Schmekel and Clekel McGee
A funny poem72 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
It's cute and it does tell a nice little story about them. The structure, if you're interested, could use a bit more consistency with the rhyme from stanza to stanza. It changes and fades at times. But, overall, this is good work.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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It's cute and it does tell a nice little story about them. The structure, if you're interested, could use a bit more consistency with the rhyme from stanza to stanza. It changes and fades at times. But, overall, this is good work.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Thanks again Lancellot for your review.
Comment from Boogienights
Funny characters those 3. I can relate about the cotton candy, having just visited the Minnesota state fair. The misadventures of these 3 make for a hilarious poem. Thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Funny characters those 3. I can relate about the cotton candy, having just visited the Minnesota state fair. The misadventures of these 3 make for a hilarious poem. Thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Well, thank you again Boogienights for your great review. I really appreciate it!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your inventive and funny story made me smile and I enjoyed your amusing poem, it is uplifting and lighthearted. Basic instincts prevail here, love Dolly x x x x
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Your inventive and funny story made me smile and I enjoyed your amusing poem, it is uplifting and lighthearted. Basic instincts prevail here, love Dolly x x x x
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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LOL! Well, then Dolly. If I have made you smile - I have been successful. That is exactly what I was going for laughter!
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hi, Harry.
Sorry, but I can't grace this with an Excellent rating. It is mildly amusing and I'm a dog-lover so I enjoyed the variety of antics the three canines got up to. However, it's at the lower end of the skill rating. You simply pluck a few rhyming words to suit your purpose and string them together. No need to worry about sense because it's a nonsense poem.
In short it's doggerel - bad pun intended. Maybe if you labelled it as Children's verse?
Steve
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Hi, Harry.
Sorry, but I can't grace this with an Excellent rating. It is mildly amusing and I'm a dog-lover so I enjoyed the variety of antics the three canines got up to. However, it's at the lower end of the skill rating. You simply pluck a few rhyming words to suit your purpose and string them together. No need to worry about sense because it's a nonsense poem.
In short it's doggerel - bad pun intended. Maybe if you labelled it as Children's verse?
Steve
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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That's alright Steve. We can't please everyone. Thanks for your review!
Comment from Rene Tyo
Your poems never fail to make me smile. This is another that is fun, creative and a joy to read. It is relatable to many a dog lover, including myself. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Your poems never fail to make me smile. This is another that is fun, creative and a joy to read. It is relatable to many a dog lover, including myself. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Well, thank you Rene. I really appreciate your review!
Comment from Nicki Nance
The story was clever and these rhymes are spot on. My favorite element, though, was the selection of names. Thanks for a humorous lighthearted read. Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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The story was clever and these rhymes are spot on. My favorite element, though, was the selection of names. Thanks for a humorous lighthearted read. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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LOL! Well, thank you Nicki. I really appreciate that!
Comment from Kristen Thomason
I enjoyed this lighthearted poem. It should be a children's book. The illustrations would be really cute and funny too! I'm sure my son would really enjoy it!
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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I enjoyed this lighthearted poem. It should be a children's book. The illustrations would be really cute and funny too! I'm sure my son would really enjoy it!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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LOL! Well, thank you Kristen. I really appreciate your review!
Comment from Keely Fiedorowicz
Hi!
I really liked this poem. I've always had a weakness for narrative poems. And I also happen to have a serious weakness for dogs, so Freckle's antics were fun to read.
I really liked the detail you went into about the trio's day. That being said, I think your poem could be even stronger if you used different synonyms in certain places. One example is in the line "looking at the moon". You could maybe replace it with a word like "gazing" or "admiring". One other example is in the line "And Shmekel wanted". Wanted could be replaced with a stronger synonym. That being said, this is still a very strong piece, and I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Thank you for sharing, and I hope you have a wonderful day.
Best wishes,
Keely
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Hi!
I really liked this poem. I've always had a weakness for narrative poems. And I also happen to have a serious weakness for dogs, so Freckle's antics were fun to read.
I really liked the detail you went into about the trio's day. That being said, I think your poem could be even stronger if you used different synonyms in certain places. One example is in the line "looking at the moon". You could maybe replace it with a word like "gazing" or "admiring". One other example is in the line "And Shmekel wanted". Wanted could be replaced with a stronger synonym. That being said, this is still a very strong piece, and I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Thank you for sharing, and I hope you have a wonderful day.
Best wishes,
Keely
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Well, thank you Keely for your insight. And thank you for the great review. I really appreciate that!
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You're very welcome, Harry!
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Thanks!
Comment from Mintybee
This is a cute poem about the characters' various ambitions. The seasons come and go, fun and obligations rival each other, and the dog still just wants a bone. I enjoyed reading this.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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This is a cute poem about the characters' various ambitions. The seasons come and go, fun and obligations rival each other, and the dog still just wants a bone. I enjoyed reading this.
Mintybee
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Well, thank you Mintybee. I really appreciate your review!
Comment from bob cullen
It's not just a funny poem, it also entertains. I sense you had great fun writing this. It flows reasonably well, and it brought a smile to my face. I'll keep an eye out for more of your work.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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It's not just a funny poem, it also entertains. I sense you had great fun writing this. It flows reasonably well, and it brought a smile to my face. I'll keep an eye out for more of your work.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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LOL! Yes Bob, I did have fun writing this. And I am glad it made you smile. That means I have succeeded in my intentions. Thank you for your review. I really appreciate it!
