Death of Timothy Grey
Watching can sometimes be deadly14 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, you certainly did a great job of drawing me in and creating interest. But then you cut the story short with crack of his spine and the quiver as he dangled from his elongated neck until all was silent and still.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Well, you certainly did a great job of drawing me in and creating interest. But then you cut the story short with crack of his spine and the quiver as he dangled from his elongated neck until all was silent and still.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Ric,
Thanks for your review. Yes, that little extra, would have increased the impact factor. Perhaps a bit too gruesome. The piece tied for first place. Who knows what might have happened.?Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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My comments weren't a recommendation, Barry. I was just being silly. Your story was outstanding. Personally, I'm not a fan of all the graphic sex, violence, and vulgar details used as shock factors.
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No, I am not really into that. Thanks again for the review. Keep on writing.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like a terrible experience and I am relieved that it is all fiction. I once had to attend an early morning scene where a man had hung himself in the park overnight and it was definitely a nightmare, your story gave me the chills, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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This sounds like a terrible experience and I am relieved that it is all fiction. I once had to attend an early morning scene where a man had hung himself in the park overnight and it was definitely a nightmare, your story gave me the chills, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Dolly,
Thanks for your review. Yes, suicide is a horrible thing. I am thinking of making this into a longer story. Thanks for your support. It ties for first place.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from royowen
I once did that as a nutty teenager thinking the rope would unravel, fortunately it wasn't my time, my silly scheme backfired, but apart from a bit of rope burn, I was unhurt, beautifully written, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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I once did that as a nutty teenager thinking the rope would unravel, fortunately it wasn't my time, my silly scheme backfired, but apart from a bit of rope burn, I was unhurt, beautifully written, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Roy,
I am so glad you attempt was not successful. Think of all those great poems that would have been lost.Take care and you and your family have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry
PS. The piece tied for first place.
Comment from Begin Again
Wow! Now that's something I would not want to witness. How haunting to think someone was just climbing a tree and then seconds later, he is dead, hanging from the tree. Well done.
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Wow! Now that's something I would not want to witness. How haunting to think someone was just climbing a tree and then seconds later, he is dead, hanging from the tree. Well done.
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Carol,
Thanks for your review. I am glad you enjoyed the read, despite the sad topic. It came in as equal first in the competition. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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Congratulations! Your story was well done!
