Shattered Dream
naani contest16 total reviews
Comment from Mark Jackson
That is awful, the situation, not the writing. I hope it isn't but it feels too true not to be a real story. A Naani poem should be about human interactions and relations and this is gut-wrenchingly so. Good Luck with the competition.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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That is awful, the situation, not the writing. I hope it isn't but it feels too true not to be a real story. A Naani poem should be about human interactions and relations and this is gut-wrenchingly so. Good Luck with the competition.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you for such an insightful review. Yes, several people (especially one) I know have been touched addiction. The one "addict" closes to me has managed to turn it around, but this naani could have been very close to a reality.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
This is a sad poem. Drug addiction is a big problem in our country and it seems to be getting worse. The picture goes well with the poem. Great job
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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This is a sad poem. Drug addiction is a big problem in our country and it seems to be getting worse. The picture goes well with the poem. Great job
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from papa55mike
I love the switch between the lines, a complete 360 degrees. This form is very interesting. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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I love the switch between the lines, a complete 360 degrees. This form is very interesting. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you, for "getting" my intent on this one. It's a wonderful form, unfortunately abused by many.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Well, oh my goodness, that took an unexpected turn at the ending. Kerplowie.
Drugs are a scourge upon the Earth. Shatters more dreams than McDonalds serves hamburgers.
Sad
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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Well, oh my goodness, that took an unexpected turn at the ending. Kerplowie.
Drugs are a scourge upon the Earth. Shatters more dreams than McDonalds serves hamburgers.
Sad
D
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Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the great review
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Naani poem writing prompt. This poem sends a powerful message and shows the heartbreak caused by drug use. nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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An excellent entry for the Naani poem writing prompt. This poem sends a powerful message and shows the heartbreak caused by drug use. nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you, but your insightful review
Comment from Mintybee
What a sad poem. It's full of expectation followed by heartbreak. Addiction is a terrible thing. The loss of the pearls is a good example of something physically lost, but also a symbol of the loss of family that often comes with addiction. Wonderfully written.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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What a sad poem. It's full of expectation followed by heartbreak. Addiction is a terrible thing. The loss of the pearls is a good example of something physically lost, but also a symbol of the loss of family that often comes with addiction. Wonderfully written.
Mintybee
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Well, make my day "mintybee" Thank you so much for this honor. You were spot on with your review. Addiction is so destructive, and most families have been touched by it.
