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Comment from BermyBye50
Lea,
Wow! You've penned an excellent entry in the ABC Poetry Contest. Each of your newest poem read like creative spoken word poetry that would be welcomed at any open mic night.
I especially like the following two lines:
Nectar of new energy overflows only time can see
Observe that which slipped ancient bones decades gone
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Lea,
Wow! You've penned an excellent entry in the ABC Poetry Contest. Each of your newest poem read like creative spoken word poetry that would be welcomed at any open mic night.
I especially like the following two lines:
Nectar of new energy overflows only time can see
Observe that which slipped ancient bones decades gone
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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So nice to see you here and have your great reviews always so meticulous kind and appreciative these are great gifts I thank you for them! I'm glad you like them!
Comment from Jim Wile
I liked this poem, Lea. I'm just a little unsure of what you meant with the word "slipped." The interpretation I'm going with is that a lusty, careless youth caused an old person to slip and fall years ago. This kind of thing should be expected of youth, whose minds are not fully developed, but they are like sponges and soak up the lessons of life gradually over time. The wisdom thus gained is rapturous to him when he is old, and he's pleased.
Although our bodies may be letting us old folk down now, our minds are much wiser through experience, which in many ways, makes life more pleasurable. - Jim
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I liked this poem, Lea. I'm just a little unsure of what you meant with the word "slipped." The interpretation I'm going with is that a lusty, careless youth caused an old person to slip and fall years ago. This kind of thing should be expected of youth, whose minds are not fully developed, but they are like sponges and soak up the lessons of life gradually over time. The wisdom thus gained is rapturous to him when he is old, and he's pleased.
Although our bodies may be letting us old folk down now, our minds are much wiser through experience, which in many ways, makes life more pleasurable. - Jim
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Hi Jim thank you again for your wisdom your kind comment and for your insights always a pleasure to see you here! When I put the word slipped I meant in terms of the character the woman losing grip of her own emotional heat if you will and mixing with the others so slipped and burning her fingers pleasurably in remembrance if you will. Thank you again I hope you have the most amazing day I look forward to getting back in the swing of my second book which I currently have a release date coming up very quickly for the first one I will let you know thank you again my friends have a great day!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a well written abc poem, Lea with the lust of youth and their 'sponge gripped minds' - love that description, but not forgetting the wisdom that we collect over decades of life. Great presentation and good luck in the contest.
cheers,
valda '
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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This is a well written abc poem, Lea with the lust of youth and their 'sponge gripped minds' - love that description, but not forgetting the wisdom that we collect over decades of life. Great presentation and good luck in the contest.
cheers,
valda '
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Hi Valda thank you again! For reading and offering your insight and great comments thank you for your fine rating always appreciate having you here thank you so much!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
True wisdom comes from God. Yes, the young often do gather knowledge like a sponge. It's life experiences that teach us to use that knowledge. I enjoyed reading this contest entry and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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True wisdom comes from God. Yes, the young often do gather knowledge like a sponge. It's life experiences that teach us to use that knowledge. I enjoyed reading this contest entry and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you yes very well said when I wrote that line I was thinking of my son's and how quickly I pick things up as you mentioned in your comments. Thank you again Barbara appreciate you as always!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A strong and interesting celebration of elderly wisdom in your ABC verse. Some wonderful imagery of the young with their "sponge-gripped minds" and the cyclical nature of wisdom of the aged forever retained in its cape of rapture." Small edit: n(ai)vety.
Well done, Lea, and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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A strong and interesting celebration of elderly wisdom in your ABC verse. Some wonderful imagery of the young with their "sponge-gripped minds" and the cyclical nature of wisdom of the aged forever retained in its cape of rapture." Small edit: n(ai)vety.
Well done, Lea, and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Hi Debbie thank you again! I made the changes you mentioned I appreciate you pointing out as always my punctuation is never been my strong suit. Soon I will make an announcement but I will let you guys know just ahead of time thank you again Debbie enjoy the day!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Very cool and mystical vibe to this one. Two spags, though: Naivety (a before i - though it certainly SOUNDS like it should be the other way!!) and you need an apostrophe in wisdoms. (Wisdom's)
Good luck in the contest!! xo
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Very cool and mystical vibe to this one. Two spags, though: Naivety (a before i - though it certainly SOUNDS like it should be the other way!!) and you need an apostrophe in wisdoms. (Wisdom's)
Good luck in the contest!! xo
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Top of the morning Rachelle! thank you very much as always for your reviews always happy to see you and be seen thank you I've made those corrections may your day be an awesome one we will talk again soon. Thanks again!
Comment from BethShelby
It seems to me you are saying what is happening today is a good thing. Things have come full circle and young people's minds are soaking up knowledge. There is a new energy flowing and the much like that which flowed from the philosphers of old. Things have come full circle. It does seem knowledge is increasing. Your poetry is deep.
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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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It seems to me you are saying what is happening today is a good thing. Things have come full circle and young people's minds are soaking up knowledge. There is a new energy flowing and the much like that which flowed from the philosphers of old. Things have come full circle. It does seem knowledge is increasing. Your poetry is deep.
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Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Hi Beth thank you so much for reading and offering your comments always insightful coming from you. You certainly catch the general gist of the poem thanks as always for reading stopping in and offering your phone rating I hope things are well with you and you're enjoying our crazy heat!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We gain the wisdom when we are too old to enjoy the insights Lea and this is life as we know it, a poignant post, much enjoyed, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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We gain the wisdom when we are too old to enjoy the insights Lea and this is life as we know it, a poignant post, much enjoyed, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you again Dolly as always you are awesome! Time to get back into the swing of things enjoy your day!