CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 134 "He's For Me"A collection of poetry
33 total reviews
Comment from Perp Ihebom
I am really highly impressed by this great piece of poetry. The rhyming pattern is very nice and well done. It must have taken a lot of work to get those middle rhymes and end rhymes and put them together so beautifully. The theme is also well developed. Kudos my dear.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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I am really highly impressed by this great piece of poetry. The rhyming pattern is very nice and well done. It must have taken a lot of work to get those middle rhymes and end rhymes and put them together so beautifully. The theme is also well developed. Kudos my dear.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Thanks for this great review and all your comments! So glad you liked it. With regards, Sue
Comment from sara-beth
This one is really great, it's different than most, really. I like the theme, it's very sweet and romantic. It doesn't matter how old we are, we can all relate to these feelings!
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This one is really great, it's different than most, really. I like the theme, it's very sweet and romantic. It doesn't matter how old we are, we can all relate to these feelings!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Yes, those lovely feelings of romance!! So glad you liked this and thank you for such a great review. Sue
Comment from Always Hope
Sweet, even cute! I really enjoyed this, six!
No debate, he's first rate! - I chuckled here. Great line!
Quick, easy to read, and flowed smooth as it should. You've got great rhythm and rhyme going here. I wouldn't change a thing.
Thanks for sharing!
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Sweet, even cute! I really enjoyed this, six!
No debate, he's first rate! - I chuckled here. Great line!
Quick, easy to read, and flowed smooth as it should. You've got great rhythm and rhyme going here. I wouldn't change a thing.
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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So happy you liked this piece! Thanks for your very kind review and comments! Yeah..he's first rate! HA! Sue
Comment from lathunder
I liked it. I thought it was catchy and it held my attention. I liked the way you drew the reader in with a certain line and then moved on in a different direction. :)
L.A.Thunder
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I liked it. I thought it was catchy and it held my attention. I liked the way you drew the reader in with a certain line and then moved on in a different direction. :)
L.A.Thunder
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Hey, L.A.! Thanks for the great review. I love the way this form just clips along. Glad you liked it! Sue
Comment from Fleedleflump
The best thing about this format is the way it promotes a frenetic, breathless urgency within the words of the poem, and you've picked a perfect subject for which to use it. It's a shame this wasn't in the original contest; it would have had my vote, no doubt.
Mike
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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The best thing about this format is the way it promotes a frenetic, breathless urgency within the words of the poem, and you've picked a perfect subject for which to use it. It's a shame this wasn't in the original contest; it would have had my vote, no doubt.
Mike
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Mike, that's exactly why I like this format. You said it best with "frenetic, breathless urgency". Thanks for "Vote" I would have had - ha! And for this great review. With regards, Sue
Comment from chaswriter
Sue - You are determined to educate me on poem styles. LOL. Never heard of this style but I did enjoy your poem of one cautiously finding love. Great rhyme and pace. Charlie.
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Sue - You are determined to educate me on poem styles. LOL. Never heard of this style but I did enjoy your poem of one cautiously finding love. Great rhyme and pace. Charlie.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Charlie, join the gang!! Dive in, the water's fine...LOL!! I never knew the difference between a quatrain or haiku!!! **ignorance showing** - So, if I can do it, you can. So Fun!! Thanks for your great review. So glad you always come to visit. Now, it's your turn. (I await). With warmest regards, Sue
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Sue - You would not want to read any poems that I could conjure up. I am a terrible poet. That's why I am like No. 310 on the FS poet list. LOL. I'll just keep on reading yours, thank you. Charlie.
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A few months ago, I could not draw a stick man...Now I'm painting. What???!!
A few weeks ago, I could not write a note....Now I'm writing (what I feel is) poetry!!!
If you can write stories, you can write poems. The only reason I say this, is because you do love to come over here and read the poems!! Means you can write them also. What a wonderful release that I never knew existed. And I waited 5 decades for that?!
HA!! All good things come in time, as they say.
The next challenge I'm going to put myself up against is to write a short story. ONLY because I LOVE the great American Short Story! How delicious...scruptuous. A glimpse at a moment in someone's life. No beginning, no end.....just a glimpse at an event, a happening, a tragedy, an epiphany! Oh, God....I'm going to enter the world of torture to attempt it. I'm a glutton for punishment. Ha!
