Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Beautiful Gogyohka poem for the club, Rachelle. I love the presentation and word imagery. It's very Zen like. When I ready, I get a serene feeling.

Well doen!

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024

That's always my barometer for a good haiku, Gypsy!! I can't believe that's how you feel, as well!!

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. This poem reminds me of a hymn, "On a Solid Rock I Stand." yes, "all other ground is sinking sand." I'll be singing that all day. I enjoyed reading this entry.

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024

Uh-oh! I hope it's a song you like! Otherwise, I will not be in good standing in the Wilkey home today!! Thank you for taking the time and care to leave such a nice review today. xoxo

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

So, a Gogyohka (I have no idea how you'd correctly pronounce that) is an impactful statement? And I get the metaphor and personification ... nicely done:-)

I like the homework assignment you've turned in for the club lesson this week, Allen. Beautiful colors in the image too. Truly, I'm not a fan of the white background, but I know how hard it is to get font colors to stand out against a dark background.

You seem to be getting a lot out of these lessons, and your poetic-skill knife has been sharpened over the summer. Keep up the great work.

xo
Me

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024

Ooooh! I like that description: my poetic skill knife has been sharpened. I agree that this club has done wonders for my writing depth and feeling. Thank you for noticing. That means a lot. xoxox

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Very true. There is a role and a purpose for each according to external circumstances. The Japanese writing styles are always interesting, and different from western poetry. Yours is very well done, and thought-provoking.
Wendy

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024

I have been totally loving being in this Japanese Poetry Club for exactly that reason: it requires so much from us in such a different way. It's stretched me as a writer; no two ways about that!

Thanks for this terrific review. I always love your feedback. xoxo

Comment from Daylily

Exceptional

Hi Rachelle,
I am trying to get back on schedule with regular reviewing but it has been a bit daunting. Anyway, it's getting late and I don't want to have my sixes go to waste again by not using them before the Saturday night deadline. This is a striking posting in a form I have never heard of before. You have done a super job, in part because I'm sure a lot of readers will continue thinking further about the message and thinking about who they are as individuals and if it is something still in need of an update. -- I plan to start catching up this week on the huge backlog of postings I really want to be reading. Yours are always very well written, and I especially love the artwork accompanying this one. Smiles and hugs!

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024

Ohhh, Lily! I have been missing you terribly and hoping everything's been going well for you. Thank you for this beautiful review and, of course, the exceptional rating. I always appreciate your kind words and encouragement. xoxox

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

This is so great. This has me speculating who is the delicate flower and who is the steady rock? The steady rock will withstand the storm, but the poor flower is going to get creamed. Good advice, too, in times of trouble we need to be like that rock. Beautifully put together. Wonderful work, and, as you see, I'm reading into it. judi

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024

Good! Then my work here is done. That's what I've loved about these Japanese poem assignments that Gypsy has given us. They cannot be just about the syllables or the rhymes. They have to contain depth and imagination and insight. I feel I've grown so much since being part of this club!! I'm glad you're in it, too. I often think, as I'm writing: "What will Judi think of this?" I honestly do. Thank you for this really nice review. xoxox

Comment from Cindy Decker 3

Excellent

Rachelle,
This is such a strong statement, written in poem form.
I would love to always be a rock, but I find it so difficult sometimes.
Your beautiful photo is haunting and nicely complements your words. Wonderful club entry.
Best wishes,
Rachelle,
Cindy

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024

This club has brought me nothing but joy! Thank you for appreciating this week's offering. That means a lot to me. xoxox

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Right you are, Miss Rachelle. I've never been compared to a dainty flower. But you can look like a flower on a dainty stem but fool them all. Strength comes from within. Love the sentiment here. Gretchen

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 Comment Written 28-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024

I hear that! People have mistaken me for a dainty flower, too...but never more than once.

Thank you for this terrific review. xoxox

Comment from Mark D. R.

Excellent

Rachel,

Yes, being on sound ground rather than quicksand is the way to go in life. Do like your comparisons with rock, dainty, and delicate. This is a well-written Gogyohka poem for this club entry.

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 Comment Written 28-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024

Thank you! I'm loving this club that Gypsy oversees. I've learned so much, not the least of which is how to think and emote rather than merely count syllables. I appreciate your feedback very much. xoxo