Body of a Horse, Heart of a Man
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "A Strange Meeting"A modern twist on Greek Mythology.
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Diantha is definitely growing in confidence already and I could see quite an attitude developing, although hardly surprising given all she's been through. Now we understand where Phoebus/Atrius the centaur comes in. I was a little confused last week about the bullying stranger who was clearly all-man (so to speak). So your lovely story is gathering pace (in more ways than one) and Diantha, whether she likes it or not, will not be going home as they now have to flee from the Caracki! I can see the beginning of a love affair here (I'm so perceptive:)) This has all the elements of another great fantasy treat, Rhonda! Well done! Debbie
Behind the man (crounched) the beginnings of the mountain.... (I'm not sure of the meaning in this sentence)
After all (2 words)
soften(e)d
Atrius (made and) held eye contact (I think the 'made and' are redundant, sounding a wee bit awkward)
Figurative wolves can be quite fright(e)ning
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Diantha is definitely growing in confidence already and I could see quite an attitude developing, although hardly surprising given all she's been through. Now we understand where Phoebus/Atrius the centaur comes in. I was a little confused last week about the bullying stranger who was clearly all-man (so to speak). So your lovely story is gathering pace (in more ways than one) and Diantha, whether she likes it or not, will not be going home as they now have to flee from the Caracki! I can see the beginning of a love affair here (I'm so perceptive:)) This has all the elements of another great fantasy treat, Rhonda! Well done! Debbie
Behind the man (crounched) the beginnings of the mountain.... (I'm not sure of the meaning in this sentence)
After all (2 words)
soften(e)d
Atrius (made and) held eye contact (I think the 'made and' are redundant, sounding a wee bit awkward)
Figurative wolves can be quite fright(e)ning
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Hi Debbie,
Thank you so much for your six star reviews and discussion. Thank you, also, for finding the spag. So much this time!! I don't know where my head was, lol. Still, it was so helpful.
Yes, you are perceptive, but love will not have all the chance they will hope for. There are quite a few obstacles to overcome first, lol.
Also, the man chasing her will be explained as well. Remember the Specters from the last book?
Also, I think Diantha is going to prefer where she's staying to where she came from, though that place will re-emerge later.
Thanks again,
Rhonda
Comment from nomi338
I hope you know how much I am enjoying this story. It pains me to have to point out a slight mistake that does not hurt the story in any way. I copied the line it is: "No, it's not," Dianthus replied in surprise. "
Again, it does not hurt the story for me in any way. I only point it out as I wory that some other reviewer may not be kind or forgiving. Please continue with this awesome series of adventures. I love it. I really love it.
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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I hope you know how much I am enjoying this story. It pains me to have to point out a slight mistake that does not hurt the story in any way. I copied the line it is: "No, it's not," Dianthus replied in surprise. "
Again, it does not hurt the story for me in any way. I only point it out as I wory that some other reviewer may not be kind or forgiving. Please continue with this awesome series of adventures. I love it. I really love it.
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Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Hi Nolan,
Thank you so much for your review!! I appreciate you taking the time and effort. It never hurts my feelings for someone to find my mistakes. It's how we help each other!! I always miss things, no matter how hard I try not to.
Hugs,
Rhonda
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You are not alone. For instance, I misspelled the word worry. It happens to us all. You just keep on writing these fantastic episodes and I will keep right on reading, enjoying, and reviewing them.
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You encourage me, my friend!!
Comment from Jacob1395
That was a terrific end to your chapter, Rhonda. I get the feeling that Diantha is going to really struggle to trust anyone now, although I could feel a spark of chemistry between her and Atrius, I hope he is a friend and that her instincts that he is are correct. Another excellent chapter, I really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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That was a terrific end to your chapter, Rhonda. I get the feeling that Diantha is going to really struggle to trust anyone now, although I could feel a spark of chemistry between her and Atrius, I hope he is a friend and that her instincts that he is are correct. Another excellent chapter, I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Hi Jacob,
Thank you so much for the six star review, my friend!! I appreciate, as well, your remarks. I'm glad you're following the book.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Okay, now I see where this is going, remembering from your first post. I can't wait to read more.
He was smiling broadly like he was trying to prove he wasn't lying. (passive you can make it active, ' He smiled broadly, trying to prove he wasn't lying.')
"My friend Cassie and I were out for a ride when we were attacked by a really large man (friend,)
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Okay, now I see where this is going, remembering from your first post. I can't wait to read more.
He was smiling broadly like he was trying to prove he wasn't lying. (passive you can make it active, ' He smiled broadly, trying to prove he wasn't lying.')
"My friend Cassie and I were out for a ride when we were attacked by a really large man (friend,)
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Hi Barbara,
Thank you so very much for the six star review, my friend!! I'm glad you figured out the direction I'm heading. It's kind of hard to do when we space out our chapters, but it's a lot of work, for sure.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine chapter, Rhonda------Will Diatha's new horse torso friend turn out to be a lucky horshoe or the cloven hoof of an evil pack animal? Tune in next chapter for the answer to this and many other burning questions!
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reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Another fine chapter, Rhonda------Will Diatha's new horse torso friend turn out to be a lucky horshoe or the cloven hoof of an evil pack animal? Tune in next chapter for the answer to this and many other burning questions!
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Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Hehehe, Mike, I should add your comments in the author's notes!! Love it!!! He's a good-guy, lol, but sometimes those are the ones that get you in the most trouble!!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Sally Law
Oh, this is SO romantic and thrilling. They meet and he takes her for a ride. I thought Atrius was Phoebus in another form. Their hearts are definitely made for each other. Real love grows in time. Beautifully done and illustrated, my talented friend. A treat for my Sunday read.
Sending you my best today as always, Rhonda dear, and Love & Blessings abundant.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Oh, this is SO romantic and thrilling. They meet and he takes her for a ride. I thought Atrius was Phoebus in another form. Their hearts are definitely made for each other. Real love grows in time. Beautifully done and illustrated, my talented friend. A treat for my Sunday read.
Sending you my best today as always, Rhonda dear, and Love & Blessings abundant.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Hi Sally, you romantic, you! Atrius and Phoebus are one and the same, lol, but they won't know that for quite some time!! And, they have the whole, he's a Centaur, thing going.
Much love,
Rhonda
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Yes, I figured it out because I follow this book closely. We have a ways to get from her to the future but I'm sure I will enjoy every chapter.
Lotsa love across the bridge.
Sal XOs
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Thank you ever so much!!
I started to wait until later for the prequel, but figured I should write while I still remembered, lol.
Much love,
Praying for your safety!!
Comment from Begin Again
Oh, Rhonda, you've scooped me right up, and I'm clutching to every word as the story unfolds. Can you believe that I'm falling head over heels in love with fantasy? The story is magical yet inspiring and filled with mystery--all the good stuff rolled into one. Lead on, my friend. I am eager to follow.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Oh, Rhonda, you've scooped me right up, and I'm clutching to every word as the story unfolds. Can you believe that I'm falling head over heels in love with fantasy? The story is magical yet inspiring and filled with mystery--all the good stuff rolled into one. Lead on, my friend. I am eager to follow.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Awwww, thank you for the sixes and for the comments. I know you're falling in love with fantasy, because you have ghosts for characters. As they aren't horrifying, it can't be horror, thus, they are fantasy, lol.
Thanks for the compliment, though!!
Hugs,
Rhonda