The House We Feared
The old house and the old man that scared us to death15 total reviews
Comment from prettybluebirds
This well-written and heartwarming story is a lovely tale of a lonesome old man who finds a friend for life. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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This well-written and heartwarming story is a lovely tale of a lonesome old man who finds a friend for life. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Reviews like yours are what keep me writing.
Thank you.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Creepy Tale contest. I loved this story that started out creepy and went into wholesome and bittersweet. Never judge the book by it's cover or the person by their looks. Give respect and you will be amazed what you get in return. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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An excellent entry for the Creepy Tale contest. I loved this story that started out creepy and went into wholesome and bittersweet. Never judge the book by it's cover or the person by their looks. Give respect and you will be amazed what you get in return. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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It is reviews such as yours that keeps me writing. I like you referring to not judge a book by it's cover. My father taught us that lesson growing up. I lived by it my whole life.
Thank you again for taking the time to read my story.
Comment from zanya
A story that grips the reader as it moves along with the protagonist overcoming his childhood fear of the scary house to grow up and embrace adulthood- evoking nostalgia and embroidered with effective language and imagery - what an enjoyable read
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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A story that grips the reader as it moves along with the protagonist overcoming his childhood fear of the scary house to grow up and embrace adulthood- evoking nostalgia and embroidered with effective language and imagery - what an enjoyable read
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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First, I want to thank you for the generous six-star rating. Most writers live for such a rating. I do as well. However just as important to me are the reviews of people such as yourself. If someone enjoys the story or finds a meaning. That means the world to me. A story I wrote recently about the fear of death. Helped two readers get through issues they were dealing with.
As a writer I know that would bring you a feeling of joy. If only one person finds something in your writing you have done something special.
Sorry about the long reply. Once again thank you.
Richard
Comment from Teri7
I wish I had six stars to give you for this great story you have penned. There was a lot of emotion in it. It kept me on edge from the moment I started reading it until the very last word. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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I wish I had six stars to give you for this great story you have penned. There was a lot of emotion in it. It kept me on edge from the moment I started reading it until the very last word. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Teri, Again thank you for reading one of my stories. I am so glad you enjoyed it. I love writing. Even more when I get feedback as nice as yours.
Comment from Julie Helms
This is a great story off to a spooky start, then turned into a very touching tale. I like how we see the boy grow to a man through the story.
I have some suggestions for typo/grammar corrections for your consideration:
Thou typical for twelve-year-old
(Though...)
we bravely walked by the house. Trying not to let on to your buddies that inside you were terrified. Each Halloween, we would
(Don't switch to second person (you) in the middle here. Stick to ...our buddies...we were terrified...)
courage to yelled, "Trick or Treat." Secretly, I hopes
(...to yell,.......Secretly, I hoped)
The following 2 passages seem to be a repeat of each other:
1.There is something I want you to know. I never told you this, but over these years, I thought of you as a son.
2."Donny, I wanted to tell you something."
He gasps and caught his breath.
"I have thought of you as a son."
A great story. Best of luck in the contest!
Julie
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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This is a great story off to a spooky start, then turned into a very touching tale. I like how we see the boy grow to a man through the story.
I have some suggestions for typo/grammar corrections for your consideration:
Thou typical for twelve-year-old
(Though...)
we bravely walked by the house. Trying not to let on to your buddies that inside you were terrified. Each Halloween, we would
(Don't switch to second person (you) in the middle here. Stick to ...our buddies...we were terrified...)
courage to yelled, "Trick or Treat." Secretly, I hopes
(...to yell,.......Secretly, I hoped)
The following 2 passages seem to be a repeat of each other:
1.There is something I want you to know. I never told you this, but over these years, I thought of you as a son.
2."Donny, I wanted to tell you something."
He gasps and caught his breath.
"I have thought of you as a son."
A great story. Best of luck in the contest!
Julie
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Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Julie, Thank you for the kind words. I enjoy writing. Especially when someone enjoys it.