Panpipes
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Comment from juliaSjames
It hardly seems fair to review when I've dropped into this story so very late in the day. I can't offer any constructive comments on the plot, it's still too complicated for me to follow easily in spite of your careful summary. However, at least I can compliment you on your depiction of Ayesha. She comes across as independent and courageous, and able to think quickly on her feet. She certainly needs those skills to survive her current situation. Love how you showed her shock when Steve dropped his bombshell about proposing to Sarah. But maybe there's hope yet. Who knows what you have cunningly hidden up your author's sleeve?
As always, your prose incorporates poetic elements like the sky's "tangerine glow". Beautiful.
Blessings, Julia
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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It hardly seems fair to review when I've dropped into this story so very late in the day. I can't offer any constructive comments on the plot, it's still too complicated for me to follow easily in spite of your careful summary. However, at least I can compliment you on your depiction of Ayesha. She comes across as independent and courageous, and able to think quickly on her feet. She certainly needs those skills to survive her current situation. Love how you showed her shock when Steve dropped his bombshell about proposing to Sarah. But maybe there's hope yet. Who knows what you have cunningly hidden up your author's sleeve?
As always, your prose incorporates poetic elements like the sky's "tangerine glow". Beautiful.
Blessings, Julia
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Thanks very much for your review and encouraging comments, Julia. I always appreciate your dropping by. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Jim Wile
This was a great chapter showing us how up in the air Ayesha's life is right now. I was intrigued with her reaction to the news that Steve has a serious girlfriend. There definitely seemed to be an attraction there, which is hard for her to deny.
I wonder if her thoughts concerning Runrot have to do with the elephant and her plan to adopt him?
I loved her exchange with that worm Kamul, including her inner thoughts about him. Seems like his fears are becoming more real to him as this damnable woman seems to possess the means to implicate him.
This was a well-written, enjoyable chapter, Tony.
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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This was a great chapter showing us how up in the air Ayesha's life is right now. I was intrigued with her reaction to the news that Steve has a serious girlfriend. There definitely seemed to be an attraction there, which is hard for her to deny.
I wonder if her thoughts concerning Runrot have to do with the elephant and her plan to adopt him?
I loved her exchange with that worm Kamul, including her inner thoughts about him. Seems like his fears are becoming more real to him as this damnable woman seems to possess the means to implicate him.
This was a well-written, enjoyable chapter, Tony.
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Thanks very much for your review and the sixth star, Jim. Much appreciated. Yes, Ayesha still has a few decisions to make before everything can be wrapped up. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Charism7
It's an interesting story that is converted into a poem. This is my first time encountering such a poem structure. And it's quite long too. I used to short poems by the way. Anyway, it is entertaining and the title of this poem is eye-catching. Thanks.
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reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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It's an interesting story that is converted into a poem. This is my first time encountering such a poem structure. And it's quite long too. I used to short poems by the way. Anyway, it is entertaining and the title of this poem is eye-catching. Thanks.
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Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Interesting
Comment from lyenochka
Ayesha keeps showing much more intelligence and maturity over the course of this book. She's not only piecing together the mystery of her husband's death, but she also has developed diplomatic skills. Hopefully, she and Steve will figure out how to deal with this mess.
I liked how you timed the dropping of the meat and the phone right as Steve announced his engagement to Sarah. It gives the reader pause to consider if Ayesha was hoping for more of a relationship with Steve.
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Ayesha keeps showing much more intelligence and maturity over the course of this book. She's not only piecing together the mystery of her husband's death, but she also has developed diplomatic skills. Hopefully, she and Steve will figure out how to deal with this mess.
I liked how you timed the dropping of the meat and the phone right as Steve announced his engagement to Sarah. It gives the reader pause to consider if Ayesha was hoping for more of a relationship with Steve.
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Thanks, Helen. I appreciate your comments about Ayesha. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Ayesha is catching on to the fact that she has to accept that her husband was not a good person, and the money may be a problem. Kamul is beginning to worry about what she knows. Fortunately, she isn't as dumb as they men in her life think.
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Ayesha is catching on to the fact that she has to accept that her husband was not a good person, and the money may be a problem. Kamul is beginning to worry about what she knows. Fortunately, she isn't as dumb as they men in her life think.
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Thanks, Carol. I appreciate your continued support and your comments about Ayesha. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from royowen
I love where this is going Tony. The phone call to Steve brought immediate results, he was certainly sure that Bruno was dead, and that Ken Shuttle was mysoginist and not as bad as he appears, he solved the problem also of diverting rental income from a property she owned, well done Tony, super post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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I love where this is going Tony. The phone call to Steve brought immediate results, he was certainly sure that Bruno was dead, and that Ken Shuttle was mysoginist and not as bad as he appears, he solved the problem also of diverting rental income from a property she owned, well done Tony, super post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thanks, Roy, for your continued encouragement. Greatly appreciated. Tony
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Most welcome
Comment from Sankey
This, again, was a great read. Glad I caught you in time. Not that I need the phoney as I am packed to the hilt. I need to use some up on more new promotions. You are still keeping us all hanging out for more of your inspiration. Keep it coming! NO SPAGS!
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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This, again, was a great read. Glad I caught you in time. Not that I need the phoney as I am packed to the hilt. I need to use some up on more new promotions. You are still keeping us all hanging out for more of your inspiration. Keep it coming! NO SPAGS!
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thanks very much both for the review and sixer, Geoffrey. I appreciate your support. Glad you?re still enjoying the story. All the best, Tony.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a good chapter that tied up a few loose ends while not spoiling the rest of the story. I bet she was a tad upset when Steve mentioned Sarah. But we all know Bapit is the one for her. Great use of dialogue in this. Gretchen
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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This was a good chapter that tied up a few loose ends while not spoiling the rest of the story. I bet she was a tad upset when Steve mentioned Sarah. But we all know Bapit is the one for her. Great use of dialogue in this. Gretchen
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thanks very much for the review, Gretchen. I appreciate your continued support. Glad you?re still enjoying the story. Yes, I suspect Ayesha was a bit upset. She was obviously quite attracted by Steve. All the best, Tony.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another skilfully crafted chapter, Tony! Your descriptive detail of Ayesha on the beach and in the sea is so evocative I could almost book a sunshine holiday this very minute! She is trying to work out what's going on but she is just as much caught up in this web of intrigue. It seems that she is more than a bit interested in Steve and disappointed by his planned proposal. Thank you for sharing this utterly compelling story of yours. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Another skilfully crafted chapter, Tony! Your descriptive detail of Ayesha on the beach and in the sea is so evocative I could almost book a sunshine holiday this very minute! She is trying to work out what's going on but she is just as much caught up in this web of intrigue. It seems that she is more than a bit interested in Steve and disappointed by his planned proposal. Thank you for sharing this utterly compelling story of yours. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thanks very much for the review, Debbie. I appreciate your continued support. Glad you?re still enjoying the story. Yes, I think Steve?s news knocked her back a bit. Still, all?s fair in love and war! I guess she?s going to have to wash that man right out of her hair! All the best, Tony.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nice plot advancement. And nicely written, as well.
Ayesha desperately needs her affairs untangled.
And to wash the grease from her hair!
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Very nice plot advancement. And nicely written, as well.
Ayesha desperately needs her affairs untangled.
And to wash the grease from her hair!
Best wishes.
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thanks very much for the review, Wayne. I appreciate your continued support. Glad you?re still enjoying the story. Yes, I guess she?s going to have to wash that man right out of her hair! All the best, Tony.
