At Home in Mississippi
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What a dreadful experience all round! Nearly drowning and then being as sick as a dog. I somehow thought that discussion with your mother about a new bathing suit was going to lead to something unpleasant. And the very mention of sulphur certainly makes me feel very ill. Another entertaining read. Thank you, Beth. Take care Debbie
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my dad agree(d) to drive..
surrounded by five boys (with whom)..
she b(r)ought in a chamber-pot
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What a dreadful experience all round! Nearly drowning and then being as sick as a dog. I somehow thought that discussion with your mother about a new bathing suit was going to lead to something unpleasant. And the very mention of sulphur certainly makes me feel very ill. Another entertaining read. Thank you, Beth. Take care Debbie
never making below (an) A
my dad agree(d) to drive..
surrounded by five boys (with whom)..
she b(r)ought in a chamber-pot
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
Comment from Charles D Ezell
Yes, I cannot take Sulphur drugs either. They placed me in the hospital when a soldier causing me to redo basic training over. You girs sound so typical. Nothing like a bunch of giggling girls. Good one Beth.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Yes, I cannot take Sulphur drugs either. They placed me in the hospital when a soldier causing me to redo basic training over. You girs sound so typical. Nothing like a bunch of giggling girls. Good one Beth.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Chuck. I really appreciate the six stars. There were some other kids that got sick from the sulfur. The ones who didn't live so far away to did go home. I really wasn't a giggler. Those girls always annoyed me. We didn't have a giggler in the group, but we did have Pat, who didn't know how to quit talking. She is still a friend and lives in Huber Springs, Arkansas. When she calls me, she talks non-stop for a couple of hours. I hardly get to say anything.
Comment from royowen
Oh, you poor thing, I'm so glad you survived the rigours of camp life. And we've been able to be blessed by your writing and your presence on fanstory Beth, it's a miracle you made it through the week, I agree with your dad, I would've hated one of my girls to be in that predicament, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Oh, you poor thing, I'm so glad you survived the rigours of camp life. And we've been able to be blessed by your writing and your presence on fanstory Beth, it's a miracle you made it through the week, I agree with your dad, I would've hated one of my girls to be in that predicament, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Roy. In spite of being very sick, I didn't want to leave.
I never got to go back. As usually appreciate your nice comments
Beth.
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I understand
Comment from Annmuma
Interesting story- I began to feel a little nauseous myself; the smell of sulfur makes me ill! lol. Well written and keeps the reader's interest from beginning to send. I did see a couple of typos: .....my dad agree.... --should be agreed. ....surrounded by five boys which we hadn't...... should be with whom we hadn't... instead of which. Good story. ann
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Interesting story- I began to feel a little nauseous myself; the smell of sulfur makes me ill! lol. Well written and keeps the reader's interest from beginning to send. I did see a couple of typos: .....my dad agree.... --should be agreed. ....surrounded by five boys which we hadn't...... should be with whom we hadn't... instead of which. Good story. ann
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Ann. I 'm glad you found this interesting. Thank for pointing out the typos.
Beth
Comment from Gayla putnam
I imagine this was a traumatic experience in your young life. However, it reads a little stiff. I think you could dramatize it more. You were sick, dehydrated, alone, and you could have died. Its a good story and with a little more work it could be even better. It's like it's written by a reporter rather than a young traumatized girl. I'm no fancy reviewer but this story has real potential. gayla
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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I imagine this was a traumatic experience in your young life. However, it reads a little stiff. I think you could dramatize it more. You were sick, dehydrated, alone, and you could have died. Its a good story and with a little more work it could be even better. It's like it's written by a reporter rather than a young traumatized girl. I'm no fancy reviewer but this story has real potential. gayla
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Gayla. I see you are new on FanStory. I hope you enjoy the site as much as I do.
Beth
Comment from Begin Again
That's a horrible way to spend any time, but summer vacation with friends and in bed alone...that's awful. I think I would have preferred to go home. I'm glad someone rescued you in the water, though. Boys that age could be so stupid.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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That's a horrible way to spend any time, but summer vacation with friends and in bed alone...that's awful. I think I would have preferred to go home. I'm glad someone rescued you in the water, though. Boys that age could be so stupid.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Carol. I'm I probably should have gone home but I kept thinking I'd get better. I appreciate the review.
Beth
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Oh that's a horrible experience to remember! Unfortunately, summer camps can be dangerous places, even with the adult supervision. Those boys were lucky they didn't end the summer with your deaths on their hands. Good story.
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Oh that's a horrible experience to remember! Unfortunately, summer camps can be dangerous places, even with the adult supervision. Those boys were lucky they didn't end the summer with your deaths on their hands. Good story.
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Marilyn. I know I would have really liked going to summer camp every year if it hadn't been for that sulfur water. I never got a chance to do it again.
Beth