Caduceus
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Carlo"cardiologist falsely accused of wrongful death
16 total reviews
Comment from Blaidd Drwg
What an awful dream. So vividly and realistically written. You had my heart pounding!
There's absolutely nothing I have to say by way of critique. Well done.
John
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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What an awful dream. So vividly and realistically written. You had my heart pounding!
There's absolutely nothing I have to say by way of critique. Well done.
John
Comment Written 31-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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Hi John---please see prior replies-----I look forward to your reviews.----Doug
Comment from Oatmeal
cardiodoug,
I enjoyed this chapter but I was on the edge of my seat for 99% of it! LOL You are an excellent author and I will sign up to review more of your work. The story line was strong. The characters were realistic. You definitely got my attention.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2007
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cardiodoug,
I enjoyed this chapter but I was on the edge of my seat for 99% of it! LOL You are an excellent author and I will sign up to review more of your work. The story line was strong. The characters were realistic. You definitely got my attention.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 31-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2007
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Hi Oatmeal----Thanks for great review. I'll be posting Chapters two and three today. Hope you'll get a chance to read them----Doug
Comment from babylonia
i only see one small spag. Hot summer air rushed by. (change buy to by) easy to read and follow. this really had me sitting on the edge of my seat in fear. imagery is excellent. definitely a good read. keep up the good work~
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2007
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i only see one small spag. Hot summer air rushed by. (change buy to by) easy to read and follow. this really had me sitting on the edge of my seat in fear. imagery is excellent. definitely a good read. keep up the good work~
Comment Written 29-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2007
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Hi babylonia---thanks for note on spag--i'll correct it--alsothanks for great comments---please look for chapter 2--will be posted on Sunday----12-30-07---thanks again --hope you'll read entire novel----Doug
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i will definitely be looking for the next chapter. you are welcome.
babylonia
Comment from Bri Rude
wow, that was scary...haha, wasnt expecting THAT ending.
well, even though you didnt get my adrenaline running (im super tired, otherwise...), you got me excited.
well done!
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2007
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wow, that was scary...haha, wasnt expecting THAT ending.
well, even though you didnt get my adrenaline running (im super tired, otherwise...), you got me excited.
well done!
Comment Written 28-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2007
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Hi Bri---thanks for great comments---please look for chapter 2--will be posted on Sunday----12-30-07---thanks again --hope you'll read entire novel----Doug
Comment from Rizalbob
Dear Cardiodoug,
My God! You had me there! Thank God it was only a dream! Lucky thing I didn't break my mouse in the palm of my hand while reading your story!
It was a suspense all the way. Did it grabbed my interest? Of course it did - I almost forgot to breathe. I thought I was in the water with Carlo. And that ride down the hill with no brakes almost kill me!
The dialogues were believable and the characters real.
Definitely, I would like to recommend it to someone else.
A very good work indeed. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2007
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Dear Cardiodoug,
My God! You had me there! Thank God it was only a dream! Lucky thing I didn't break my mouse in the palm of my hand while reading your story!
It was a suspense all the way. Did it grabbed my interest? Of course it did - I almost forgot to breathe. I thought I was in the water with Carlo. And that ride down the hill with no brakes almost kill me!
The dialogues were believable and the characters real.
Definitely, I would like to recommend it to someone else.
A very good work indeed. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2007
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Hi Rizalbob--thanks for great comments---please look for chapter 2--will be posted on Sunday----12-30-07---thanks again --hope you'll read entire novel----Doug
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Is the book in print already? Sure, it would be a great read indeed.
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RB---Thanks---I hope to have manuscript completed within two months---will submit for publication in spring----Doug
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Cardiodoug, you almost gave me a MI! You did this so very well. What a wonderfully written story. The only spag that I noted was
Were going to die! to We're going to die!
good job -- I look forward to reading more of this.
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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2007
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Cardiodoug, you almost gave me a MI! You did this so very well. What a wonderfully written story. The only spag that I noted was
Were going to die! to We're going to die!
good job -- I look forward to reading more of this.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2007
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Hi Mom 2----thanks for note on spag--i'll correct it---also,thanks for great comments---please look for chapter 2--will be posted on Sunday----12-30-07---thanks again --hope you'll read entire novel----Doug
