CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from fictionwriter
All the poems I've read today are sad. This one is heartbreaking. I hate how hurts resurface like that. I loved the poem. Great work.
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All the poems I've read today are sad. This one is heartbreaking. I hate how hurts resurface like that. I loved the poem. Great work.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from glacierbabe
This is very beautifully written. I particularly liked the following lines:
Ensuring they were sterilized
I kept them stitched and sanitized
Before too long they lay benign
All buried deep, without a sign
The rythm flowed very smoothly and the rhymes are excellent. Once again, very nicely done.
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This is very beautifully written. I particularly liked the following lines:
Ensuring they were sterilized
I kept them stitched and sanitized
Before too long they lay benign
All buried deep, without a sign
The rythm flowed very smoothly and the rhymes are excellent. Once again, very nicely done.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from jakuper
Nice poem. I don't think though it's more than that. Yes, it has a lot of unclear visual, that makes poems lovebale to many. But yet..
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Nice poem. I don't think though it's more than that. Yes, it has a lot of unclear visual, that makes poems lovebale to many. But yet..
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from Ragnar
Kinda dark for Valentine's Day...just kidding, I think it's real good.
Emotional wounds and physical wounds compare very nicely.
If only recovering was as easy as healing a broken bone Huh?
Very nice work...I especially enjoyed the last paragraph; I guess we've all been through that.
good luck in the future
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Kinda dark for Valentine's Day...just kidding, I think it's real good.
Emotional wounds and physical wounds compare very nicely.
If only recovering was as easy as healing a broken bone Huh?
Very nice work...I especially enjoyed the last paragraph; I guess we've all been through that.
good luck in the future
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from amada
It reads very well because of the rhyming and softness of your poem. Tjere are very good descriptions and so the poem takes life.
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It reads very well because of the rhyming and softness of your poem. Tjere are very good descriptions and so the poem takes life.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from K-Patrick
Rhyme ? Once again nearly perfect.
Rhythm/Flow ? Very good. I think "Those wounds..." is just a little to much removing "Those" might make it a smoother read.
Appeal ? The illustration works so well with the words, just superb.
Format ? Perfect Quatrain
My Aesthetic Judgment ? Someone once said you ain't lived if you ain't got scars. It makes us who we are. You just put it out there so much more beautifully.
?Beauty is no quality in things themselves: it exists merely in the mind which contemplates them.? -- David Hume (1757)
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Rhyme ? Once again nearly perfect.
Rhythm/Flow ? Very good. I think "Those wounds..." is just a little to much removing "Those" might make it a smoother read.
Appeal ? The illustration works so well with the words, just superb.
Format ? Perfect Quatrain
My Aesthetic Judgment ? Someone once said you ain't lived if you ain't got scars. It makes us who we are. You just put it out there so much more beautifully.
?Beauty is no quality in things themselves: it exists merely in the mind which contemplates them.? -- David Hume (1757)
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from Firefly54
Bad girl, you shouldn't smoke.... An interesting and thought provoking poem that also flows very nicely and is simply good to read! Thanks for sharing! Elaine
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Bad girl, you shouldn't smoke.... An interesting and thought provoking poem that also flows very nicely and is simply good to read! Thanks for sharing! Elaine
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from rhymelord
As ever, and I can find no greater compliment, wonderful attention to rhyme, metre and sophisticated vocabulary to produce a poignant poem.
Regads
Reg
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As ever, and I can find no greater compliment, wonderful attention to rhyme, metre and sophisticated vocabulary to produce a poignant poem.
Regads
Reg
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from Curt Mongold
Beautiful wording and imagery, I love the internal rhyming and the whole flow of the poem comes alive with the emotion it portrays to the reader. Heart gripping descriptions of old wounds that surface, only to be denied access to the light.
Stunning work my friend.
Sincerely,
Curt
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Beautiful wording and imagery, I love the internal rhyming and the whole flow of the poem comes alive with the emotion it portrays to the reader. Heart gripping descriptions of old wounds that surface, only to be denied access to the light.
Stunning work my friend.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from dportwood
I really like the rhyme and rhythm you've built into this poem. Kind of an up and down message very well described in your 'A Past Revisited'.
Duane
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I really like the rhyme and rhythm you've built into this poem. Kind of an up and down message very well described in your 'A Past Revisited'.
Duane
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009