Comment from Mintybee

Excellent

Happy birthday, Jess! Thanks to Debi for continuing to foster the FanStory community by doing these birthday shout-outs so we can get to know each other.
Mintybee

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 01-May-2024

Hi Mintybee, thanks for the kind words for Jessica and her poem. I appreciate your thoughtfulness so very much, my dear friend.
Love, Debi

Comment from Brenda Strauser

Excellent

Hi Debi. I really like your poem. It was nice to see how you explain the stages of her life. I like the Beatles and Fleetwood Mac. Very well written. Great job.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 01-May-2024

Hi Brenda, thanks for the kind words for Jessica and her poem. I appreciate your kindness so very much, my dear friend.
Love, Debi

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Aw... I like Jessica, she is very sweet and talented. You really captured her character well. I know she'll love your beautiful poem. Well done!

"She knew already then, she'd write again and then again"
--This line sounds a little awkward to me but I'm not an expert with rhyme and meter. In free verse I would write, ("even then, she knew, she'd write again and again") but you know better... just my thoughts.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024

Hi Marival, thanks so much for this lovely review. The problem with your way is that it is missing two syllables. And that line is in perfect meter, but if you think it sounds awkward I may change it. But first let me show you something. Sometimes we have to put extra words in there to keep the meter going. That's where I had to put the word, "and then" again. Because it's not enough alone.
Read the two lines how you thought it would sound good:.
Our Jessica's been writing since she first could hold a pen
Even then she knew she'd write again and again.......... you see how it cuts off right in the middle of your flow. Thats why I have to add those little extra words for the meter and syllable count. And they have to be in just the right spot or they will really sound awkward. Do you see what I mean?

I love that you told me that and I hope you understand. I will take your advice and change it, but I still have to put in the filler words to make it keep bouncing along.

I love feedback, so thank you with all my heart, dear friend. That meant a lot that you think enough of our friendship to be honest about it. Thank you so much. Hugs to you!! Love, Debi

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 30-Apr-2024

Yes, I figured it had to be the meter. I took a meter class long ago but I have a hard time writing meter and rhyme. For me it's too restrictive and kills my flow and muse. LoL

Comment from Mia Twysted

Excellent

Another amazing piece that shows the life and talent of another amazing individual. you bring people to life for your reader. Make them feel as if they have known them all along.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 01-May-2024

Hi Mia, you are so sweet and thanks for the kind words for Jessica and her poem. I appreciate your kindness so very much, my dear friend.
Love, Debi

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Debi,
This is a good poem about Jessica. Sorry about her loss. It seems like she has been here longer. Congrats to her for have a story published
Joan

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 01-May-2024

Hi there, Joan and thanks for the kind words for Jessica and her poem. I appreciate your kindness so very much, my dear friend.
Love, Debi

reply by dragonpoet on 01-May-2024

You are most kindly welcome, Debi.
Joan

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

What a wonderful tribute you've written to Jessica, Debi. You always do it so very well. We always get a wee glimpse into the life of the writer of you choice. I loved it. Ulla, xcx

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 01-May-2024

Hello Ulla, thanks for the kind words for Jessica and her poem. I appreciate your kindness so very much, my dear friend.
Love, Debi

Comment from QC Poet

Excellent

Thank you for Sharing your poetic story poem for the Admired Jessica in which you have written beautiful attributes and included very beautiful artwork and attached great video clips.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 01-May-2024

Hi QC, thanks for the kind words for Jessica and her poem. I appreciate your kindness so very much, my dear friend.
Love, Debi

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

As usual, your poem is simply fantastic and most definitely should make Jessica feel welcomed into the Fanstory family and be thrilled by all the birthday wishes. Your kind heart warms so many others who struggle with their day. What a blessing!
HAPPY BIRTHDAY. JESSICA... May your days be filled with blessings too!
Smiles and hugs, Carol

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 01-May-2024

Hi Carol, thanks for the kind words for Jessica and her poem. I appreciate your kindness so very much, my dear friend.
Love, Debi

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Happy Birthday to you--Happy Birthday to you--Happy Birthday, Jessica . . . Happy Birthday to YOU! And many more. Thanks, Debi, for reminding us of specials days, and especially those we don't know as well. :-)

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 01-May-2024

Hi there, Ric, thank you for the very kind review and comments for Jessica and her poem. I know she too will enjoy reading them and all the birthday wishes. Thank you again, my awesome friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Kelly Louisa Balliu

Excellent

I've read a couple of your birthday poems now, Debi, and I thinks it's so lovely that you take the time to write such personal accounts. It must take time and effort (and research) to write such beautiful poems that are inimitable to each person and that reveals how caring and thoughtful you are. I hope that the recipients are over the moon at receiving such gifts :-)

It reminds me of two friends I have who are sisters: our friendships have lasted over 25 years. One sister asked me if I'd write a poem for the other's 40th birthday, so I wrote her a limerick and her sister added it to a birthday book she'd compiled. Al, who's birthday it was, said she was really happy with it and for me that meant so much, as it was really enjoyable to write, so you must get this feeling, but tenfold.

Keep writing these poems, Debi. I'm sure they put a smile on the faces of many x

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024

Kelly, you are so sweet, and I do this for my friends and reviewers because I don't get a chance to review much because my screen time is so limited.
I had shingles in my eyes a while ago and iit damaged my retinas. So I used my allotted time to write and thank them.

I would absolutely love to do one for you when yours comes around. If you give me your birthday I put you on my calendar and about a week before I ask for info. It can be as little or as much as you would like to share about yourself. Everyone so far has told me they are lifetime keepsakes.
They take me close to a day to get each one personalized and put it together, tell a story in rhyme, have it make sense and put it in perfect meter.
What I get out of it is a beloved friend and the greatest feeling to see them so happy. So please let me know if you would like a biographical poem.

I thank you for such a sweet and lovey review and comments and I hope to hear from you soon, my dear friend. Hugs! Debi

And thanks for the reminder that I forgot to put it in Notes. LOL.

reply by Kelly Louisa Balliu on 04-May-2024

Thank you, Debi. I have a couple more of your poems lined up to read when I have time to sit and give them the attention they deserve :-)

My birthday is Feb 7th and I will be 46 on my next birthday (cripes). So far my forties have been pretty good, so it's not something I'm dreading (thankfully) xx