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At Home in Mississippi

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Growing up in the 40 and 50 in MIssissippi

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Comment from lyenochka
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Even when you do repeat a story, you do give us fresh new details like the glowing cow jumping over the moon. Or perhaps I didn't remember that detail. I do remember about the cute guy who entertained you during the train ride.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
    Thank you Helen. People say I have a good memory but you have me beat, at least, about more recent thing. You are almost the only one who remember what I'eve written about before.
    Beth
reply by lyenochka on 05-Jul-2024
    We're two peas in a pod when it comes to memory. Glad to have you in the same pod! God is good to us! 💞💖
Comment from Thesis
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You described a very scary situation for a young girl and her mother that is hard to fathom. Drink soldiers hitting on a mother and her young daughter is appalling. The behavior of the soldiers was disgusting. I'm sorry you had o experience that.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the review and comments. Back in the 40's many things seemed safer than today, but on the other hand, men seemed to feel they had a right to hit on women and women had very little recourse other than try to ignore them.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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What a memorable journey this obviously was for you, Beth! Your chapter is infused with great detail: the smell of the black smoke, the whiskey on the soldiers' breath, the clamour and excitement, not just of where you were going but of the incredible machine that was going to get you there. A lovely contrast, too, between your reaction to the soldiers and that of your mother. Your skill in helping us to experience all this from a child's perspective in a former time is, as ever, impressive. Well done, Beth, and thanks. Debbie

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
    Thank you so much Debbie. You really know how to make someone feel good about their writing. I appreciate you and your comments.
    Beth
Comment from Sugarray77
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This is good writing Beth and your narrative is well constructed and flows well from point to point. The story draws your reader in to the aspects of train travel and how it wasn't always so pleasant. I enjoyed reading it.

Melissa

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
    Thank you Melissa. I glad you liked my story. I really apprciate the review and comments.
    Beth
Comment from jim vecchio
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This was very engrossing. You could be another Mark Twain, writing of life along the Mississippi. When in Shreveport, were you anywhere near the Sulfur River bottoms, where the Foulk Monster supposedly prowled?

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
    Thank you Jim. All I remember about Shreveport was almost missing the train. When I went there later by car, I remember a very scary bridge and almost getting arrested by cops on my way there on still another trip but that is yet another adventure.
reply by jim vecchio on 01-Jul-2024
    I'll be awaiting that adventure. I just asked because I probably saw "The Legend Of Boggy Creek" a hundred times and though it is cheaply made and cheesy, there's a quality about it that is very entertaining.
Comment from Begin Again
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Another wonderful and fun story about growing up in Mississippi. It's wonderful that you remember all these details and awesome that you will have it in a book for your children.

Somethings I spotted:

I'd never written a train beforeI'd never written a train before

might have such and unusual

there was a built-up

getting good a recognizing it

Smiles, Carol


 Comment Written 29-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
    Thank you Carol, I really appreciate you pointing out my spags. Someone those things seem as clear as if the just happened but other things I sure I've completely forgotten.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this memory of the train trip with us. I am sure it was an experience you've never forgotten. I know I wouldn't have. I am so enjoying reading these posts.

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 Comment Written 29-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
    Thank you Barbara, I really appreciate the review and comments.
    Beth
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Excellent writing.
I'd never written a train before, - oops (ridden)
An hour isn't much time when you absolutely have to be back on board.
Best wishes.

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 Comment Written 29-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
    Thank you Wayne. No and hour is much time and my tended to forget when she was shopping. It is wonder we didn't miss the train. We came close.
    Beth