Old Autumn Tree
A sonnet21 total reviews
Comment from RodG
A lovely sonnet describing a single old tree losing its burnished leaves. I especially like the analogy used to describe the sound of the wind "pushing leaves along," down "deserted halls." And your shift in focus to the single leaf the tree lets go "that began a spiral show." Your meter is flawless and your rhymes are well-chosen. Very, very nice!
Rod
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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A lovely sonnet describing a single old tree losing its burnished leaves. I especially like the analogy used to describe the sound of the wind "pushing leaves along," down "deserted halls." And your shift in focus to the single leaf the tree lets go "that began a spiral show." Your meter is flawless and your rhymes are well-chosen. Very, very nice!
Rod
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Hello Rod. Thank you so very much!! I really appreciate your lovely review.
Melissa
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My pleasure.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You championed the tree here as it battles with each season and becomes stronger along the way, retaining grace and dignity, a fine sonnet Melissa, perfect metre and rhymes, love Dolly x
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You championed the tree here as it battles with each season and becomes stronger along the way, retaining grace and dignity, a fine sonnet Melissa, perfect metre and rhymes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Hello there dear Dolly. Thank you so very much!! I really appreciate your lovely review. Your comments on sonnets are always something I take to heart because I consider you the 'Sonnet Queen' :). Hugs.
Melissa
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You inspired me so much with your Autumn sonnet, that I just had to write one! Love Dolly x
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is a lovely description of the tree, tired and old, but still putting on a beautiful autumn show. I love your use of colors and sounds, and the pirouetting twists of the leaves as they tumble down. Nicely written sonnet, with steady iambic pentameter and good rhyme scheme. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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This is a lovely description of the tree, tired and old, but still putting on a beautiful autumn show. I love your use of colors and sounds, and the pirouetting twists of the leaves as they tumble down. Nicely written sonnet, with steady iambic pentameter and good rhyme scheme. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Good morning Carol!! Thank you so very much!! I really appreciate your lovely review.
Melissa
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You're welcome, Melissa. I enjoyed your beautiful writing! Have a wonderful week. Carol
Comment from June Sargent
I find the Shakespearean sonnet challenging, but very pleasant to read. Your well chosen words created beautiful rhythm and rhyme. I also enjoyed the sentiments - aging well.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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I find the Shakespearean sonnet challenging, but very pleasant to read. Your well chosen words created beautiful rhythm and rhyme. I also enjoyed the sentiments - aging well.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Good Morning June :). Thank you so very much!! I really appreciate your lovely review.
Melissa
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written Shakespeare on it then I enjoyed very much listening to it. Your presentation is beautiful and may wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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This is a very well written Shakespeare on it then I enjoyed very much listening to it. Your presentation is beautiful and may wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Good morning Patricia. Thank you so very much!! I really appreciate your lovely review.
Melissa
Comment from Rachelle Allen
How absolutely luscious and beautiful this sonnet is! As always, your meter and rhyme are impeccable. I always read poetry posts aloud, and yours never-but-NEVER cause me to have a snag or a pause because of glitch with your flow. You are a seasoned professional, and that's why I always love it when I see "New Writing Online" and your name in my Inbox.
This one came with an equally gorgeous picture, too! Thank you for this beautiful gift today. xoxox
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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How absolutely luscious and beautiful this sonnet is! As always, your meter and rhyme are impeccable. I always read poetry posts aloud, and yours never-but-NEVER cause me to have a snag or a pause because of glitch with your flow. You are a seasoned professional, and that's why I always love it when I see "New Writing Online" and your name in my Inbox.
This one came with an equally gorgeous picture, too! Thank you for this beautiful gift today. xoxox
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Hello my friend. Thank you so very much!! I really appreciate your lovely review. I am so glad you liked this foray into a sonnet. I haven't written one in a while... but, the autumn foliage that is just starting has captured my imagination. Also, BIG CONGRATS! On being selected as Writer of the month... you so deserve it.
Melissa
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Thank you!! I appreciate the ❤️.
Xoxoxo
Comment from LJbutterfly
This poem so beautifully captures the majesty and dignity of a stately old tree that each year relinquishes its leaves to prepare for new life in the spring. Your description of the wind, ground and twigs, allows the reader to easily envision the scene, while you chosen picture intensifies the image. I enjoyed this Sonnet.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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This poem so beautifully captures the majesty and dignity of a stately old tree that each year relinquishes its leaves to prepare for new life in the spring. Your description of the wind, ground and twigs, allows the reader to easily envision the scene, while you chosen picture intensifies the image. I enjoyed this Sonnet.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Hello LJ. I hope you are enjoying a lovely morning. Thank you so very much!! I really appreciate your lovely review.
Melissa
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I loved most of what you wrote especially verse one; however I would reverse leaves and twigs in verse two as I never saw twigs pushed along and the sound denoted in V-2 made me think of leaves
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I loved most of what you wrote especially verse one; however I would reverse leaves and twigs in verse two as I never saw twigs pushed along and the sound denoted in V-2 made me think of leaves
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Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Hey Tom. Thanks so much. I did edit this piece and used your advice about the leaves bringing more sound than twigs. Good advice. I really appreciate your in depth review. Hugs.
Melissa
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Comment from Jesse James Doty
Yes, you have captured the essence of how seasons change, and like us, they grow older with each passing season. I love this Shakespearean sonnet and how you stick to the rules so effortlessly. You do a wonderful job and with the poem, you add a picture of a sad old tree with its leaves surrounding it so gracefully
Thanks for all of this magical poem.
Jesse
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Yes, you have captured the essence of how seasons change, and like us, they grow older with each passing season. I love this Shakespearean sonnet and how you stick to the rules so effortlessly. You do a wonderful job and with the poem, you add a picture of a sad old tree with its leaves surrounding it so gracefully
Thanks for all of this magical poem.
Jesse
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Good morning Jesse. I am honored you think this is a sixer. I haven't written a sonnet in a while, so it felt 'stumbly' (I know that's not a word LOL) Thank you so very much!! I really appreciate your lovely review.
Melissa
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You did a supreme job with this sonnet, Melissa. Keep up the good work.
Jesse
Comment from talented150
Your beautiful picture set the mood and tone of your poem. I loved your imagery of leaves falling like paper balls scuttling down the hallway, and again, "pirouetting to the ground." You are a great poet, and I enjoyed your poem very much.
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Your beautiful picture set the mood and tone of your poem. I loved your imagery of leaves falling like paper balls scuttling down the hallway, and again, "pirouetting to the ground." You are a great poet, and I enjoyed your poem very much.
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Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Thank you so very much!! I really appreciate your lovely review.
Melissa