2024 Gypsy's Prose
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "The Long Night".
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Comment from Julie Helms
This is a fascinating form, combining prose with poetry as an intentional device.
I have several suggestions for correction:
I was sure, Kamala was going to win.
(No comma: I was sure Kamala... Kamala is the object of the sentence so no need to see it off with comma.)
In 3 months, she accomplished more
(Convention is to spell out numbers under 10. In three months, she...)
she accomplished more than other *dandidates* do in a year.
(candidates)
Thank you for sharing this new-to-me form of writing.
Julie
:-)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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This is a fascinating form, combining prose with poetry as an intentional device.
I have several suggestions for correction:
I was sure, Kamala was going to win.
(No comma: I was sure Kamala... Kamala is the object of the sentence so no need to see it off with comma.)
In 3 months, she accomplished more
(Convention is to spell out numbers under 10. In three months, she...)
she accomplished more than other *dandidates* do in a year.
(candidates)
Thank you for sharing this new-to-me form of writing.
Julie
:-)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much, Julie. I always appreciate help with my grammar.
Thank you for the kind and helpful review. 😊
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
It was so wrong of the Republicans to place a felon as their candidate for this office. They were going with pure name recognition. May they be ashamed for what they did to our country. I emailed you because I know how hard this is for all of us who were hoping for a person of integrity. People chose to believe lies instead of truth.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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It was so wrong of the Republicans to place a felon as their candidate for this office. They were going with pure name recognition. May they be ashamed for what they did to our country. I emailed you because I know how hard this is for all of us who were hoping for a person of integrity. People chose to believe lies instead of truth.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind and helpful review, big sister. I'm having a hard time but doing what I can to move on.
Love you,
MariVal
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❤️💖💞🙏🙏 God's bigger.
Comment from Lindsey Russell
Sometimes the state of affairs in this country is very difficult to swallow. I really feel that. Thank you for sharing this with us. There will be brighter days. God is in control and hope is hard to kill. Happy writing!
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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Sometimes the state of affairs in this country is very difficult to swallow. I really feel that. Thank you for sharing this with us. There will be brighter days. God is in control and hope is hard to kill. Happy writing!
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind and helpful review. 😊
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Carol Clark2
Interesting commentary on the election, Gypsy. And your Gogyohka is nicely optimistic. I am praying for the future of our country, and that Trump's actions will be restrained somewhat. Blessings. Carol
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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Interesting commentary on the election, Gypsy. And your Gogyohka is nicely optimistic. I am praying for the future of our country, and that Trump's actions will be restrained somewhat. Blessings. Carol
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind and helpful review. 😊
Gypsy hugs
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You're welcome, Gypsy. My pleasure.