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Comment from Sankey
Well done. Still a great story. From go to woe. Keep up the good work. I couldn't find any spags but I have to rave on to fill up this review. Where do we go, next?
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Well done. Still a great story. From go to woe. Keep up the good work. I couldn't find any spags but I have to rave on to fill up this review. Where do we go, next?
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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No idea what's next. Thank you for this awesome review. So happy you are enjoying our fictional story. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Potty mouth Gretchen might be the subject of snickers or horror depending on who hears her. Her bare legs probably aren't too popular. Blueberry picking can be fun if there aren't thorny weeds or poison ivy. You'all are certainly getting a taste of life in earlier simpler times.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Potty mouth Gretchen might be the subject of snickers or horror depending on who hears her. Her bare legs probably aren't too popular. Blueberry picking can be fun if there aren't thorny weeds or poison ivy. You'all are certainly getting a taste of life in earlier simpler times.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I doubt the real Gretchen would make it. The fictional one is having a hard enough time. Lol. Thanks so much for this. Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
You girls make me laugh. I'm loving your co-author book. Reading about the Americans, or as Amish say, the English. Every time I read it I think of the movie, Witness.
I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Well done
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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You girls make me laugh. I'm loving your co-author book. Reading about the Americans, or as Amish say, the English. Every time I read it I think of the movie, Witness.
I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Well done
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you. I'm so glad you are getting a good laugh out of this. It's been so much fun to write about. Thank you so much for this wonderful review and the stellar rating. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
I find this a tremendously interesting tete a tete you're having with Rachelle, you probably anywhere near each other, but this series is original, but probably doesn't really have a destination at the moment, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : She's dropping I'm the (pale) pail?
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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I find this a tremendously interesting tete a tete you're having with Rachelle, you probably anywhere near each other, but this series is original, but probably doesn't really have a destination at the moment, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : She's dropping I'm the (pale) pail?
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Roy. We have no idea where we are going with this. It's not going to be long though. I'm glad you are enjoying this. gretchen
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Well done
Comment from patcelaw
Very well written chapter in the book and I enjoyed it very much as usual your sentence structure your paragraph and your punctuation is all very good. I wish you a very pleasant weekend and a very wonderful week. Patric
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Very well written chapter in the book and I enjoyed it very much as usual your sentence structure your paragraph and your punctuation is all very good. I wish you a very pleasant weekend and a very wonderful week. Patric
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Patricia. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
One of my daughter's first words was "truck" - she couldn't pronounce it like I did, but she used it when she was frustrated like I did:-(
Hahaha! I loved the comment about the blueberries and the upcoming corncobs:-)
Enjoyed your side of the story with the extra dialogue and lesson on blueberries. And I bet it's blue when it comes out too!
Enjoy the week ahead.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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One of my daughter's first words was "truck" - she couldn't pronounce it like I did, but she used it when she was frustrated like I did:-(
Hahaha! I loved the comment about the blueberries and the upcoming corncobs:-)
Enjoyed your side of the story with the extra dialogue and lesson on blueberries. And I bet it's blue when it comes out too!
Enjoy the week ahead.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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They can cause really bad stomach aches before they make their grand exit. Lol. I really appreciate this fun and personal review. Gretchen
Comment from pome lover
How funny - the perfect line, "Should we curtsy?" Loved it.
Poor Rachelle and the blueberries, and of course, you didn't enlighten her as to what she should expect??? The reader will probably hear about it in her next episode.
I told Rachelle, I get tickled over the fact that each of you is the main character - no side kick, here!
Am enjoying this story immensely. Oh, I hope you don't mind, but this is a thing with me, It should be,"Hannah hands... the pails to Rachelle and me." (sorry :)
Katharine
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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How funny - the perfect line, "Should we curtsy?" Loved it.
Poor Rachelle and the blueberries, and of course, you didn't enlighten her as to what she should expect??? The reader will probably hear about it in her next episode.
