CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 140 "My Son Left Today"A collection of poetry
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Comment from Jean Lutz
Good composition. Good flow. Good imagery of leaving on a jet plane, soaring above the clouds. Advice from a mother of three sons, when he is too far away to hold in your arms; hold him in your heart.
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Good composition. Good flow. Good imagery of leaving on a jet plane, soaring above the clouds. Advice from a mother of three sons, when he is too far away to hold in your arms; hold him in your heart.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
Comment from LYLE
Sixteezkid,
I can empathize with your emotions when your son left. I
always had that feeling when my sons would leave to go back to school, or later, when I would leave after a short visit and return to my home. The emotion never leaves:
my sons are now 46, and 49, and I still feel that sense of loss, whenever I say goodbye.
Fondly, Lyle
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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Sixteezkid,
I can empathize with your emotions when your son left. I
always had that feeling when my sons would leave to go back to school, or later, when I would leave after a short visit and return to my home. The emotion never leaves:
my sons are now 46, and 49, and I still feel that sense of loss, whenever I say goodbye.
Fondly, Lyle
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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I am now coming to the realization that they will STILL be my "kids" when they are 60! HA!!!! Thanks for sharing your very loving and touching story of your own love of your children. What would we do without them?! Thank you so much for your very kind review and lovely comments. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Vallachi
What does my son left his Or mean?
I like the style of my son starting each stanza
the plane makes for a perfect picture
Good design and structure
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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What does my son left his Or mean?
I like the style of my son starting each stanza
the plane makes for a perfect picture
Good design and structure
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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The Oi is Australian. A lot of meanings! Probably closest I can give just one example would be an American, "Hey!" There are other meanings, though. Thanks for your specific comments. Very much appreciated. Regards, Sue
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Oh, I see! That makes a lot of sense to me now. Thanks, Pamela
Comment from Artasylum
Thanks so much for sharing your son with us and it is obvious that he is truly loved and missed...thanks so much yours, diana............
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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Thanks so much for sharing your son with us and it is obvious that he is truly loved and missed...thanks so much yours, diana............
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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Diana, so glad you read my poem. It's Judian's fault. She wrote this most touching poem called "Goodbyes" and I just happened upon it an hour before I was to take Ryan to the airport. That poem is so beautifully written, I just cried. Then had to put pen to paper for my own feelings. Make sure you read her poem if you have not already. Thank you for your very kind review. Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from Nicnac
Sue,
This is lovely.
There is nothing as dear as being with family.
How very sad when they must leave.
"My son left his "Oi"!
Australian, that's my boy" -- this part made me smile. :)
Thank you for sharing your heart with us. This is a lovely descriptive poem of your love for your son. I enjoyed it.
Blessings,
~Nic
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Sue,
This is lovely.
There is nothing as dear as being with family.
How very sad when they must leave.
"My son left his "Oi"!
Australian, that's my boy" -- this part made me smile. :)
Thank you for sharing your heart with us. This is a lovely descriptive poem of your love for your son. I enjoyed it.
Blessings,
~Nic
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
Comment from jmyron
Is your son a serviceman? If so I hope he stays well too. If not, I hope he stays well anyway. Good example of the quatrain form. write on
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Is your son a serviceman? If so I hope he stays well too. If not, I hope he stays well anyway. Good example of the quatrain form. write on
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
Comment from giftid3
Thanks for sharing your thoughts, view, concepts and heart with the rest of us.
The imagery that comes through this is a mother's love for a child who has 'left the nest' to venture out on his own, always loving even when tears are falling. A sadness flows through this not of regret or grief, but one that only a mother has, when her children finally move out into the world of their own; a sadness filled with fears of safety, wondering if they will meet again, what surprises are ahead for the child, and whether or not the nurturing given them was good enough to see them through life and all its hiccups.
Well expressed indeed. Many blessings to you
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Thanks for sharing your thoughts, view, concepts and heart with the rest of us.
The imagery that comes through this is a mother's love for a child who has 'left the nest' to venture out on his own, always loving even when tears are falling. A sadness flows through this not of regret or grief, but one that only a mother has, when her children finally move out into the world of their own; a sadness filled with fears of safety, wondering if they will meet again, what surprises are ahead for the child, and whether or not the nurturing given them was good enough to see them through life and all its hiccups.
Well expressed indeed. Many blessings to you
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
Comment from TamaraTel
this is a great Quatrain poem. All flowed wonderfully and the rhymes did not sound forced in the least. That is too bad your son lives far away and you only see him for holidays. Good luck in the contest.
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this is a great Quatrain poem. All flowed wonderfully and the rhymes did not sound forced in the least. That is too bad your son lives far away and you only see him for holidays. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
Comment from Firefly54
I loved this quintrain. Never realised or would have considered the possibility of altering the rhyme pattern between stanzas - it's an interesting idea (but not one that I'm ready to try just yet, lol) Good luck in the competition! Firefly
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I loved this quintrain. Never realised or would have considered the possibility of altering the rhyme pattern between stanzas - it's an interesting idea (but not one that I'm ready to try just yet, lol) Good luck in the competition! Firefly
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
Comment from CMowery
Wow, this is great. Full of emotion. This style of poetry seems very hard to do. I will have to try to write one soon. Good job!
~Christin
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Wow, this is great. Full of emotion. This style of poetry seems very hard to do. I will have to try to write one soon. Good job!
~Christin
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008