Trust
A thoughtful poem52 total reviews
Comment from ESOSTINE
Your poem focuses on the relevance of trust, and its connection with pride in building a healthy relationship, where 'beauty, peace and hope can reside'. This is well rendered. Thanks so much, dear Jesse for sharing your thoughts.
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Your poem focuses on the relevance of trust, and its connection with pride in building a healthy relationship, where 'beauty, peace and hope can reside'. This is well rendered. Thanks so much, dear Jesse for sharing your thoughts.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a carefully coordinated poem full of true statements and a first line that sounds inviting in spite of using a declaratory statement. This is a delightful poem. I had to stop and think if 'pride' was more like 'healthy self-esteem' when reading and re-reading the poem.
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This is a carefully coordinated poem full of true statements and a first line that sounds inviting in spite of using a declaratory statement. This is a delightful poem. I had to stop and think if 'pride' was more like 'healthy self-esteem' when reading and re-reading the poem.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
Comment from Brenda Strauser
Hi Jesse, I enjoyed your poem. Some of the lines I like are: trust is a must in a relationship. How true those words are. I also like the last line:where beauty, hope and peace reside. It would be nice if all relationships were like that. Well written, my friend. Brenda
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Hi Jesse, I enjoyed your poem. Some of the lines I like are: trust is a must in a relationship. How true those words are. I also like the last line:where beauty, hope and peace reside. It would be nice if all relationships were like that. Well written, my friend. Brenda
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Jesse!
What I so appreciate about your free verse offering is its emphasis on "trust" in a relationship.
"Trust" has been, and continues to be, the foundation my marriage to my husband of nearly 46 years...
And I have surely witnessed what the lack of trust can do to destroy many relationships.
Wondering about the line: "Decide FOR pride..." Each time I read that line I keep inserting "Decide WITH pride,,," Just a thought...
Thank you for sharing, Jesse!
fondly,
diane
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Hello, Jesse!
What I so appreciate about your free verse offering is its emphasis on "trust" in a relationship.
"Trust" has been, and continues to be, the foundation my marriage to my husband of nearly 46 years...
And I have surely witnessed what the lack of trust can do to destroy many relationships.
Wondering about the line: "Decide FOR pride..." Each time I read that line I keep inserting "Decide WITH pride,,," Just a thought...
Thank you for sharing, Jesse!
fondly,
diane
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
Comment from Michele Harber
Jesse, you always use the most interesting rhyme schemes in your poetry. I like the rhyme in the first line of your first verse, and the double rhyme in the first line of your second verse, and I certainly didn't miss that every one of those rhymes in the first line of the second verse rhymes the first and last lines of the third verse.
I like the idea of acknowledging both trust and pride as necessary for a healthy relationship. Trust is a given, but pride counts on multiple levels, as you want to be proud of your partner and of your relationship, but you also want to have pride in yourself. You can't expect anyone else to have pride in you if you don't have pride in yourself.
I enjoyed the way you tackled trust and pride separately in your first two verses, then united them in the last verse, as they would have to unite to form a successful relationship.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Jesse, you always use the most interesting rhyme schemes in your poetry. I like the rhyme in the first line of your first verse, and the double rhyme in the first line of your second verse, and I certainly didn't miss that every one of those rhymes in the first line of the second verse rhymes the first and last lines of the third verse.
I like the idea of acknowledging both trust and pride as necessary for a healthy relationship. Trust is a given, but pride counts on multiple levels, as you want to be proud of your partner and of your relationship, but you also want to have pride in yourself. You can't expect anyone else to have pride in you if you don't have pride in yourself.
I enjoyed the way you tackled trust and pride separately in your first two verses, then united them in the last verse, as they would have to unite to form a successful relationship.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Hello Michele. You nailed it with your understanding of the need for pride in your partner, your relationship, and yourself. You always carefully read and reread my posts to get the most out of them, and I appreciate this about you.
Many of my readers didn't get the significance of pride and trust being together as equally important, but you did, and I love that about you. I also love that you notice my internal and external rhymes. My favorite verse is the last one, as it ties the two concepts in a bow, uniting them both together.
Thanks for taking the time to give a detailed review of this poem.
I appreciate you and your friendship.
Jesse
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My pleasure on all counts, Jesse, from the review to the friendship. If you don’t read and review a work thoroughly, why do it at all?
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I agree. Many readers glance at the poem and claim the member dollars without reading the post thoroughly.
All the more reason why I appreciate you, my friend.
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Aww, thank you.
Comment from Noreen Bernardo
This is a heartfelt and meaningful poem. I once heard that a couple should be in relationship for 4 seasons before committing to marriage. People change in due season and trust is at the top of the list. We'll done!
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This is a heartfelt and meaningful poem. I once heard that a couple should be in relationship for 4 seasons before committing to marriage. People change in due season and trust is at the top of the list. We'll done!
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
Comment from Nicki.B
This is really lovely Jesse. A poem about trust, a trait that's required both ways in all relationships whether with a partner or kid or sibling. We have to be honest and kind. It's a wonderful message conveyed in a beautifully presented poem, with complimentary image of lovely dolphins.
Well done and thanks for sharing.
Best Wishes
Nicki x
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This is really lovely Jesse. A poem about trust, a trait that's required both ways in all relationships whether with a partner or kid or sibling. We have to be honest and kind. It's a wonderful message conveyed in a beautifully presented poem, with complimentary image of lovely dolphins.
Well done and thanks for sharing.
Best Wishes
Nicki x
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
Comment from jmdg1954
Jesse,
What a warm, heart felt poem that depicts the essence of a solid relationship!
Your words were chosen perfectly and your poem read smoothly.
Thank you for sharing and this would've been a good contest entry.
Cheers,
John
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Jesse,
What a warm, heart felt poem that depicts the essence of a solid relationship!
Your words were chosen perfectly and your poem read smoothly.
Thank you for sharing and this would've been a good contest entry.
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
Comment from Tim Margetts
Your poem has a gentle, affirming tone that I really liked, Jesse.
There's a quiet sincerity in how you link trust, pride, and love-it feels like advice from someone who's lived it. The simplicity works well, especially in the closing lines where "beauty, peace / and hope can reside" lands with soft emotional weight.
I liked what you did with the structure, too-short, deliberate lines that create a sense of thoughtfulness. That said, I wonder if a little more specificity might strengthen the emotional pull. For instance, "desirable amount of bonding" feels a touch clinical-maybe something more tactile or personal could help that image connect more deeply.
Overall though, it's a warm and reflective piece. There's honesty here, and that's always a good foundation. With just a bit more detail or imagery, it could resonate even more.
Thanks for sharing it.
Tim
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Your poem has a gentle, affirming tone that I really liked, Jesse.
There's a quiet sincerity in how you link trust, pride, and love-it feels like advice from someone who's lived it. The simplicity works well, especially in the closing lines where "beauty, peace / and hope can reside" lands with soft emotional weight.
I liked what you did with the structure, too-short, deliberate lines that create a sense of thoughtfulness. That said, I wonder if a little more specificity might strengthen the emotional pull. For instance, "desirable amount of bonding" feels a touch clinical-maybe something more tactile or personal could help that image connect more deeply.
Overall though, it's a warm and reflective piece. There's honesty here, and that's always a good foundation. With just a bit more detail or imagery, it could resonate even more.
Thanks for sharing it.
Tim
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and well written poem about trust you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very beautiful imagery. I hope all is going well for you my friend! Blessings, Teri
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This is a very nice and well written poem about trust you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very beautiful imagery. I hope all is going well for you my friend! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