I told Rachelle, I get tickled over the fact that each of you is the main character - no side kick, here!
Am enjoying this story immensely. Oh, I hope you don't mind, but this is a thing with me, It should be,"Hannah hands... the pails to Rachelle and me." (sorry :)
Katharine
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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I love getting help. So never be sorry for pointing something out or correcting a mistake. I'm here to get better. I probably should have enlightened her about the blueberries, but like you said, we need material for next week. Lol. thank you so much. Gretchen
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well, I replied, but it didn't make it down here, so, repeat: I was just kidding you about the blueberries. it'll be fun to see the fuss she'll make over that overindulgence. :)
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I should have told her. Any decent friend would have. That being said, I'm not that decent, apparently. Lol.
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kidding!!!!!!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!! LOVE the blueberry/corn cob part. You're ssssso very hilarious every day. I ssssssso wish I lived next door to you.
Two tiny spags I found:
1.) In this sentence: Rachelle seems to be eating more than she's dropping in the pale,
it's the other "pail" you want.
2.) This thought didn't get completed:
While Hannah tells the tale of the morning, not to mention the numerous humiliating moments for Rachelle and me. I mean that little girl didn't miss a thing.
This was an absolutely delightful read. Let's hope Tova is home because calling back may use up the rest of the phone juice!! xoxox
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!! LOVE the blueberry/corn cob part. You're ssssso very hilarious every day. I ssssssso wish I lived next door to you.
Two tiny spags I found:
1.) In this sentence: Rachelle seems to be eating more than she's dropping in the pale,
it's the other "pail" you want.
2.) This thought didn't get completed:
While Hannah tells the tale of the morning, not to mention the numerous humiliating moments for Rachelle and me. I mean that little girl didn't miss a thing.
This was an absolutely delightful read. Let's hope Tova is home because calling back may use up the rest of the phone juice!! xoxox
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Rachelle. I'm going to be sad when we end this, I'm just saying. I think we play off of each other in a great way. I never know what you are going to write and I never know what I'm going to write. I will hope back in and correct those tow things. Thank you again. Gretchen
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Maybe a REAL road trip will be in order once this is done! We can meet up somewhere halfway between Kitty Hawk NC and East Rochester, NY. (According to Google, that would be Falling Waters, West VA....which fact just made my Little Voice start humming the theme from Deliverance. So...Plan B???!)
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Yes. As catchy as the theme from Deliverance is, I want no part in it. Maybe you and hubby can come to OBX for a vacation sometime. That's more my speed.
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I'll plant that seed at once!! xoxo
Comment from BethShelby
I'm enjoying these too part stories of Amish adventure. I have the feeling the two of you really do have totally different personalities but it makes the story more interesting. As to the blueberries and digestive tract, it seems other fruits do that to. Yesterday I had strawberries, apples, bananas and raisins. I must have been out of mind and I was fresh out of corncobs.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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I'm enjoying these too part stories of Amish adventure. I have the feeling the two of you really do have totally different personalities but it makes the story more interesting. As to the blueberries and digestive tract, it seems other fruits do that to. Yesterday I had strawberries, apples, bananas and raisins. I must have been out of mind and I was fresh out of corncobs.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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It was the raisins. They are rough on you as well. Bananas are the mildest in that bunch. I know my fruits and their habits. Lol. Thank you for sticking with this and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Chiggers can be brutal little devils. Thank you for sharing this addition with us. I enjoyed reading. I like this story.
No, I have to just say, "wow, that must have hurt. Hope you heal up soon." (Wow)
Besides the Amish don't do things like that." Rachelle assures me. (that,")
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Chiggers can be brutal little devils. Thank you for sharing this addition with us. I enjoyed reading. I like this story.
No, I have to just say, "wow, that must have hurt. Hope you heal up soon." (Wow)
Besides the Amish don't do things like that." Rachelle assures me. (that,")
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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thank you, Barbara. I appreciate the kind review and for the help in editing. I'm glad you are liking this story. Gretchen