Halloween at Ghost Lake
A Halloween Horror Poem21 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I think you nailed the horror of it and even added some supernatural stuff to make the very place where the horror took place to cause problems for some spectators who even view the place. Best wishes in the contest!
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I think you nailed the horror of it and even added some supernatural stuff to make the very place where the horror took place to cause problems for some spectators who even view the place. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Okay, you win. This is about as haunting and memorable (you know the kind of memorable that comes to mind when you're home alone and hear a noise that doesn't fit the scene?...) I'm sitting here ensconced in gooseflesh, and I'm pretty sure the little bubbles spell out Damn you, Beth Shelby!!"
This was MEGA-creepy. I expect to see it in the Winner's Circle! Good luck. xoxox
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Okay, you win. This is about as haunting and memorable (you know the kind of memorable that comes to mind when you're home alone and hear a noise that doesn't fit the scene?...) I'm sitting here ensconced in gooseflesh, and I'm pretty sure the little bubbles spell out Damn you, Beth Shelby!!"
This was MEGA-creepy. I expect to see it in the Winner's Circle! Good luck. xoxox
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Hi Beth, This is a truly haunting and at verse for the contest and will do well. In an attempt to get a better iambic pentameter I've made a few suggestions below. Remember to get the stress on the even beat and never on a 'the' or 'a' but don't worry unnecessarily because I'm sure it will be judged on the content as opposed to the meter... Good luck! Debbie
reverberates across the frozen lake (10 syllables with the stress on the correct syllable)
and leave uneasy stillness in their wake
devoured it then to leave her where she lay
(So) many suitors sought to win her (hand)
The townfolk used (their) hounds to track her slayer (11syllables but ok)
No mercy did they show this (wicked) thug
and nameless buried him in shallow grave
The night unfit to tempt the spirits back
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Hi Beth, This is a truly haunting and at verse for the contest and will do well. In an attempt to get a better iambic pentameter I've made a few suggestions below. Remember to get the stress on the even beat and never on a 'the' or 'a' but don't worry unnecessarily because I'm sure it will be judged on the content as opposed to the meter... Good luck! Debbie
reverberates across the frozen lake (10 syllables with the stress on the correct syllable)
and leave uneasy stillness in their wake
devoured it then to leave her where she lay
(So) many suitors sought to win her (hand)
The townfolk used (their) hounds to track her slayer (11syllables but ok)
No mercy did they show this (wicked) thug
and nameless buried him in shallow grave
The night unfit to tempt the spirits back
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
Comment from Ulla
But you seem so very well at this, Beth. You have written a wonderful poem for the Halloween poetry contest. It's frightening. How you do it I just don't know. All the best of luck. Ulla xcx
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But you seem so very well at this, Beth. You have written a wonderful poem for the Halloween poetry contest. It's frightening. How you do it I just don't know. All the best of luck. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
Comment from Jacob1395
You describe this scene so well, Beth. This doesn't seem like the place anyone would want to be on Halloween night, or any night, I can imagine how terrifying this place is. An excellent piece, Beth. Good luck in the contest.
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You describe this scene so well, Beth. This doesn't seem like the place anyone would want to be on Halloween night, or any night, I can imagine how terrifying this place is. An excellent piece, Beth. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
Comment from jim vecchio
This is quite a haunting Halloween poem. Didn't know you had it in you! Should do very well in the contest. Are you sure you're the one who writes all those wonderful stories of bygone days?
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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This is quite a haunting Halloween poem. Didn't know you had it in you! Should do very well in the contest. Are you sure you're the one who writes all those wonderful stories of bygone days?
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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I reworked a poem I wrote several years ago and tried to make in into a Halloween poem. I hate horror and don't even like to read it. I feel a little guilty for writing this one. But I can be versatile, if I need too. I trying to do the challenges.
Beth
Comment from Teri7
Beth, This is a scary poem you have penned for the contest. I don't usually read Halloween poems or stories. You did a great job with this one. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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Beth, This is a scary poem you have penned for the contest. I don't usually read Halloween poems or stories. You did a great job with this one. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
Comment from Begin Again
Bravo, Beth! Every line led us deeper and deeper into the horror, and the curse wrapped around us--a powerful and creepy story for the Halloween season. Well done, and I wish you well in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
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Bravo, Beth! Every line led us deeper and deeper into the horror, and the curse wrapped around us--a powerful and creepy story for the Halloween season. Well done, and I wish you well in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this Halloween contest entry with us. You told a great story/poem with this entry. It may not be your cup of tea, but I'd say you nailed it. Good luck with the contest.
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Thank you for sharing this Halloween contest entry with us. You told a great story/poem with this entry. It may not be your cup of tea, but I'd say you nailed it. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
Comment from royowen
Yes, we don't know what can finally happen when we curse something or someone, that curse may stick. The power of of the tongue is really an unknown thing that can unleash blessing or a curse, beautifully written Beth, blessings Roy
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Yes, we don't know what can finally happen when we curse something or someone, that curse may stick. The power of of the tongue is really an unknown thing that can unleash blessing or a curse, beautifully written Beth, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 30-Oct-2024