Adventures in a Tiny World
The danger of living in small places20 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I would say you had a very interesting month. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
'I do not need help I have a rosette!' She snapped (she)
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I would say you had a very interesting month. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
'I do not need help I have a rosette!' She snapped (she)
Comment Written 07-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Thank you, I was ill in bed most of the month.
Comment from Shanbreen
This poem is full of metaphors and imagery---"As I progressed, this treadmill got harder." I love that you realize that "The footsteps behind me, I believe are my own." I wish you well for the contest.
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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This poem is full of metaphors and imagery---"As I progressed, this treadmill got harder." I love that you realize that "The footsteps behind me, I believe are my own." I wish you well for the contest.
Comment Written 07-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Thank you very much.
Comment from royowen
I don't think the words of Jesus will ever diminish or vanish, they are the words of life. I love your tale, it's amazing how we think of smell, I don't think a pig would think of his own smell as foul, Beautifully written, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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I don't think the words of Jesus will ever diminish or vanish, they are the words of life. I love your tale, it's amazing how we think of smell, I don't think a pig would think of his own smell as foul, Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : I could call for your owner to(o)
Comment Written 07-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Thank you
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
A fascinating poem which is an analogy (I think I can guess of what!).
Written with honesty and a level of frustration yet probably very cathartic.
The stinky old boar is hilarious!
It kept my interest and wanting to read on to the end. What more can you ask of any piece of writing? I loved it (no white lies - promise)
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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A fascinating poem which is an analogy (I think I can guess of what!).
Written with honesty and a level of frustration yet probably very cathartic.
The stinky old boar is hilarious!
It kept my interest and wanting to read on to the end. What more can you ask of any piece of writing? I loved it (no white lies - promise)
Comment Written 07-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Thank you. I think there is a bit of the dog in all of us.
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Agreed :)
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading your poem. It is interesting and very descriptive. Also creative. Good luck in the contest. Very well written. The picture is a good choice.
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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I enjoyed reading your poem. It is interesting and very descriptive. Also creative. Good luck in the contest. Very well written. The picture is a good choice.
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Thank you
Comment from Esther Brown
Jesus says "Fear not". This life walk is becoming scarier as I journey on. The day is coming for judgement as God gets His fill of man's evil. I enjoy your writing and hope to read more of it. Esther
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Jesus says "Fear not". This life walk is becoming scarier as I journey on. The day is coming for judgement as God gets His fill of man's evil. I enjoy your writing and hope to read more of it. Esther
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Thank you
Comment from Nicki Nance
I love this story written in your clean poetic style. It truly is a journey, and you put this reader very close to the trail. You enriched your imagery with "smell." Your metaphor with the beautiful turned to dirty yelping dog was a statement in itself, Well done.
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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I love this story written in your clean poetic style. It truly is a journey, and you put this reader very close to the trail. You enriched your imagery with "smell." Your metaphor with the beautiful turned to dirty yelping dog was a statement in itself, Well done.
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Thank you very much, I am honored indeed.
Comment from Julie Helms
This poem is really interesting. It is the progression of the shiny wearing off over time. There is a lot to it, some of which I think I'm missing, but it is very thought provoking. I've come back to it several times before rating, because I like it, but just can't quite sort it all out.
literally spawling in shit.'
(Should this be sprawling?)
Julie
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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This poem is really interesting. It is the progression of the shiny wearing off over time. There is a lot to it, some of which I think I'm missing, but it is very thought provoking. I've come back to it several times before rating, because I like it, but just can't quite sort it all out.
literally spawling in shit.'
(Should this be sprawling?)
Julie
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Oh, thank you. It is those that I miss, my sight is getting bad and spell checkers don't spot them. It is an allegory.
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I looked it up and it is a word, archaic for spitting. That's probably why the spell checker didn't get it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The smell of sad regret and unhappiness is the theme of your poem and your walk in the forest is far from uplifting, it is drowning your positive thought here, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 03-May-2024
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The smell of sad regret and unhappiness is the theme of your poem and your walk in the forest is far from uplifting, it is drowning your positive thought here, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 02-May-2024
reply by the author on 03-May-2024
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Thank you
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I loved reading your poem as it had depth that really made me think about each stanza. It paints a picture of a journey through a mysterious forest. I love your word choices. "I walk" showed that this was a walk alone. There was a sense of disorientation while reading which worked well. The encounters with the dog, the bitch, and the old boar were enjoyable to read. The final lines for me share a sense of spiritual loss and regret.
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reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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I loved reading your poem as it had depth that really made me think about each stanza. It paints a picture of a journey through a mysterious forest. I love your word choices. "I walk" showed that this was a walk alone. There was a sense of disorientation while reading which worked well. The encounters with the dog, the bitch, and the old boar were enjoyable to read. The final lines for me share a sense of spiritual loss and regret.
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Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Thank you very for your time.
