All Awash
Sometimes experience trumps youth.28 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nice twist at the end, Barry. I imagine that the first trip through a carwash for a young child could be quite an experience. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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Nice twist at the end, Barry. I imagine that the first trip through a carwash for a young child could be quite an experience. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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Paul,
Thanks for the review. glad you enjoyed the read. Yes, I still get a bit of a buzz from them. You can determine from that that I do not wash the car too often.
Cheers
Barry
Comment from estory
I like how you had the great lead in that grabs us and has us thinking this is some kind of flood. Then you had that classic O Henry twist at the end, and it only turns out to be a harmless car wash. Nice humorous twist. One of those coming of age moments estory
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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I like how you had the great lead in that grabs us and has us thinking this is some kind of flood. Then you had that classic O Henry twist at the end, and it only turns out to be a harmless car wash. Nice humorous twist. One of those coming of age moments estory
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Shanbreen
What a wonderful way to tout the virtues of experiences. Your story did catch me by surprise. Well done, Barry, for your fast-moving depiction of the hidden meaning behind an ordinary occurrence. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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What a wonderful way to tout the virtues of experiences. Your story did catch me by surprise. Well done, Barry, for your fast-moving depiction of the hidden meaning behind an ordinary occurrence. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much for your kind review. Glad you enjoyed the read. There can be so much fun in the ordinary. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This is the way to write a Flash Fiction story. Your story had us guessing as to what exactly was happening and then at the very end you clued us in with a great twist.surprise ending. Good job.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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This is the way to write a Flash Fiction story. Your story had us guessing as to what exactly was happening and then at the very end you clued us in with a great twist.surprise ending. Good job.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Marilyn,
Thanks so much for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Yes a twist at the end is always great to have in this sort of contest. Let's see if the judges agree.
You have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed your story. Good job doing it in 80 words. I never thought it was a car wash . Grear ending, what a surprise. Good luck in the correct. Well written.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2024
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I enjoyed your story. Good job doing it in 80 words. I never thought it was a car wash . Grear ending, what a surprise. Good luck in the correct. Well written.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2024
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Brenda,
Thanks so much for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read and the twist at the end. Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a really cute 80-word story that has all the elements of a story. It is a good entry for the contest once you correct a few errors: . .
. happened(,)(G)randpa?" . . . it is(.)" . . . are trapped(.)" . . . it will pass(.)" . . . know things(.)" Good luck in contest.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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This is a really cute 80-word story that has all the elements of a story. It is a good entry for the contest once you correct a few errors: . .
. happened(,)(G)randpa?" . . . it is(.)" . . . are trapped(.)" . . . it will pass(.)" . . . know things(.)" Good luck in contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Carol,
Thanks for the review but as importantly, thanks so much for your noting of errors for correction. Bad me. Getting a bit slack. Now edited. You have a good day.
Cheers
Barry.
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We all have those kind of days.
Comment from Sharon Elwell
I did enjoy! I remember taking kids for their first trips through a car wash, and it's always fun. You brought back a good memory and told a whole story in very few words - well, +2. Good work.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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I did enjoy! I remember taking kids for their first trips through a car wash, and it's always fun. You brought back a good memory and told a whole story in very few words - well, +2. Good work.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Sharon,
Thanks so much for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Yes, the car wash is fun.
Cheers
Barry
Comment from Gunner Lil
A very good picture used for this flash fiction tale.
Had this reader tricked into thinking something more horrid than a car wash. Good job.
Thank you for sharing and good luck.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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A very good picture used for this flash fiction tale.
Had this reader tricked into thinking something more horrid than a car wash. Good job.
Thank you for sharing and good luck.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much for your review. Glad you picked up on the picture. It was meant to deceive the reader. Have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Jacob1395
That was a nice twist at the end and it definitely did make me smile as I was reading it. In my head I was thinking they'd had a power cut during a storm as I was reading, so you definitely surprised me. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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That was a nice twist at the end and it definitely did make me smile as I was reading it. In my head I was thinking they'd had a power cut during a storm as I was reading, so you definitely surprised me. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Jacob,
Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read and the little twist at the end. A car wash is always a fun thing to do with grandchildren.
Take care.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Wendy G
I hate going through a car wash - it makes me feel dizzy and disoriented. The grandfather was able to reassure the child with his wisdom and sense of calm. And yes, grandpas do know things! Sending best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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I hate going through a car wash - it makes me feel dizzy and disoriented. The grandfather was able to reassure the child with his wisdom and sense of calm. And yes, grandpas do know things! Sending best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Wendy,
Thanks for your kind review. Yes, the car wash can disorientate you for sure. A bit weird really. Thanks for the best wishes. It is now in the hands of the judges.
Take Care.
Barry
