Willing Hearts
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "Chapter 29 B Wiling Hearts"Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?
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Comment from lancellot
Nice chapter. Not sure about the enemies thing. There are lots of cops, DEA, FBI and such that have families. He's not Spiderman.
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"I left my jacket in the car. If we have time to walk along the seawall, I'll remember it.["]
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He leaned over and kissed her forehead. "Everything all right?"
- I think you should count how many times people ask this about your female protagonist. You may be surprised.
"I promised your dad, I'd keep you safe. That includes safe from me. I'll see you in the morning."
-But you never explain why she wouldn't be safe. Especially, if the marry someday. Not, saying the have to do anything, but for adults there should be a reason. A normal woman has needs and would think, she isn't desired.
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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Nice chapter. Not sure about the enemies thing. There are lots of cops, DEA, FBI and such that have families. He's not Spiderman.
notes:
"I left my jacket in the car. If we have time to walk along the seawall, I'll remember it.["]
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He leaned over and kissed her forehead. "Everything all right?"
- I think you should count how many times people ask this about your female protagonist. You may be surprised.
"I promised your dad, I'd keep you safe. That includes safe from me. I'll see you in the morning."
-But you never explain why she wouldn't be safe. Especially, if the marry someday. Not, saying the have to do anything, but for adults there should be a reason. A normal woman has needs and would think, she isn't desired.
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Thank you for the kind review. I made the corrections.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I am glad you had time with your family. I read 50 and 51. It is hard to believe there are only two more chapters. I wrote m y western story. it only took two years! LOL Next challenge is a Boography. Love to you and yours. Karen
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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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I am glad you had time with your family. I read 50 and 51. It is hard to believe there are only two more chapters. I wrote m y western story. it only took two years! LOL Next challenge is a Boography. Love to you and yours. Karen
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Thank you for the kind review. I can't wait to read your western.
