Sweet Mary Makes up Her Mind
The breezes give advice.15 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An unusual post for you Verna and I enjoyed the sentiment in this free-verse. When it comes to love we always show our true colours and we should be wary of the signs of weak foundations as some love will not last when it is based on selfishness, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
  |
An unusual post for you Verna and I enjoyed the sentiment in this free-verse. When it comes to love we always show our true colours and we should be wary of the signs of weak foundations as some love will not last when it is based on selfishness, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
-
Thanks for the review, Dolly-so glad you enjoyed it. Hugs, Verna
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
You've spun a wonderful tale here which completely immersed me into Sweet Mary's world of fantasy. I loved the "rain-washed rocker" and all your botanical imagery leading up to your two suit(o)rs. This added variation to your free verse with excellent dialogue smoothly inserted before the breezes decisively advise which one to choose. Charming, original and a joy to read. Well done, Verna, and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
|
You've spun a wonderful tale here which completely immersed me into Sweet Mary's world of fantasy. I loved the "rain-washed rocker" and all your botanical imagery leading up to your two suit(o)rs. This added variation to your free verse with excellent dialogue smoothly inserted before the breezes decisively advise which one to choose. Charming, original and a joy to read. Well done, Verna, and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
-
What a lovely review. I really appreciate it!
Comment from BethShelby
The title should be Sweet Mary Make Her Mind Up
This is a good free verse poem. Yes, it is obvious who the choice should be. All those promices are just works and actions always speak louder than works.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
|
The title should be Sweet Mary Make Her Mind Up
This is a good free verse poem. Yes, it is obvious who the choice should be. All those promices are just works and actions always speak louder than works.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
-
Thanks for a great review AND the title correction. I appreciate it.
Comment from Sally Law
You did great despite the spacing. More on that in a minute.
This is a sweet one of the divided heart. The heart is wise though and not easily fooled if it is true like Mary's. She picked the man who showed his love from the start: Jimmy.
Sending you my best today as always and my very best wishes in the contest.
Sal Xoxo's
Report editing/formatting problems to Tom the Administrator. I am having a time.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
|
You did great despite the spacing. More on that in a minute.
This is a sweet one of the divided heart. The heart is wise though and not easily fooled if it is true like Mary's. She picked the man who showed his love from the start: Jimmy.
Sending you my best today as always and my very best wishes in the contest.
Sal Xoxo's
Report editing/formatting problems to Tom the Administrator. I am having a time.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
-
Thanks for the sweet review. We are too often drawn to the fancy words!
Comment from jessizero
I guess I didn't really "get" this piece, but it does have a nice quality to it. When the poem is paired with the title and description, it makes a little more sense. Did you mean to say "He Mind" or did you mean "Her Mind"? Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
|
I guess I didn't really "get" this piece, but it does have a nice quality to it. When the poem is paired with the title and description, it makes a little more sense. Did you mean to say "He Mind" or did you mean "Her Mind"? Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
-
Thanks, Jessi, for your review. I took it down after I put it up and put it on again. Still, the spacing wasn't right, but check it and see if it makes sense.
-
I get it now! The first time I viewed it, it only had the first line, which is why it didn't make sense to me. This was a beautiful poem. I'm glad you got it to appear right now.
-
Thanks, Jessi for hanging in there with me!!