The Coyote Boys
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Strength"Story about two brothers who change their destiny.
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Did Dewey leave the house? Or have the towns people finally got enough of him. You left a great hook here, making sure we come back to read. Of course, I would anyway. I like this story and you're doing a great job writing it.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Did Dewey leave the house? Or have the towns people finally got enough of him. You left a great hook here, making sure we come back to read. Of course, I would anyway. I like this story and you're doing a great job writing it.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Barbara. Dewey is still just dreaming about getting even with his dad. This little episode will just make the boys happy. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, I hate it that this old cowboy is all out of bullets so early in the week, but it's nice not to be 70 reviews behind like the last few weeks. LOL. Now, I'm just hoping Dewey did the teaching. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Well, I hate it that this old cowboy is all out of bullets so early in the week, but it's nice not to be 70 reviews behind like the last few weeks. LOL. Now, I'm just hoping Dewey did the teaching. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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No. Alas, Dewey did not, but someone sure scratched him up. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from patcelaw
I very much enjoyed listening to this chapter in the book and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. You are an excellent writer and you have presented it very well. Patricia.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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I very much enjoyed listening to this chapter in the book and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. You are an excellent writer and you have presented it very well. Patricia.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much Patricia. I'm so glad you are enjoying this. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
Well done. I bet he was attacking that lady and someone caught him at it! You are doing well with this rather sad tale. I look forward to where it is headed.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Well done. I bet he was attacking that lady and someone caught him at it! You are doing well with this rather sad tale. I look forward to where it is headed.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Thank you! It's about 3/4 finished. I'm glad you liked this. Thank you for the awesome review and rating. Gretchen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Such amazing tension, Gretchen, literally twisting my stomach! By now, I'm praying for the worst death possible for him, a long protracted one. It sounds (teasingly) like this is the beginning. Love that imagery of the sky resembling a fresh bruise, so powerfully apt. Masterful! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Such amazing tension, Gretchen, literally twisting my stomach! By now, I'm praying for the worst death possible for him, a long protracted one. It sounds (teasingly) like this is the beginning. Love that imagery of the sky resembling a fresh bruise, so powerfully apt. Masterful! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Debbie. I think the boys will be happy seeing their daddy all torn up. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
You could cut that meal-time tension with a knife. Their premonitions of disaster are unfolding. Dewey is not a dummy - he has rigged up something to be a "surprise" for his father. Can't wait to read more. Excellent writing.
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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You could cut that meal-time tension with a knife. Their premonitions of disaster are unfolding. Dewey is not a dummy - he has rigged up something to be a "surprise" for his father. Can't wait to read more. Excellent writing.
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much, Wendy. I'm glad you liked this. Thankfully, this harrowing tale is about 3/4 done. Gretchen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
This is an interesting twist. I didn't expect this turn, even though we don't know exactly what the 'turn' is yet. Nice, suspenseful build-up. Good work.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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This is an interesting twist. I didn't expect this turn, even though we don't know exactly what the 'turn' is yet. Nice, suspenseful build-up. Good work.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Wayne. Sometimes people push back at a bully. It was time Matthew got that reminder. Glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Such tension building in the dialogue here Gretchen and you could the air with a knife! I particularly enjoyed these inventive and lines:
(Daddy finishes his stew and stands up, shoving his chair back so hard that it teeters on two legs before settling back on all four).
(The sky is getting all purple, like a fresh bruise).
And I wonder what happened to Father? It sounds like he has had a dose of his own medicine here. Whatever happened, he didn't see it coming and the surprise that was promised has been delivered.
Another fine chapter in your story and as always your words are a joy to read Gretchen, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Such tension building in the dialogue here Gretchen and you could the air with a knife! I particularly enjoyed these inventive and lines:
(Daddy finishes his stew and stands up, shoving his chair back so hard that it teeters on two legs before settling back on all four).
(The sky is getting all purple, like a fresh bruise).
And I wonder what happened to Father? It sounds like he has had a dose of his own medicine here. Whatever happened, he didn't see it coming and the surprise that was promised has been delivered.
Another fine chapter in your story and as always your words are a joy to read Gretchen, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Dolly. This turn of events will lift many spirits. Lol. Thanks for the encouraging review. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
We all know it was Dewey. There is no excuse for a woman or man hurting their children. Ever. I hope their daddy really suffers. I hope Dewey beats him every day. Your writing is very strong and drew up feelings. Karen
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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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We all know it was Dewey. There is no excuse for a woman or man hurting their children. Ever. I hope their daddy really suffers. I hope Dewey beats him every day. Your writing is very strong and drew up feelings. Karen
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Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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No, Dewey is sleeping. But someone pushed back. Now we have to figure out where he was and what he was doing. Thanks, Karen. Gretchen
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Wow, you are the master of tension! It's like listening to a tea kettle whistle, and no one wants to be the one to take it off the stove. Absolutely phenomenal job with this chapter. Can't wait to see who hurt the bastard. xoxo
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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Wow, you are the master of tension! It's like listening to a tea kettle whistle, and no one wants to be the one to take it off the stove. Absolutely phenomenal job with this chapter. Can't wait to see who hurt the bastard. xoxo
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Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Rachelle. Loved the tea kettle line. Lol. I'm glad you liked this. I'm gonna be honest. I'll be glad when I'm done with this one. So, dark and unhappy. But, gotta finish it. Thanks again for the encouragement. Gretchen
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I can see that being the case. You're brave to do it. I give you a lot of kudos. xoxo