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The Attic

Kimo poem

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Comment from Aussie
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It's good to see you writing. So many treasures are stowed away in attics and one day when the owner dies and family cleans up, surprisingly, gold is found hidden away for years. I don't know if you watch The Antique Roadshow BBC on TV but so many people bring amazing things for the experts to value. Some find real treasure like a ring worth $30,000! Love, K. xx

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
    Oh is it ! i must try to watch it sometime . Thank you for sopping by..
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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I enjoyed the sentiments here as we view our old possessions and remember the trials of life within them, a magical post with deep meaning, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
    Thank you very much .I wonder if the present generation would find find anything worth keeping in their parents attic...where do they have the time!
Comment from GWHARGIS
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This was a poem rich in detail and alluded to a story without telling the story. Attics hold clues to our past and sometimes others past as well. There are memories in every corner and behind every cobweb. Beautifully written. Gretchen

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
    Thank you very much for this gracious review..
Comment from patcelaw
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a very good KIMO poem for the club event and I wish you the very best. May you have a wonderful evening and may you also have a wonderful month. God bless.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
    Thank you very much ...
Comment from lyenochka
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Wow! I loved your selection of words - so much of past life does end up as a "misplaced dream." I really liked the "vague sepia memories." This really captured that sensation of change of past experience transforming into the intangible dream-like memory.

I would suggest changing it to "dreams" otherwise, grammatically, we'd say "a misplaced dream".

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
    Thank you Helen I have changed it to dreams
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Comment from Nicki.B
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This is the first time I've read a Kimo poem, I'm learning so much from this platform! I really like this one, every house has one of these I would think an attic or cupboard or whatever the case maybe, if you dare rummage there you never know what you might find! I just wanted ask, would the last word dream be plural the same as memories? Just a thought!

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
    It should be 'dreams' .I have made te change. Thank you very much for pointing out .In an attic there would be fragments of many dreams..
reply by Nicki.B on 11-Jul-2024
    You're welcome!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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Your words drew a picture as clear as the photo embedded with your entry
Well
Done and
Good luck
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 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
    Thank you .
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
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A lovely description of the collection of memories we find in our attics. Very nicely written with perfect artwork chosen for your presentation. thank you for sharing this Kimo poem from your club.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
    Thank you very much..
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Kimo poem, the Israeli Haiku, how lovely, Santha! I won't pretent to know anything about either forms, but I do like to read them. This is sweet, if I had an attic like that in the picture I'd be up there all day, remembering. I enjoyed reading this one, it was lovely. Well done, my friend :) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
    Thank you very much ,Sandra . I am sorry my reply is delayed...Hope you are energised after your Spanish sojourn...
Comment from CrystieCookie999
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What an intriguing poetic form. I did not know there was an Israeli haiku, so to speak. I like the idea of how the attic has an undefined feeling with the words 'vague' and 'misplaced' and 'fragments.' It seems like the past is less particular than the present.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
    Thank you very much for stopping by to read my small poem...