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Verses of personification

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Comment from patcelaw
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I enjoyed your plan very much. It is very well written and very well rhymed. Your rhyming steam is wonderful because of the rhymes do not seem forced at all. They seem to be very natural. May you have a wonderful day. Patricia .

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
    Patricia, that means a lot. Thank you!!
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
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I love the way you personified time! I really like the flow and the way it rhymes.
I'm jealous you're in Disney World! It sounds so awesome!
Great job with this poem!

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
    Lol thank you SO much, Jodi!!
Comment from Sally Law
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This is so deep with thoughts on time. For whatever reason, I think about time a lot too and hope to manage it better. I always try to have time for God, prayer, and to study my theology. Time for my husband and family, and to care for myself, which is more time consuming because of my eye sight. My watch is less strict than it used to be. I don't maintain a strict schedule anymore. I do make time to write because it brings me such joy, typically four to six hours a day. I get lost there. I suppose you know about that. I think we both spend it well.
All my best, dear Jess. Enjoy Disney World to the max!
Sal Xoxo

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
    My friend, you always make me smile. I understand this, completely. We just returned home, and had the best time! Much love to you, my Sally!
    Xo
    Jess
reply by Sally Law on 14-Apr-2024
    You are so welcome!
    Sal Xoxo
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Another absolutely beautiful verse of personification and, sadly, I have nothing more to give. The wonderful imagery of currents and waves that you've mastered so well add such poignancy to an inspired and inspiring work. I love those last three lines in particular and your double entendre of hands. Well done, Jess! Debbie

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
    Debbie, your words are beyond appreciated. Thank you, my talented friend!!
    Xo
    Jess
Comment from LoAnn Beery
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I had to read it over again to make sure it really was as good as I felt after first reading . The depth of this poem is so well-written, and the meaning of it in its entirety is very special. You did a great job in visualizing this concept in the first place. Good job and best wishes.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
    This made my whole day. Thank you so very much for this wonderful review!! Xoxo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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I think many of us live beyond our years and find it hard to accept death, but it is inevitable for all of us.

Your personification of time here, how we use it and how it passes by is unique and clever Jessica and I enjoyed your metre and rhymes. A skilful write from a talented poet, much enjoyed, no sixes left this week, I particularly liked this line:
(though myths about my essence have deceived).

Love Dolly x x x

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 Comment Written 10-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
    Dolly, that means so much. Thank you!! Xoxo
Comment from lyenochka
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What a great personification of time in your poem! It gives us an important message. Glad you are taking Time's advice and making good use of it and riding those waves creating great memories with your daughters!

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 Comment Written 10-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
    Thank you so much, Helen! I truly appreciate you.
    Xoxo