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Sweet Chocolate

A ode poem about Chocolate

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Comment from jake cosmos aller
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nice ode to the delights of sweet chocolate Loved the image chosen unfortunately as I am pre-diabetic I should not eat chocolate or sweet stuff anymore

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the kind review ☺️
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Excellent entry for the Ode Poetry writing prompt contest. I love chocolate. Who doesn't? Milk chocolate with almonds is my favorite.

"Stay away from my chocolate and no own gets hurt " - anonymous. LoL

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
    That's right! I will fight over my chocolate. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This ode, Sweet Chocolate, is presented as an apostrophe in the sense that a response is neither expected or likely from the subject -- chocolate. The difference would be you speaking to the world about chocolate. Nothing wrong here, just being specific.
Also, since I'm here, the third stanza of your poem, My Loneliness, has the word GRAY spelled inside out. Just sayin'. Happy day.

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the review and the feedback. The feedback helps me become a stronger writer.
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi, Samantha

This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!

Isn't it amazing that once the chocolate gets past the tongue, you regret eating it?

But oh, it taste so good on the tongue, so it's still worth it. It puts the pounds on and give some people pimples. But, it's still worth it.

You did a good job explaining it's positives and you are to be commended for that

I would not be surprised if I saw another entry for this contest about chocolate. I'll be able to compare notes. Maybe you will too because you might see their entry.

I enjoyed reading your poem

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
    Thank you for reading my poem and the kind words you sent me.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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This poem is an absolute treat! Your playful ode to chocolate perfectly captures the comfort it brings. The way you describe its sweetness and the happiness it brings is so relatable. haha It made me smile and crave a piece of chocolate all at once! Lovely work!

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
    Thank you so much 😊
Comment from Aiona
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I don't normally care for free verse, but your poem made my mouth water. Your chosen words brought to mind the Tupperware of chocolate chips in my cabinet. Very moving poem! It's moving me to the kitchen!!!!

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
    Thank you so much. I got a nice homemade chocolate cream pie waiting on me after supper. Your review made my day. Thanks.
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
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Your ode to chocolate is charming and heartfelt. The lines effectively convey the comfort and joy chocolate brings you. The imagery of chocolate melting your heart and satisfying your delight is vivid and relatable.

To make the poem even more engaging, you might consider adding more specific details about chocolate's allure, perhaps describing its taste or texture in greater detail. This would enrich the sensory experience for the reader. Overall, it's a delightful and expressive tribute to a beloved treat.

Ex: This literally came to my mind as I read...
Melting like velvet on my tongue

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 Comment Written 06-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
    Thank you
Comment from kiwisteveh
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Well who can resist chocolate, so the subject of your ode is understandable!

Not sure if I get the point about bumpy roads, but the rest of this overflows (like your artwork) with sweetness.

Good luck in the contest.

Steve

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 Comment Written 06-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
    I think I will change it, thank you 🤠