Comment from skye

Excellent

Great background chapter, filled with interesting details.

This introduction is well-written, no obvious SPAG, no errors.

Your build-up and intro of your characters is strong.

Can't wait to read more.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2008

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2008

Hi Skye------thank you---hope you get a chance to read prior chapters-----Doug

Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

cardiodoug,

I have been resting for a couple of days because of all of the reviews that I did over the course of three weeks. One night I was up until 5:30 am. It got to be a lot of work so I have been sleeping.

This chapter made for a nice read. The characters were easy to relate to. The descriptions were well written.

There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

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 Comment Written 03-Jan-2008

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2008

Thanks oatmeal------Be sure to get enough sleep---writing reviews is killer-----Doug