Saying Good-Bye
Will I know love again?38 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
I try to read everything you post, but disappointedly, I'm been out of town for a few weeks and fallen so far behind that it's impossible to catch up. But it's good to be back. Thanks for sharing.
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I try to read everything you post, but disappointedly, I'm been out of town for a few weeks and fallen so far behind that it's impossible to catch up. But it's good to be back. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
Comment from Michele Harber
Ooh, this is so sad and sweet. I like the wordplay you used in the first verse, particularly, seamlessly integrating three seasons. The second verse brings in the pathos, and the third the honesty and self-deprecation that makes every reader root for you. Even though I know this is fictional, I still find myself hoping she'll come back to you, even for a moment. That's powerful writing!
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Ooh, this is so sad and sweet. I like the wordplay you used in the first verse, particularly, seamlessly integrating three seasons. The second verse brings in the pathos, and the third the honesty and self-deprecation that makes every reader root for you. Even though I know this is fictional, I still find myself hoping she'll come back to you, even for a moment. That's powerful writing!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
Comment from gansach
I like your poem very much. It's wistful and sad and expresses very well that hopeful time of a new relationship and the feeling of loss when it doesn't work out.
Well done!
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I like your poem very much. It's wistful and sad and expresses very well that hopeful time of a new relationship and the feeling of loss when it doesn't work out.
Well done!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
Comment from June Sargent
One can only hope - old or young, we're all fools when it comes to love. Some never taste it. Fleeting though these moments may be, you still have memories. All the more golden when it's in autumn...
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One can only hope - old or young, we're all fools when it comes to love. Some never taste it. Fleeting though these moments may be, you still have memories. All the more golden when it's in autumn...
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
Comment from teafor2
Jim, this a poignant write of "loved and lost." Heart-wrenching professed
longings and bittersweet confession/promised and kept, but so far to no
avail...Those who've been there, know this feeling well...Those who have not, pray that you won't/don't! The audio doubled down on the implications.
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Jim, this a poignant write of "loved and lost." Heart-wrenching professed
longings and bittersweet confession/promised and kept, but so far to no
avail...Those who've been there, know this feeling well...Those who have not, pray that you won't/don't! The audio doubled down on the implications.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
Comment from GWHARGIS
I love that song, Sealed with a Kiss. Your poem was full of the strong emotions. Love, sadness, even the worry of not being as important as she was to you. The questions of will she remember me, show vulnerability. Well done. Gretchen
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I love that song, Sealed with a Kiss. Your poem was full of the strong emotions. Love, sadness, even the worry of not being as important as she was to you. The questions of will she remember me, show vulnerability. Well done. Gretchen
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
Comment from ESOSTINE
Some times saying good bye is hard, but may be necessary for eventual healing. Thanks, dear Jim for sharing your free style poem. I did enjoy the reading it. Well done.
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Some times saying good bye is hard, but may be necessary for eventual healing. Thanks, dear Jim for sharing your free style poem. I did enjoy the reading it. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
Comment from royowen
I remember that song very well indeed, sealed with a kiss, a great poem for those who have tasted love and lost will understand exactly what you're talking talking about, this is wonderfully written, blessings Roy
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I remember that song very well indeed, sealed with a kiss, a great poem for those who have tasted love and lost will understand exactly what you're talking talking about, this is wonderfully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
Comment from Sugarray77
Well done, Jim. This is a very moving FreeVerse and you have all of us hoping your main character will find love in the Autumn :). I enjoyed reading it.
Melissa
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Well done, Jim. This is a very moving FreeVerse and you have all of us hoping your main character will find love in the Autumn :). I enjoyed reading it.
Melissa
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
Comment from lyenochka
The first line tells me perhaps that there might have been a difference in age as the narrator says he was in the "autumn" of his life. We don't know if she was in the "spring" of her life but the love didn't last. Great story poem!
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The first line tells me perhaps that there might have been a difference in age as the narrator says he was in the "autumn" of his life. We don't know if she was in the "spring" of her life but the love didn't last. Great story poem!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
