CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 97 "On the Nile"A collection of poetry
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Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
Your poem is well written. Your message it well presented. The picture enhances it. I found no spags to note. It was my pleasure to read. Good luck in the contest.
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Your poem is well written. Your message it well presented. The picture enhances it. I found no spags to note. It was my pleasure to read. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2009
Comment from Dreamdancer
Hello my friend,
Yes it is very sad to see the children suffering. I have been to thirty two different countries and when you see some of the poverty they live in it makes one appreciate what we have.... Thank you for sharing my friend... Dreamdancer
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Hello my friend,
Yes it is very sad to see the children suffering. I have been to thirty two different countries and when you see some of the poverty they live in it makes one appreciate what we have.... Thank you for sharing my friend... Dreamdancer
Comment Written 15-Jan-2009
Comment from Judian James
I have experienced similar situations staying in luxury hotels or on cruise ships with poverty in your view on the hills just beyond the other side of the bay. This was a short piece that conveyed so much. well done
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I have experienced similar situations staying in luxury hotels or on cruise ships with poverty in your view on the hills just beyond the other side of the bay. This was a short piece that conveyed so much. well done
Comment Written 14-Jan-2009
Comment from Hitcher
I didn't quite make it to the Nile, kinda got stuck in Darhab, a coastal village that served up hemp with ice-cream and chocolate, ha ha. Such fond memories, so long ago. Excellent naani sue, those poverty stricken children are quite accomplished pick pockets truth be told, the beauty of them is that they normally offer to sell your picked items back to you, classic!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2009
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I didn't quite make it to the Nile, kinda got stuck in Darhab, a coastal village that served up hemp with ice-cream and chocolate, ha ha. Such fond memories, so long ago. Excellent naani sue, those poverty stricken children are quite accomplished pick pockets truth be told, the beauty of them is that they normally offer to sell your picked items back to you, classic!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2009
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Oh, yeah. When you walk through the village, LOOK OUT!!! (Sell you back pick-pocked items - LMAO!!) They are pros! Bless their hearts, though. So poor. Thanks for your review and fun comments, Hitch! Suc
Comment from dportwood
Your little naani has strong imagery. In your 24 syllables you have accurately described a most heart-wrenching way of life and have shown that it exists within natural beauty - The Nile. Nicely done.
Duane
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Your little naani has strong imagery. In your 24 syllables you have accurately described a most heart-wrenching way of life and have shown that it exists within natural beauty - The Nile. Nicely done.
Duane
Comment Written 14-Jan-2009
Comment from ulster3
Hi Sixteez.
This is an excellent nanni, maybe exceptional. The juxtaposition is really great. I wish you the best.
Fondly, Rebecca
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Hi Sixteez.
This is an excellent nanni, maybe exceptional. The juxtaposition is really great. I wish you the best.
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 14-Jan-2009
Comment from adewpearl
so many places in the world that cater to tourists show them the natural beauty of the land while they can also catch glimpses of the local poverty - you capture that well in your naani poem
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so many places in the world that cater to tourists show them the natural beauty of the land while they can also catch glimpses of the local poverty - you capture that well in your naani poem
Comment Written 14-Jan-2009
Comment from jack silver
even though we wish it wasn't so there are those who are less fortunate and have to work very hard to make ends meat. their was i email message i received awhile back and it showed the daily intake on what different amounts that people eat each day. the first was a full table. the second was five big plates of food each. the third was less. the fourth was even more less until their was a two handfuls that would have to keep the person going five to six days. the last was a single handful that would have to keep the person going for a week.
it really is sad isn't it how some people live?
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even though we wish it wasn't so there are those who are less fortunate and have to work very hard to make ends meat. their was i email message i received awhile back and it showed the daily intake on what different amounts that people eat each day. the first was a full table. the second was five big plates of food each. the third was less. the fourth was even more less until their was a two handfuls that would have to keep the person going five to six days. the last was a single handful that would have to keep the person going for a week.
it really is sad isn't it how some people live?
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jack
Comment Written 14-Jan-2009
Comment from Curt Mongold
Fantastic word usage in this rhyming naani poem cuz. A very sobering thought to accompany the idea of vacation too. How very different they are, yet still the same.
Best wishes,
Curt
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Fantastic word usage in this rhyming naani poem cuz. A very sobering thought to accompany the idea of vacation too. How very different they are, yet still the same.
Best wishes,
Curt
Comment Written 14-Jan-2009
Comment from Jack Burbank
Very nicely expressed. I had the same experience maybe fifteen years ago and the vision of poverty still stays with me. There are too many third-world areas like this and all it takes is a visit to drive the memory in. Very clever use of "oxymora". JB
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Very nicely expressed. I had the same experience maybe fifteen years ago and the vision of poverty still stays with me. There are too many third-world areas like this and all it takes is a visit to drive the memory in. Very clever use of "oxymora". JB
Comment Written 14-Jan-2009