damommy
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That was quite a trip, the organized one. It seems just to take off in a chosen direction was your best bet. Do the children still talk of that vacation when you had to take over driving after you tried to kill Evan? hahahaha

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
    Thank for the review. Yes both or trips the older children will never forget. Connie was young and doesn't rermember a lot about it.
    Beth
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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You are right when you plan sometime nothing comes accordingly to the plan but that's real life. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
    Thank you Iza, Planning doesn't work well for me. Thinks see to work better by just letting life happen.
    Beth
Comment from patcelaw
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This is a very interesting story, and I enjoyed listening to it very much. It seems that vacations for a family son sometimes very hard. We took very few vacations as our girls were growing up and when we did, it was long hours and a short vacation of lesson two weeks. Now it's all a memory for you and it's something that you can write about. Patricia.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
    Thank you so much for the review and comments. I hope you had a good day and healed a bit more.
    Beth
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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If I was you back in the day
I would have SUGGESTED Evan stay home to avoid any migraine attack, packed the kids and tell
The spouse I'll
See
You in ten days.
Bye.
Good story.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
    Well, Tom, it's a good suggestion and I'm brave, but not brave or crazy enough to drive from New Orleans to Canada with four kids.
    Beth
Comment from jmdg1954
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Well, Beth I must say you had nerves of steel.

I found this humorous, filled with emotion and adventure. I have three kids, so when they were younger we were able to map out our trips to Florida, Hershey Park, and other places. Neither of us suffered migraines so I guess that was a positive.

Good revitalized post...

John

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
    Thank you, John. I'm glad you found it humorous because once it was in the past, I thought the whole was pretty funny. You and your wife probably both enjoyed traveling. Evan wasn't someone who enjoyed traveling.
    Beth
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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This is a great chapter here, Beth, I think one of your best and deserves a six if only I had one! You manage to convey so many emotions in the story and convey the emotionally fraught journey in such graphic detail. There's tension but also always some underlying humour and endearing self-blame which is quite characteristic of your prose. Anyone with an edgy husband (and I have one) will understand just how much effort on your part went into trying to keep everyone happy. I'm glad it turned out for the best in the end. Just one suggestion - end of first sentence I think I'd put 'synonymous.' Great job! Thanks Beth, Debbie x

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
    Thank you Debbie. I agree that word works better there. Some of the stories I wrote back then had more humor in them. I think I was trying to be an Erma Bombeck, and I had a style I like to recapture.
    Beth
reply by Debbie D'Arcy on 21-Jul-2023
    I've been thinking about your story and really commend you on the structure of it and the way you bring out information so creatively, always aware of the reader's interest and engagement. It's a great and always very readable style!
Comment from kiwisteveh
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I loved this, Beth. I don't doubt the truth of any of it!

Why is it that some of the hardest times of our lives can result in enormous humour when they have disappeared in the rearview mirror. I got a real chuckle out of your miserable vacation. I suspect you feel the same way in that the happy vacation gets a few lines at the end in comparison.-

Steve

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
    Thank you Steve, I really appreciate the review and comments. Yes they were much more amusing in the read view mirror than when I was actually living them. I thrilled with the six stars.
    Beth
Comment from royowen
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I discover very early that we wouldn't try to plan a trip too much, but wouod build it as it came, so we took off in a general direction and just let it happen, we had a caravan anyway, so somewhere to sleep or to cook a meal, was never a problem. We could plan as we go, always great holidays, beautifully written. Blessings Roy

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
    Thank you Roy. It would be nice to have a travel trailor or caravan as you call them. We went to New York in a Van planning to find places to camp but there wasn't any. We couldn't even find a motel with an opening so we slept in the Van in the motel parking area.
reply by royowen on 20-Jul-2023
    Australia is blessed with many caravan and camping parks, Germany too, from memory.
Comment from Rain Chapman
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I always enjoy your work, it contains so much of the human condition and always with such humor. Your work sparks memories in me every time. Thanks for the terrific read.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
    Thank you Lorraine, I guess we all have a lot in common. Actually, My favorite teacher in Grade School was named Lorraine Chapman. This was in Mississippi, a long way from Canida. I've read some of your work and I it.
    Beth
Comment from Amicus
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You've provided another well written amusing article for our reading pleasure here, Beth. And it is indeed a pleasure to read your work with its clean, clear prose and well chosen detailed anecdotes. I love the wry tone that you create.

Only suggestion I have is to cut the final line entirely or make it just "This was the best etc."

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
    Thanks so much for your input and for your great review.
    Beth