The Unwilling Heir
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Comment from hullabaloo22
This is a wonderful chapter, so full of mystery. The descriptions of Sandra's dream were very well done; I especially liked the ballroom with the masked guests.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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This is a wonderful chapter, so full of mystery. The descriptions of Sandra's dream were very well done; I especially liked the ballroom with the masked guests.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my story chapter, This is my first attempt of writing about ghosts and dream sequences so I appreciate the input.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
I have read some of your stories, and I think this one is the best by far. It is full of mystery and suspense and keeps the reader wanting more. Excellent work, my friend.
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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I have read some of your stories, and I think this one is the best by far. It is full of mystery and suspense and keeps the reader wanting more. Excellent work, my friend.
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, April. As you probably know, I feel well out of my league as I write this one, but I am thrilled that you and others are enjoying it. To know that you think it is the best one so far, amazes me. Thank you so much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
This is excellent and enjoyed the discription in the dream. I think I might have missed something because I didn't know the book was missing. The last I remember she knew that Madaline had found it but she hadn't taken it a page fell out. Also I wonder since Madaline hid the heart medicine why woud she have Loffie looking where she hid it to find blankets.
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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This is excellent and enjoyed the discription in the dream. I think I might have missed something because I didn't know the book was missing. The last I remember she knew that Madaline had found it but she hadn't taken it a page fell out. Also I wonder since Madaline hid the heart medicine why woud she have Loffie looking where she hid it to find blankets.
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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In this chapter, when Sandra wakes from the dream, she scrambles to the floor looking for the book and tells James that it is gone. As for the heart medicine, in my mind, Madeline was making demands on Lorrie just to be making them and forgot about the medicine being hidden in the bottom of the drawer. Does any of that make sense to you?
I appreciate the suggestions.
Smiles, Carol
