Confidentially, Yours
letters from two ladies21 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Elwell
Now that was fun to read! I kept guessing what might happen next and how the situation would resolve itself. You definitely met the brief on this one. The mystery remains. Can Jalyn's affections be transferred? Well done.
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Now that was fun to read! I kept guessing what might happen next and how the situation would resolve itself. You definitely met the brief on this one. The mystery remains. Can Jalyn's affections be transferred? Well done.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
Comment from Ric Myworld
Sadly, this old cowboy is all out of bullets for the week. I'd certainly like to reward your fine story properly. Best of luck in the contest. Outstanding writing, as always. Thanks for sharing.
I don't normally offer suggestions, but since you don't often make mistakes, I thought you might like to know, if you haven't already caught them.
One weas (was) slightly balder than the other.
Genteman (Gentleman) Number Two, Carter, . . .
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Sadly, this old cowboy is all out of bullets for the week. I'd certainly like to reward your fine story properly. Best of luck in the contest. Outstanding writing, as always. Thanks for sharing.
I don't normally offer suggestions, but since you don't often make mistakes, I thought you might like to know, if you haven't already caught them.
One weas (was) slightly balder than the other.
Genteman (Gentleman) Number Two, Carter, . . .
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well at least Andrew went to heaven dreaming of his harem waiting for him while Carter had something to look forward to at the airport and enjoyed the scent of jasmine into the bargain. This reminds me of Lennon's quote: Life is what happens when you're busy making plans. Well done and good luck! Debbie
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Well at least Andrew went to heaven dreaming of his harem waiting for him while Carter had something to look forward to at the airport and enjoyed the scent of jasmine into the bargain. This reminds me of Lennon's quote: Life is what happens when you're busy making plans. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
Comment from LJbutterfly
How did Carter know Andrew's plane exploded over the Arbian Sea, and that he would be free to introduce himself to Jalyn? Your story is intriguing, and builds quickly and nicely to me, until it reaches the part I misunderstood. I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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How did Carter know Andrew's plane exploded over the Arbian Sea, and that he would be free to introduce himself to Jalyn? Your story is intriguing, and builds quickly and nicely to me, until it reaches the part I misunderstood. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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He didn't know the plane crashed, but saw the note as a way to perhaps meet someone looking for love as was he.
Comment from Gunner Lil
A very good entry for the contest.
Very good sensory descriptions throughout the short story.
This reader would have liked to be at the airport when the balloons where found,
good luck
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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A very good entry for the contest.
Very good sensory descriptions throughout the short story.
This reader would have liked to be at the airport when the balloons where found,
good luck
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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I've seen stranger at airports.
Comment from iDri.Luv.Jesus
Yeah, yippie, what's a great story telling! It's sounded almost like in a real-life story, and in movie too. I enjoyed reading it from the beginning to the end. It's got some humors and so much fun to read, plus, your writing did meet the writing prompt of an exceptional rate. Congrats to a wonderful story. Best of wish to win it!
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Yeah, yippie, what's a great story telling! It's sounded almost like in a real-life story, and in movie too. I enjoyed reading it from the beginning to the end. It's got some humors and so much fun to read, plus, your writing did meet the writing prompt of an exceptional rate. Congrats to a wonderful story. Best of wish to win it!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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I am deeply humbled and appreciative.
Comment from Begin Again
Well done! How one simple change in our lives can determine the rest of our life without us ever knowing. When we come to that fork in the road, decisions are made. I enjoyed the story. Very well done.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Well done! How one simple change in our lives can determine the rest of our life without us ever knowing. When we come to that fork in the road, decisions are made. I enjoyed the story. Very well done.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Thank you and again, congratulations on your win!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This was very interesting. The way you wove it between the two men was masterfully done. He could try and see what life might have in score for him. More unpacking for me. Karen
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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This was very interesting. The way you wove it between the two men was masterfully done. He could try and see what life might have in score for him. More unpacking for me. Karen
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much. Wish I could help you. Always good to hear from you.
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It was a departure for you. I really liked it. Karen
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I enjoy it when I can please you with my writing.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with!!
So the guy who dated a lot of women and left them crying,(Andrew) exploded over the Arabian sea, and the guy who's girlfriend said she was going back to John (Carter) lived on to go to the airport and see if he could find The girl with the teddy bear and the balloons
That is justice
But,which one was more lecherous? I think Andrew was, but I also think Carter knew his marriage or relationship with the girl that wrote him the dear John letter was going to be lost to him. So who can blame him for trying to find a girl that might be the one and try for a relationship with her?
You have a fan story glitch here
"York businessmen, so much alike. Each 6'4"
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I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with!!
So the guy who dated a lot of women and left them crying,(Andrew) exploded over the Arabian sea, and the guy who's girlfriend said she was going back to John (Carter) lived on to go to the airport and see if he could find The girl with the teddy bear and the balloons
That is justice
But,which one was more lecherous? I think Andrew was, but I also think Carter knew his marriage or relationship with the girl that wrote him the dear John letter was going to be lost to him. So who can blame him for trying to find a girl that might be the one and try for a relationship with her?
You have a fan story glitch here
"York businessmen, so much alike. Each 6'4"
"
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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I appreciate your kindness. I'll check out tht glitch.
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I meant THAT glitch.
Comment from SimianSavant
I thought this was one of the more interesting entries in the contest, and left with a fun hanging thread. You have some quirks in your writing, eg "they knew not" and "it happened that", that are a little funky and Biblical sounding and keep the readers on their toes.
Your entry seems to be well edited and descriptive, and I didn't see any revisions to make. The death of one of the men is sudden and unexpected. If you were to add a little foreshadowing, it might be interesting to see how that works.
Thanks for the read,
SS
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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I thought this was one of the more interesting entries in the contest, and left with a fun hanging thread. You have some quirks in your writing, eg "they knew not" and "it happened that", that are a little funky and Biblical sounding and keep the readers on their toes.
Your entry seems to be well edited and descriptive, and I didn't see any revisions to make. The death of one of the men is sudden and unexpected. If you were to add a little foreshadowing, it might be interesting to see how that works.
Thanks for the read,
SS
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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I tried to stay under the word limit. Lately i am being looked at very critically by the CEC and did not want it to be too wordy.
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what are you getting DQd for?
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Both were my fault. For the KH poem contest, I wanted to see if a 2-word poem would be accepted. It wasn't. Now I know a poem has to be bigger than 2 words but still don't know how many words comprise a poem. For the 1200-word dash, I was told my entry did not have a beginning, conflict, and resolution. I feel in 2100 words you can do an amusing or interesting character study but if you expect it to have all the ingredients in a short story or novel, you will end up with mediocre work.
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I seem to recall being similarly DQd for a story that they said didn't follow the plot rules. Except, mine did. The word requirements though are pretty black and white.
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They are. I just have to learn to follow the rules!