Body of a Horse, Heart of a Man
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "A Garden Journey"A modern twist on Greek Mythology.
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Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine chapter, Rhonda. They way you described Artrius, I'm neither gay or a veterinarian, but I find myself strangely attracted to him, lol!
No, but I'll bet Diantha wishes she was a saddle. "Mount up, Artrius!" Sorry, too graphic?
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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Another fine chapter, Rhonda. They way you described Artrius, I'm neither gay or a veterinarian, but I find myself strangely attracted to him, lol!
No, but I'll bet Diantha wishes she was a saddle. "Mount up, Artrius!" Sorry, too graphic?
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Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Hehe, you're a hoot, my friend!! Thanks for the review and chuckle!!
Rhonda
Comment from Sally Law
She's Back!!!! Oh, this is marvelous, my talented friend, and SO romantic! I really enjoyed seeing these two in their (somewhat) humble estate. Love is obviously blooming between the two. Beautifully written and presented and worth more than a six!
Sending you my best today as always, and Love & Blessings across the bridge.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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She's Back!!!! Oh, this is marvelous, my talented friend, and SO romantic! I really enjoyed seeing these two in their (somewhat) humble estate. Love is obviously blooming between the two. Beautifully written and presented and worth more than a six!
Sending you my best today as always, and Love & Blessings across the bridge.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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Dearest Sally,
Thank you so much for the coveted six stars, my friend!! I'm glad you liked the romantic nod. I hit it early in this book, but it won't come easy with them, especially after he takes her to the village. Life has a way of complicating romance, lol.
Much love across the bridge,
Rhonda
Comment from Pam (respa)
Excellent artwork and story to go with it, Rhonda. You do a good job with the rapport between Atrius and Diantha. He is very gentle with her when waking her up. He has an interesting observation about her reaction to the garden, "like he had seen it before." I imagine he is filled with many different emotions since being made into a centaur. You do a good job describing Diantha's reaction to him, noticing how handsome he was.
Atrius lets Diantha know a little bit about his family and how they weren't like him in appearance, but cared for him like he was a son. He is very honest with his feelings about his own family.
The last part of the story is done very well as Atrius responds to Diantha's question about wishing he wasn't a centaur. I think she was impressed. I like your description, " he was now the substance of legends." And with that, he reversed her question. Very well done.
One small thing about "fitted an arrow from the quiver..." I don't know what a better word is, but what he fit it into is missing and could be made more clear.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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Excellent artwork and story to go with it, Rhonda. You do a good job with the rapport between Atrius and Diantha. He is very gentle with her when waking her up. He has an interesting observation about her reaction to the garden, "like he had seen it before." I imagine he is filled with many different emotions since being made into a centaur. You do a good job describing Diantha's reaction to him, noticing how handsome he was.
Atrius lets Diantha know a little bit about his family and how they weren't like him in appearance, but cared for him like he was a son. He is very honest with his feelings about his own family.
The last part of the story is done very well as Atrius responds to Diantha's question about wishing he wasn't a centaur. I think she was impressed. I like your description, " he was now the substance of legends." And with that, he reversed her question. Very well done.
One small thing about "fitted an arrow from the quiver..." I don't know what a better word is, but what he fit it into is missing and could be made more clear.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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Hi Pam,
Thank you so very much for the beautiful six star rating.
I'm glad the rapport came across as subtle, yet present.
The honesty Atrius shows is one of his hallmarks and will show up again. He's blunt at times, but tries to soften his remarks.
I changed up the part about the bow and quiver. I hope it flows better. The other was a bit bulky.
Thanks again, my friend,
Rhonda
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Rhonda. Thanks for sharing your comments about Atrius and the changes. I will take a look at them, but it sounds good.
Comment from Begin Again
Perfect! First, because you are writing again, possibly Wayne is finding his strength again, and you as well. Second, the description of the garden flowers is magical and inviting, topped with the attraction between Atrius and Diantha. It sends a calming yet rippling tingle through the reader. Well done! Hope you are in a good space!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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Perfect! First, because you are writing again, possibly Wayne is finding his strength again, and you as well. Second, the description of the garden flowers is magical and inviting, topped with the attraction between Atrius and Diantha. It sends a calming yet rippling tingle through the reader. Well done! Hope you are in a good space!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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Hi Carol,
Thank you so much for the generous six stars, my friend!!
It definitely felt good writing the fantasy chapter. I actually had to go back an reread a bit to get the flow again, but it felt good!!
I'm in a good space, though Wayne isn't so much. He's home and I'm staying home from work to help him, so have a little more time on my hands!!
Big hugs,
Rhonda
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I'm glad to see you writing again, but I'm so sorry that Wayne is struggling. Tis the season for miracles so we'll pray that blessings are sprinkled across your family.
Lots of hugs and love, Carol
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Awww, thanks so much, Carol. It's to be expected, which is the message I was trying to get across. Sometimes people think someone survived, so all is well, yet there are so many who have lingering effects!!
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm so happy to see you back writing your story, that must mean Wayne is on the mend, slowly, but going in the right direction. :))
This was a lovely, soothing chapter, Rhonda, I could almost smell those flowers. I felt Atrius's pain as he showed Diantha his parents and family's graves. That he still has a son, is lovely. Diantha is under his spell in a nice way, but I don't know how a romance could work between them, I will have to wait and see as the story progresses. I really enjoyed this chapter, my friend. Very well done! Love and hugs, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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I'm so happy to see you back writing your story, that must mean Wayne is on the mend, slowly, but going in the right direction. :))
This was a lovely, soothing chapter, Rhonda, I could almost smell those flowers. I felt Atrius's pain as he showed Diantha his parents and family's graves. That he still has a son, is lovely. Diantha is under his spell in a nice way, but I don't know how a romance could work between them, I will have to wait and see as the story progresses. I really enjoyed this chapter, my friend. Very well done! Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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Dear Sandra,
Thank you so much for the six stars!! You are so sweet!!
Wayne is currently home from the hospital, but has a long way before he is out of the woods. I am staying home from work to help take care of him. Hopefully, before my job gives up on me, he will get well enough to be self-sufficient. Not there, yet.
I'm glad the chapter went well. I needed the journey, too. Yeah, the romance part may gave to be academic for the present, this the title of the book, lol. But, as with all of us fantasy writers, we find a way to fix things, lol.
Good to hear from you,
love and hugs back
Rhonda
