Real Poetry
Off and On rhyme contest entry17 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Cleverly done! I like the way your first and third stanzas definitely skimmed like sailboats on the sea with excellent flow and rhyme whilst the second in more prosaic-style font leaves one a bit cold. In short, the imagery of wine and sailboats, capturing the joy of well-crafted poetry, contrasted with the starkness of the middle stanza tick the boxes of the prompt beautifully. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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Cleverly done! I like the way your first and third stanzas definitely skimmed like sailboats on the sea with excellent flow and rhyme whilst the second in more prosaic-style font leaves one a bit cold. In short, the imagery of wine and sailboats, capturing the joy of well-crafted poetry, contrasted with the starkness of the middle stanza tick the boxes of the prompt beautifully. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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I don't believe I could have described my poem more beautifully, Debbie. You reached down to the core of this writing and brought its meaning to light. Thank you.
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, I have to agree to a large extent. But poetic ability is not common although a lot of people are self deprecating on the subject, so I won't add to it, but writing is a great method of broadening one's horizons, undrrstong the abstract. Metaphors, word invention and eloquence, it doesn't need to rhyme but it does broaden one's literary perspective, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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Oh yes, I have to agree to a large extent. But poetic ability is not common although a lot of people are self deprecating on the subject, so I won't add to it, but writing is a great method of broadening one's horizons, undrrstong the abstract. Metaphors, word invention and eloquence, it doesn't need to rhyme but it does broaden one's literary perspective, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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You're right, Roy. Some of the most gifted poets who ever lived write poetry without rhyme. But for me, the rhythmic and melodious flow of a beautiful poem takes me beyond myself into a different and sacred place. I appreciate your review, my friend. Blessings to you. John
Comment from Ulla
You have certainly lived up to the requirements of this contest. Your poem is indeed on and off rhyming. I do hope I have got that right. Lol. All the best of luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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You have certainly lived up to the requirements of this contest. Your poem is indeed on and off rhyming. I do hope I have got that right. Lol. All the best of luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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I agree with you. My poem is "on and off"--I don't know why they title the contest "off and on." Thank you so much for your review and good luck wish.
Comment from ESOSTINE
I love the imagery in the poem, of fine wine and good poem. The flow of your poem was smooth with unforced words. Thanks for sharing your thoughts, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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I love the imagery in the poem, of fine wine and good poem. The flow of your poem was smooth with unforced words. Thanks for sharing your thoughts, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your comments and especially your sixth star.
Comment from jessizero
The font on the first and third stanza was a little hard to read, but I loved that you chose to format the rhymed lines one way and the free verse another. I think this was a great poem for the writing prompt. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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The font on the first and third stanza was a little hard to read, but I loved that you chose to format the rhymed lines one way and the free verse another. I think this was a great poem for the writing prompt. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your comments and best wishes.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I liked reading this poem. It was very readable. Although I don't drink, the wine reference is appropriate. Guess we'd all love to have our words 'sing in perfect time.' Thanks for the author notes so that the stanzas and their forms all make sense.
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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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I liked reading this poem. It was very readable. Although I don't drink, the wine reference is appropriate. Guess we'd all love to have our words 'sing in perfect time.' Thanks for the author notes so that the stanzas and their forms all make sense.
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Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Begin Again
YES! YES! YES! My kind of poetry as well...words I can understand and relate to and it flows so smoothly.... just like fine wine and a good love. Great!
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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YES! YES! YES! My kind of poetry as well...words I can understand and relate to and it flows so smoothly.... just like fine wine and a good love. Great!
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Carol. I'm glad I've got someone on my side. I appreciate your review and words of encouragement.