Life's Lesson
but they are just words, right?23 total reviews
Comment from Ginda Simpson
You put the reader right there with you. We feel your disappointments, your frustrations, your mounting anger as you navigate life with a cold, uncaring father. It flows well and the tension mounts to the climax of the story. Good luck in the contest. This deserves a win.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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You put the reader right there with you. We feel your disappointments, your frustrations, your mounting anger as you navigate life with a cold, uncaring father. It flows well and the tension mounts to the climax of the story. Good luck in the contest. This deserves a win.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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This was a tough one. My father raised me with a iron hand, but I did survive. Probably out of spite...His favorite quote to spout was there was no such word as can't... and I was determined to prove him right, regardless of what it took.
Comment from Ric Myworld
This is some mighty fine writing that accents a line "It's for the best" that so many of us heard throughout our lives, filling us with anger and resentment. But thankfully, life moves on. :-) Wish I had a six.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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This is some mighty fine writing that accents a line "It's for the best" that so many of us heard throughout our lives, filling us with anger and resentment. But thankfully, life moves on. :-) Wish I had a six.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Your smile and appreciation of what I write far exceeds the glittery stars.... but I also appreciate them when they are available. I thank you for your kindness an I am pleased that you enjoyed the story. Have a great day!
Comment from Wendy G
A very well told story, and its vividness brought back the pain of some of my own memories. I am glad to see yours is classified as Fiction, and I hope it is. Sending my very best wishes for the contest - I am sure you will do well.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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A very well told story, and its vividness brought back the pain of some of my own memories. I am glad to see yours is classified as Fiction, and I hope it is. Sending my very best wishes for the contest - I am sure you will do well.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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I wish I could say the entire foundation was based on fiction, but I know and you know.... life gets closer to the dark side sometimes than we wish would happen. Thanks so much Wendy.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Why or why did I not save a six?? You hit it out of the park with this one! It is beyond exceptional! I was so engrossed, I had to double-check that it was fiction! SOOO believable. So aching with feelings and emotions and perfect phrasing and word choices throughout. This was seamless and absolutely luminous. I am impressed beyond words. xoxox I expect to see your name in the Winner's Circle, Mystery Contestant!! xoxox
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Why or why did I not save a six?? You hit it out of the park with this one! It is beyond exceptional! I was so engrossed, I had to double-check that it was fiction! SOOO believable. So aching with feelings and emotions and perfect phrasing and word choices throughout. This was seamless and absolutely luminous. I am impressed beyond words. xoxox I expect to see your name in the Winner's Circle, Mystery Contestant!! xoxox
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much, Rachelle, for your kindness and appreciation for the story. Sometimes drawing from boxed up memories can be the foundation of a good story. I appreciate your thoughts and kindness. Have a great day!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well done.
You list it as fiction, but it reads like non-fiction. I guess it would have to since the requirement was that you write in first person. I just wonder, did he leave his mother high and dry, or were there siblings?
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Well done.
You list it as fiction, but it reads like non-fiction. I guess it would have to since the requirement was that you write in first person. I just wonder, did he leave his mother high and dry, or were there siblings?
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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I think life's past can always lend to the foundation of subsequent stories that I or anyone else writes. And the story was short but I doubt he left his mother high and dry.... He didn't seem like the sort. Thanks so much...
Have a great day!
Comment from zanya
A sad tale but told with conviction - the phrase repeated like a Greek Chorus- a thread carrying the story to its tragic end- good use of the prompt - well done
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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A sad tale but told with conviction - the phrase repeated like a Greek Chorus- a thread carrying the story to its tragic end- good use of the prompt - well done
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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thank you for your kind review and your generous offering of stars. I truly am overjoyed that you found the story so entertaining. I wasn't sure my thoughts would connect with the reader. I am blessed!
Comment from LJbutterfly
Wow! This was a chilling and poignant story with gripping details and a powerful theme. According to the father, everything that happens is for the best. This is well written, thoughtful, and reads as though it is biographical. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Wow! This was a chilling and poignant story with gripping details and a powerful theme. According to the father, everything that happens is for the best. This is well written, thoughtful, and reads as though it is biographical. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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You know me too well, my friend. Some of it is and parts of it come from others I know. I am thrilled that you could see what I was trying to express. Awesome! Have a great day!
Comment from patcelaw
This is definitely a very well written story with a very powerful message, and I very much enjoyed listening to it. It brings to my mind the words that I kept hearing all of my life from my mother. My mother would say sticks and stones will break your bones, but words will never hurt you. That is a lie from the devil words do hurt. They hurt really bad and I chose in my later life to be a very good mother one who would love my children. It would not try to say awful things like that to them so I was learning lessons along the way. May you have a wonderful evening and I wish you the very best in the contest. Patricia.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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This is definitely a very well written story with a very powerful message, and I very much enjoyed listening to it. It brings to my mind the words that I kept hearing all of my life from my mother. My mother would say sticks and stones will break your bones, but words will never hurt you. That is a lie from the devil words do hurt. They hurt really bad and I chose in my later life to be a very good mother one who would love my children. It would not try to say awful things like that to them so I was learning lessons along the way. May you have a wonderful evening and I wish you the very best in the contest. Patricia.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Thank you Patricia... I too learned lessons from hurtful words and like you I hope that I learned from them. I greatly appreciate your kindness and the lovely stars. I am blessed.
Have a great day!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A wonderful story, well structured, fluent and building in tension, skilfully aided by the repeating line of "It's for the best." It seems that the protagonist's chilling secret in the end echoed that of his father who clearly acted on his own perceived wisdom. An excellent entry for the contest. No errors found. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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A wonderful story, well structured, fluent and building in tension, skilfully aided by the repeating line of "It's for the best." It seems that the protagonist's chilling secret in the end echoed that of his father who clearly acted on his own perceived wisdom. An excellent entry for the contest. No errors found. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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thanks, Debbie... I think Greyson was aware what might have been happening under his father's hand, but being a child it was easier to shut it out until.... that moment when it took hold of him too. Thanks so much for the kind review. Have a great day!
Comment from Amelie Johns
Brilliant 'chilling secret' story. I enjoyed reading every line of this. You had me hooked from the beginning. And it grew stronger the further I got. I love the humorous aspect of it and this in no way takes from the chilling aspect of it. Great job. Best of luck in the contest!
Best wishes,
Amelie
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Brilliant 'chilling secret' story. I enjoyed reading every line of this. You had me hooked from the beginning. And it grew stronger the further I got. I love the humorous aspect of it and this in no way takes from the chilling aspect of it. Great job. Best of luck in the contest!
Best wishes,
Amelie
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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wow! Thank you so much! I wasn't sure if I could bring out the tension enough to the reader and you have confirmed it for me. I am blessed by you, your review, and the stars. Thank you!