CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 127 "Not One Word"A collection of poetry
18 total reviews
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue
All ingredients of 'proper' free verse - a little random rhyme, plenty of appropriate metaphors and a little alliteration.
Wonderful observations of nature and a lovely ending.
Well done, IMHO. Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Hi, Sue
All ingredients of 'proper' free verse - a little random rhyme, plenty of appropriate metaphors and a little alliteration.
Wonderful observations of nature and a lovely ending.
Well done, IMHO. Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Ray, great comments!! Ones that reinforce the importance of elements you describe. Thanks for your very kind review! :-)) Sue
Comment from adewpearl
soundless snow shrouds us from unwelcomed eyes - I really like that! Stolen, unspoken time under the night's stars- I was enchanted by the whole vignette
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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soundless snow shrouds us from unwelcomed eyes - I really like that! Stolen, unspoken time under the night's stars- I was enchanted by the whole vignette
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Brooke, I'm learning from all you wonderful writers in here!! I'm coming to a point where I am feeling bolder and am daring myself.
And for it to come through for you to "see" my words as intended...this is so huge for me! I thank you so much for your lovely, lovely review.
My warmest regards,
Sue
Comment from rama devi
Thank you for sharing this perfect moment. Wonderfully calm and soothing serenity ion tone, pace and imagery make this an enjoyable read. Soothing as soft silvery moonlight.
Love this:
The tree's rustle
renders a hush
making its presence
known only to us
Not to be named
is this stolen time
as a word would
falsely define it
No nits.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Thank you for sharing this perfect moment. Wonderfully calm and soothing serenity ion tone, pace and imagery make this an enjoyable read. Soothing as soft silvery moonlight.
Love this:
The tree's rustle
renders a hush
making its presence
known only to us
Not to be named
is this stolen time
as a word would
falsely define it
No nits.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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rama devi, I am so happy that you enjoyed reading this work. All of your lovely compliments mean so much. Thank you for this very generous review. Hand to heart....Sue
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Hand to heart right back dear soul. I appreciate your reviews as well!
Love, rd
Comment from dportwood
Sixteezkid,
Nature grants us many of these unexpected moments and the happiest results are realized when we stop and enjoy them -
listen to the sound of silence and see th beauty all around.
Duane
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Sixteezkid,
Nature grants us many of these unexpected moments and the happiest results are realized when we stop and enjoy them -
listen to the sound of silence and see th beauty all around.
Duane
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Duane, and it is almost like a miracle when it does! Thank you so much for your very kind review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. With regards, Sue
Comment from Diny
sojourn- OH HOW I LOVE THAT WORD!-
This was priceless- genius and so enlightend- i have felt that moment- that instance- that awe- you have penned its expression well here- thank you- write on-DINY
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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sojourn- OH HOW I LOVE THAT WORD!-
This was priceless- genius and so enlightend- i have felt that moment- that instance- that awe- you have penned its expression well here- thank you- write on-DINY
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Diny, I love that word, also!! AH!! Your review is too much for my eyes! I am exhilarated that you have had that moment, that awe - and you saw it in this work. THAT's priceless to this gal!! I want to thank you so much for your most lovely review. With warm regards, Sue
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It seems we are of kindred spirit dear poetess- I am a fan of freeverse only when it is done well and with reason- you have done both- I shall be keeping an eye out for you-Diana
Comment from Judian James
Hi there Sue. Just on my way to bed and thought I'd stop by for a few reviews first. This is wonderful. Each little passage very well stated and the imagery is lovely. I have the same problem as with your last piece. It seems too long somehow. Either different formatting with more per line to make the overall look shorter or tighten it with fewer verses perhaps. See what other reviewers think. just an opinion
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Hi there Sue. Just on my way to bed and thought I'd stop by for a few reviews first. This is wonderful. Each little passage very well stated and the imagery is lovely. I have the same problem as with your last piece. It seems too long somehow. Either different formatting with more per line to make the overall look shorter or tighten it with fewer verses perhaps. See what other reviewers think. just an opinion
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Jude, so glad you did stop by! Hmmmmm...... (ha!) I hear what you're saying. I did cut back BIG on the other after your review. Now, I'm going to have to consider cutting more words?? Say it isn't so! I do like the very narrow columns of free verse...easy on the eyes (to me). Will let it lie for the night and see what happens after I re-visit it. I value your opinion and thank you very much for this very kind review. My regards, Sue
Comment from Firefly54
I particularly liked the two negatives in this poem,
"A glimpse-
night's stars
each casting
a glint of silver
not to bring light
A breeze
gently whispers
not to stir time "
I make no comment on the form, because I only work with structured form - but your choice of words is quite delightful!
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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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I particularly liked the two negatives in this poem,
"A glimpse-
night's stars
each casting
a glint of silver
not to bring light
A breeze
gently whispers
not to stir time "
I make no comment on the form, because I only work with structured form - but your choice of words is quite delightful!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Firefly, I'm SO happy you liked those two stanza's (because they are also my favorite -ha!). Thank you for your very kind review. And your lovely comments! With regards, Sue
Comment from Etasje
Very deep, and to me in the end you ended lightheartedly,it is wonderful. A nice way to end a poem.
Thank you for sharing
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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Very deep, and to me in the end you ended lightheartedly,it is wonderful. A nice way to end a poem.
Thank you for sharing
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Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Etasje, I am so glad to hear you enjoyed this work. Thank you so much for your very kind review and lovely comments. With regards, Sue