Caduceus
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Cassandra"cardiologist falsely accused of wrongful death
25 total reviews
Comment from michaelcahill
One of the best reads I have had on this site. I noticed that I am the 15th reviewer so I am proud that this will enable you some recognition for an excellent piece of writing. This is fiction and a tremendous tribute to your abilities as it reads as completely true. The dialogue always a difficult obstacle is completely authentic. The details make the reader feel as if they are in the scenes with the characters. The characters are wonderfully developed and we care deeply about their well being. Excellent writing indeed. Sorry I squandered my sixes but, I know that you will have plenty of stars in your sky for some time to come. mike
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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One of the best reads I have had on this site. I noticed that I am the 15th reviewer so I am proud that this will enable you some recognition for an excellent piece of writing. This is fiction and a tremendous tribute to your abilities as it reads as completely true. The dialogue always a difficult obstacle is completely authentic. The details make the reader feel as if they are in the scenes with the characters. The characters are wonderfully developed and we care deeply about their well being. Excellent writing indeed. Sorry I squandered my sixes but, I know that you will have plenty of stars in your sky for some time to come. mike
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Mike---you've written one of the most complimentary reviews I've ever received. Im humbled and inspired. Hope you'll continue reading Caduceus. Im posting a chapter today--Monday----Thanks again--doug
Comment from pickthorn
This is a very interesting story about little Cassandra, who has a medical problem that can't be diagnosed. Her parents are frantic as they seek help for their daughter.
This story is well written and retains the readers interest
throughout.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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This is a very interesting story about little Cassandra, who has a medical problem that can't be diagnosed. Her parents are frantic as they seek help for their daughter.
This story is well written and retains the readers interest
throughout.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hi PT---Love your comments. thank you. Hope you'll readmore. Im posting a chapter today--Monday----Doug
Comment from Selina Stambi
There was something really compelling about the chapter - I felt more and more attached to Cassie as the chapter played out.
The last line leaves the reader with the deep sense of foreboding.
The 1940's .... what a blessing that medical science has progressed so much since then.
I'd love to know more - I have a feeling it's going to be painful to read, though.
Have a great weekend, doug. Nice to meet you.
Sonali
Spags:
her parents' (not parent's) bedroom.
Cassie was nowhere (not no where) in sight
reassured the Conti's (Contis - no apostrophe required) that their
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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There was something really compelling about the chapter - I felt more and more attached to Cassie as the chapter played out.
The last line leaves the reader with the deep sense of foreboding.
The 1940's .... what a blessing that medical science has progressed so much since then.
I'd love to know more - I have a feeling it's going to be painful to read, though.
Have a great weekend, doug. Nice to meet you.
Sonali
Spags:
her parents' (not parent's) bedroom.
Cassie was nowhere (not no where) in sight
reassured the Conti's (Contis - no apostrophe required) that their
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Sonali--thanks for wonderful review and corrections on spag. I'll make appropriate changes. Novel is 45 chapters long. I intend to post nes chapter every 4 days or so. Hope you'll keep reading. Thank you-Doug
Comment from Eleanor Buron
the dialog moves the chapter along quite effectively. The dialog, and of course, Carlo's thoughts, build up a sense of foreboding. this creates a nice pull into the next chapter. The reader wants more. The chapter has a firm setting, the characters are believable and the story line holds the reader's interest throughout. Unless something slipped by me I didn't come across any typos or grammatical errors. Well written.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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the dialog moves the chapter along quite effectively. The dialog, and of course, Carlo's thoughts, build up a sense of foreboding. this creates a nice pull into the next chapter. The reader wants more. The chapter has a firm setting, the characters are believable and the story line holds the reader's interest throughout. Unless something slipped by me I didn't come across any typos or grammatical errors. Well written.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thanks eleanor---very nice review. Hope you'll read more-Doug
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I'm glad I got in on the early side - I will try to keep up with this one. E
Comment from lindalcreel
Maybe they should have dine a stress test or heart cath on her. At the very least a CT of the chest. It's definitely not normal for a child to become s short of breath. Maybe they should listen to Cassie, she seems to know what going on with her body. Many parents don't want to admit that there is an underlying problem, serious enough to make her stop breathing. My heart goes out ot that little girl. she knows her limitations; they should just let her live. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2013
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Maybe they should have dine a stress test or heart cath on her. At the very least a CT of the chest. It's definitely not normal for a child to become s short of breath. Maybe they should listen to Cassie, she seems to know what going on with her body. Many parents don't want to admit that there is an underlying problem, serious enough to make her stop breathing. My heart goes out ot that little girl. she knows her limitations; they should just let her live. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2013
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Thank you linda---I'm a cardiologist. Stress tests and card cardiac caths didn't exist in 1952. First cardiac cath was in early sixties. Stress tests on treadmills didn't exist until sixty's. Thank you very much for 5 stars. Hope you'll read next 45 chapters. Love ---Doug
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I knew that you had a medical background. I just returned from nursing a few months ago, and still don't have enough hours in the day. At least I retired early and I don't miss setting that alarm clock, though most of the time I don't get to sleep till the wee hours of the morning anyway. Thanks for sharing. Will look forward to the next posts.
