Alphabet Tale
Hope this meets the contest's requirements.23 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a fun poem as you use all 26 letters of the alphabet. The story even makes sense, which is part of the rules. Good job well-done and you don't need a picture to help the reader see the words in her mind.
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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This is a fun poem as you use all 26 letters of the alphabet. The story even makes sense, which is part of the rules. Good job well-done and you don't need a picture to help the reader see the words in her mind.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thank you Carol for such a kind reply. This poem came to me after I trebled last night's medicinal requirements. (Not true.) But I'm sure that would have helped. Thank you again.
Comment from Cristine22
Nice! The contest rules sound quite challenging, but you managed it even keeping it in alphabetical order! There a couple of misspelled words-indigenous and xylophone. Otherwise, great job!
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Nice! The contest rules sound quite challenging, but you managed it even keeping it in alphabetical order! There a couple of misspelled words-indigenous and xylophone. Otherwise, great job!
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thank you for such a comprehensive reply. Those corrections have now been made. Would you care to become my editor? Salary negotiable, but you'll pay no tax.
Comment from GoWiSt
"indiginious" indigenous--correct spelling.
"sauntered towards" I think this would read better as sauntering towards.
Hmm, I wonder who the doctor should assist--the kangaroos or wild Zambezians?
This was very well done, creatively meeting this very challenging contest requirement. Good luck!
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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"indiginious" indigenous--correct spelling.
"sauntered towards" I think this would read better as sauntering towards.
Hmm, I wonder who the doctor should assist--the kangaroos or wild Zambezians?
This was very well done, creatively meeting this very challenging contest requirement. Good luck!
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thank you, both errors now corrected. Your help is very much appreciated.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Well it looks like you read the rules and said...that's too easy....hold my beer! And then you did the entire story in alphabetical order! And to top it off, it makes sense. Nicely done! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Well it looks like you read the rules and said...that's too easy....hold my beer! And then you did the entire story in alphabetical order! And to top it off, it makes sense. Nicely done! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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I held your beer for as long as I could, but it got heavy, so I had to drink it. So, Now, I brought you another one. It too became heavy. I drank that. Now, I'm half shot an' it's all your fault. Hope you feel bad. How about another drink.
Comment from Mark Jackson
I did not enter this contest but it seems to me to meet the requirements, not sure if your word needed to be in alphabetical order but I guess it is easier to keep track that way. The story however fails to make total sense as indigenous kangaroos would be in Australia and not Paraguay. Only a minor point so I would not worry about it. Good luck and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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I did not enter this contest but it seems to me to meet the requirements, not sure if your word needed to be in alphabetical order but I guess it is easier to keep track that way. The story however fails to make total sense as indigenous kangaroos would be in Australia and not Paraguay. Only a minor point so I would not worry about it. Good luck and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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He escaped from the Paraguayan zoo and hopped onto the wrong bus. I suppose I should have included that in the poem. Thank you for the great review.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well, it's certainly very clever and lucidly tells an ABC tale in cohesive prose form, all very acceptable for the contest. You haven't hesitated to include an impressive number of polysyllabic words either: small edits: unrestrai(n)ed and x(y)lophone (although the latter might be differently spelled in the US). Any chance of a pic to complement your verse? But an excellent and imaginative entry. Well done! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Well, it's certainly very clever and lucidly tells an ABC tale in cohesive prose form, all very acceptable for the contest. You haven't hesitated to include an impressive number of polysyllabic words either: small edits: unrestrai(n)ed and x(y)lophone (although the latter might be differently spelled in the US). Any chance of a pic to complement your verse? But an excellent and imaginative entry. Well done! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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I couldn't get the pic, the kangaroo wouldn't give me his camera. Thank you, Debbi for such a good and positive review. Much appreciated. By the way, I failed spelling and punctuation at school. Many other subjects as well. But I was good at recess.
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The main thing is you get your message over which you did ...in style:)
Comment from gansach
This is an interesting entry for the Alphabet Tale writing prompt. Your sentence does well using all the alphabet letters. It is a cohesive little story that paints a vivid picture. Good effort! Best wishes!
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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This is an interesting entry for the Alphabet Tale writing prompt. Your sentence does well using all the alphabet letters. It is a cohesive little story that paints a vivid picture. Good effort! Best wishes!
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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I really appreciate your pointing out those errors, they are now corrected. I've also fixed sauntering. I wish all reviewers on Fanstory were as helpful as you.
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I am glad to help if I can. I'd rather have an error brought to my attention so I can fix it rather than have someone gloss over it. I've changed my review to reflect your corrections. Good luck!
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Thank you so very much. I appreciate that. By the way, I agree totally with your comment.
Comment from Julie Helms
Excellent job on this entry. You followed the prompt requirements and you didn't have to do it in ABC order, so extra challenging!
Fix the spelling typos the others mentioned to you and it will be a stellar entry!
Julie
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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Excellent job on this entry. You followed the prompt requirements and you didn't have to do it in ABC order, so extra challenging!
Fix the spelling typos the others mentioned to you and it will be a stellar entry!
Julie
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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Thank you, Julie, for another lovely reply. You are always so generous with your comments.
Comment from royowen
You've crafted this in a most curious way, normally it's written in acrostic fashion, but you've written it in a most commendable way, and it is a most affective entry in this contest, well done, good luck blessings Roy
Typo (Quaranneened) quarantined?
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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You've crafted this in a most curious way, normally it's written in acrostic fashion, but you've written it in a most commendable way, and it is a most affective entry in this contest, well done, good luck blessings Roy
Typo (Quaranneened) quarantined?
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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Roy, thank you again, I think I've corrected those spelling errors. I've had words with my editor, me, and told him to lift his game. Your comments are always greatly appreciated.
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Well done
Comment from kahpot
"quaraneened" should this be (quarantined) I very much like the way you have presented this work, the ones I have read have them going down the page (vertically) very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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"quaraneened" should this be (quarantined) I very much like the way you have presented this work, the ones I have read have them going down the page (vertically) very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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So you discovered spelling is not my strong point. Normally I'd blame word spell, but in this case, it was plain typist incompetence. Thank you for taking the time to review and then awarding so many stars.
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I do not penalize for grammar or punctuation errors, not my strong suite either, I just go by what I read and feel