Always a pleasure for you to read my work, Charlie.
Yours,
Sue
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Sue - I look forward to reading your story. And I will post a poem, but you have to give me an honest review of it. Look for it next week. Charlie.
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Oh, God......now I'm on the spot. I have just decided to start reviewing works that are not just "excellent". I was using those to get warmed up. Hey, I'm a "newbie"!!! What do I know?
Okay, but you have to be honest back in your response to my review!! Deal?
By the way, I just reviewed your Sarah Palin poem. See, I took the chicken's way out and read a 5 (as it so much deserves) and gave it such.
Funny: You liked my challenge, didn't you!! Go for it!!!! We'll be honest with each other ALL the time.
Look forward to your next piece!
Sue
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If you haven't already got it, I HIGHLY recommend a short story book called, "The Night in Question" by Tobias Wolff. (Not Tom Wolfe or the other Wolf.....so many even I get confused).
He also wrote "This Boy's Life - an autobiographical story. Later made into a film with DeNiro and DiCaprio.
But, "The Night in Question" has the most EXQUISITE, easy to read short stories ever!! "Powder", "Bullet in the Brain", "The Other Miller" are some of my stories in there.
Let me know if you read it!
Sue
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Sue - Thank you for the book recommendation. I will do that. And, yes, it's a deal. Honest reviews of each other's work. Charlie.
Comment from skye
Such a story inside this poem.. love, then loving, then beloved.
Nicely done, adhering to the formal structure very well.
I like this alot, and love the artwork.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Such a story inside this poem.. love, then loving, then beloved.
Nicely done, adhering to the formal structure very well.
I like this alot, and love the artwork.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Hello Skye (Blue)...thank you so much for your lovely review and very glad you liked it! With kindest regards, Sue
Comment from LitGuru
Sixteezkid,
Overall: Once again, very well done. I don't particularly like this format, as it tends to be a bit choppy, but you performed it well. Also, the picture is perfect, especially for the dance-like rhythm to the poem. Great work.
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Great job, keep it up!
LG
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Sixteezkid,
Overall: Once again, very well done. I don't particularly like this format, as it tends to be a bit choppy, but you performed it well. Also, the picture is perfect, especially for the dance-like rhythm to the poem. Great work.
Nitpicks: -
SPAG: -
Great job, keep it up!
LG
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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LG, I like your observation of the image befitting the dance-like rhythm. I do love the pace of this format. Clip-clip-clip! Thanks for reading and for your very specific comments! Sue
Comment from adewpearl
Curt knows how much I love the sassy, jazzy modernity of this style, and until this contest, I had pretty much just seen his own poems. It is fantastic to see others take this on as it really is a style that works beyond one writer's use of it, and you've chosen a perfect subject for it - somehow I don't think quiet contemplation of the stars would work! LOL
dance, take a chance on romance -nicely done!!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Curt knows how much I love the sassy, jazzy modernity of this style, and until this contest, I had pretty much just seen his own poems. It is fantastic to see others take this on as it really is a style that works beyond one writer's use of it, and you've chosen a perfect subject for it - somehow I don't think quiet contemplation of the stars would work! LOL
dance, take a chance on romance -nicely done!!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Brooke, your showing those "velvet glove" feelings! HA!!! Thanks to our dearest Hitch! I thought I'd get a bit sassy, yes. Just a tad for fun. Thanks so much for your review. As always, much appreciated....Sue
Comment from tator tot
I enjoyed your poem. I found myself trying to think of more words to rhyme-it's hard! I try not to look at the picture before I read the poem. The picture didn't really add anything to your work-in other words, your words stood alone and didn't need the picture. Thank you.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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I enjoyed your poem. I found myself trying to think of more words to rhyme-it's hard! I try not to look at the picture before I read the poem. The picture didn't really add anything to your work-in other words, your words stood alone and didn't need the picture. Thank you.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Tator Tot, same here....sometimes I scroll down so I don't see an image. Depends on what it is. So glad you liked it. Thanks for the very kind review! With regards, Sue