Comment from cynthia s
I was sucked in right away. There is a genuine message about the heart, I want to know where this goes. The characters have real life and I can feel the light snow, good descriptions. Also, the voices are very real. More, please
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2013
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I was sucked in right away. There is a genuine message about the heart, I want to know where this goes. The characters have real life and I can feel the light snow, good descriptions. Also, the voices are very real. More, please
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2013
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Cynthia----thank you for your kind comments. Novel has 45 chapters. Hope you can read them all. I'llpost a new chapter every 3-4 days. Thanks again----Doug
Comment from Juana
Brilliant. Loving the development of the story. Even with all the detail, the writing stays coherant and flows nicely. I was impressed with the snowman. He was a work of genius, great visual.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2008
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Brilliant. Loving the development of the story. Even with all the detail, the writing stays coherant and flows nicely. I was impressed with the snowman. He was a work of genius, great visual.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2008
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Hi Juana----THANK YOU----great review---hope you can read more----Doug
Comment from babylonia
the things people must have went through before modern technology. easy to read and follow. this is definitely another good chapter. i did see a few spag but they are easily fixed.
for treating Marie and him as overly anxious parents who were (no apostrophe needed here) a minor problem.
wow~ blood gas test being new in the 40s. today they are standard for someone with cassie's symptoms. good information here and description. even if i had no medical training i would understand this part. good job.
i can't wait till the next chapter.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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the things people must have went through before modern technology. easy to read and follow. this is definitely another good chapter. i did see a few spag but they are easily fixed.
for treating Marie and him as overly anxious parents who were (no apostrophe needed here) a minor problem.
wow~ blood gas test being new in the 40s. today they are standard for someone with cassie's symptoms. good information here and description. even if i had no medical training i would understand this part. good job.
i can't wait till the next chapter.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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Hi again----I corrected the spag you noted---please see my prior replies. You've inspired me.---Doug
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you are welcome. take care.
babylonia
Comment from m723d
Great story. I liked the story. The dialogue helped the story to flow. The story about the little girl was heart-warming. I found no typos.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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Great story. I liked the story. The dialogue helped the story to flow. The story about the little girl was heart-warming. I found no typos.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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Hi m723d----Thanks for nice comments. I really appreciate your support. I've been working on this novel on and off for many years. I've always doubted my abilities and the quality of my work and have many long periods away from writing. I've never had any objective feed back until now. You and many other reviewers have given me great support. It will definitely encourage me to complete my manuscript ASAP. There will be approximately 40 chapters. I have only five more to write. Thanks again. I hope you'll find the time to read the entire work.---------Doug
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Cardio,
Nice write.
Geez - you have me curious as to what's up with this child's heart!
Nicely done - nothing here to edit that I can discern.
Thanks for sharing.
Happy New Year,
Jan
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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Hi Cardio,
Nice write.
Geez - you have me curious as to what's up with this child's heart!
Nicely done - nothing here to edit that I can discern.
Thanks for sharing.
Happy New Year,
Jan
Comment Written 31-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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jan--thanks again--please see my other reply.---Doug
