The Hallway
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I keep a paper pad and pencil with me at all times so when my muse chooses to review something I can write it down. I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing this poem with us.
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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I keep a paper pad and pencil with me at all times so when my muse chooses to review something I can write it down. I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing this poem with us.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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How do you manage the paper pad and pencil in the shower?
That's when my musr often says hello. Smiling.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was such a strong poem. I love the imagery. What stood out was the dimly lit hallway. For me it is a metaphor for the passage of time and the uncertainties of fate. Your poem had me thinking about the nature of fate and the significance of our individual roles within its grand design.
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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I thought this was such a strong poem. I love the imagery. What stood out was the dimly lit hallway. For me it is a metaphor for the passage of time and the uncertainties of fate. Your poem had me thinking about the nature of fate and the significance of our individual roles within its grand design.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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First of all, thank you.
Secondly, (don't you just love how the left side, hemisphere of the brain takes over?) Number 1.
Number 2. Number 3. Number 4. Number
You get it. Why do I bother to point this out? Because, you
"speak" with inherent intelligence. Something in your response "reached" me. This is not so usually encountered. (in my experience) Soo, I'm going to step outside the controlling left side, to appraise you of the magic side. The right side. What education, society, and almost, almost, everything that brings one recognition, are not on. The left side controld the world. The right side controls contentment, joy, all creative functions. I ask, humbly that you consciously try to use your right side more. I did not know enough to do this. My daughter at a very tender age, asked me why I don't use it? Let me tell you, that is aVERY humbling statement. So in conclusion, I humbly ask you to read two poems of mine.
"Which Side" and "Living or Dreaming" BTW, my daughter worked on the landrover-
Perseverance, the one that is on Mars. Thank you again.
Comment from Mark Jackson
I like your poem it evokes a contemplative and somewhat haunting atmosphere, exploring themes of time, fate, and self-reflection. My favourite is the penultimate stanza, the idea of fate always leaving you it, is great. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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I like your poem it evokes a contemplative and somewhat haunting atmosphere, exploring themes of time, fate, and self-reflection. My favourite is the penultimate stanza, the idea of fate always leaving you it, is great. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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And thank you so much for reading me! Hey, I?m going to post a short story very soon. Today?
I think it might be the funniest thing I?ve ever written. Could you stop by after I pist?
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good morning, Doug,
Your free verse resonates with me as it brought back memories of the hallway in my parents' upstairs = my childhood home. I was frightened of it as the head of my bed was against a wall that faced the hallway and with my imagination I envisioned all sorts of frightening apparitions running down that hall to me. Didn't help that we lived right across the road from a 200 year-old-cemetery!
I enjoyed the eeriness of your poem and the paucity of words you employed.
Two nits to consider editing:
emenates = emanates
erie = eerie
And I would eliminate the periods at the end of the lines...
Much enjoyed!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
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reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Good morning, Doug,
Your free verse resonates with me as it brought back memories of the hallway in my parents' upstairs = my childhood home. I was frightened of it as the head of my bed was against a wall that faced the hallway and with my imagination I envisioned all sorts of frightening apparitions running down that hall to me. Didn't help that we lived right across the road from a 200 year-old-cemetery!
I enjoyed the eeriness of your poem and the paucity of words you employed.
Two nits to consider editing:
emenates = emanates
erie = eerie
And I would eliminate the periods at the end of the lines...
Much enjoyed!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
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Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Oh shit. I used to be able to spell. Really. Until I learned foreign languages. Then it all went to?Iowa. Hey! Thanks. Please read a short story I will be posting today or tomorrow.
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Oh, and I posted it. And Discover card would not let me promote it more. Though I have ample remaining credit and have no bill that has landed here. Grrrrr Roar. Also I will have a part 2.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Sweeping philosophy, or sweeping the floor, who knows which is the right one? Playing Tag with Fate is always the same, you are always left playing 'it.' Such is life, my friend. Fate doesn't hand us an answer, it asks a question of us.
Jesse
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Sweeping philosophy, or sweeping the floor, who knows which is the right one? Playing Tag with Fate is always the same, you are always left playing 'it.' Such is life, my friend. Fate doesn't hand us an answer, it asks a question of us.
Jesse
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Hi brother! Thanks for the six. You always lookin? out for me. Say, I?ll be posting a short story in a day or two.
Please stop by.
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I will stop by when you post a short story. I am already a fan of yours.
You earned the six stars.
Have a good day, my friend.
Jesse
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This really is a little stream of imagination before reality harshly breaks in! Your free verse creates a rather creepy, mesmeric scene leading to a doorway that goes who knows where and what if you ventured beyond? I like the imagery of your muse playing tag with fate. Some small edits: em(a)nates, procl(a)mation. Thank you for sharing your quite unique and playful little verse. Take care Debbie
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reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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This really is a little stream of imagination before reality harshly breaks in! Your free verse creates a rather creepy, mesmeric scene leading to a doorway that goes who knows where and what if you ventured beyond? I like the imagery of your muse playing tag with fate. Some small edits: em(a)nates, procl(a)mation. Thank you for sharing your quite unique and playful little verse. Take care Debbie
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Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thank you. Sheets. That?s my third spelling mistake. Hey, read my next post (soon). Short story. Should, hopefully be funny.
