What We See
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "What We See - Interlude"A wrongly accused teacher reinvents his life
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
At the beginning of this post, I wondered what it had to do with the rest of the story. Knowing your writing style, I knew it would be related eventually and it was. I know how the small tools are going to be related, because of what Alan/David wants to do, but I am wondering if the rest of it is really relevant. I can't wait to see.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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At the beginning of this post, I wondered what it had to do with the rest of the story. Knowing your writing style, I knew it would be related eventually and it was. I know how the small tools are going to be related, because of what Alan/David wants to do, but I am wondering if the rest of it is really relevant. I can't wait to see.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Good thoughts, Barbara. She should prove helpful to Alan in several key ways.
Comment from BethShelby
This are often those who would humiliate others by pulling pranks to get a laugh at the expense those who who might be more skilled. This reminds me of same kind of thing that was done to my sons project when it won from the class and had his project enter in state contest.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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This are often those who would humiliate others by pulling pranks to get a laugh at the expense those who who might be more skilled. This reminds me of same kind of thing that was done to my sons project when it won from the class and had his project enter in state contest.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Thanks so much, Beth. I hope your son was able to repair his project in time for the state contest. Stinkin' kids!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What a beastly boy, Chad! (should he be in your list of characters?) Abby has had a humiliating experience thanks to him and I think I would have stormed out long before she did. But she has a specialism with her miniature tools that could come in handy for Alan. I like the change of scene here and, already, we warm to Abby, and her spark and determination. I was thinking Callie had been in a previous incarnation but of course it was Abby. Para: "I had been reading.. is the 'one' redundant at the end? Another enjoyable chapter, Jim. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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What a beastly boy, Chad! (should he be in your list of characters?) Abby has had a humiliating experience thanks to him and I think I would have stormed out long before she did. But she has a specialism with her miniature tools that could come in handy for Alan. I like the change of scene here and, already, we warm to Abby, and her spark and determination. I was thinking Callie had been in a previous incarnation but of course it was Abby. Para: "I had been reading.. is the 'one' redundant at the end? Another enjoyable chapter, Jim. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Thanks so much, Debbie. Abby's knowledge about miniaturization and her overall brilliance will definitely become a boon to Alan's invention. He needs someone smart to brainstorm with, and Abby fills the role. It was fun to work her into this story.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
For me, one (a major one) test of good writing is that it inspires emotion. In your post, I'm fired up, ready to deck Chad. Sabotage at this level is criminal.
Nicely done. Good work.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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For me, one (a major one) test of good writing is that it inspires emotion. In your post, I'm fired up, ready to deck Chad. Sabotage at this level is criminal.
Nicely done. Good work.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Wayne. In the story Some Call It Luck, Abby started out as a timid soul who lacked the ability to respond to Chad the way he deserved. That story is about her growth into the confident individual who we saw in Saving Mr. Calvin. The timing and circumstances of this chapter fit in well with this story, so I brought her into it again. You know how it goes with favorite characters.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
... and the mad hatter strikes again. Yes, I remember the character Claire, from Scotland, perhaps or maybe the Netherlands, so there must be a real-life protege' somewhere in your life, and of course, there is a continuing new character intro'ed that will help with Alan's project.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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... and the mad hatter strikes again. Yes, I remember the character Claire, from Scotland, perhaps or maybe the Netherlands, so there must be a real-life protege' somewhere in your life, and of course, there is a continuing new character intro'ed that will help with Alan's project.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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The girl in the picture is the same girl as in the picture of Aggie from Scotland; however, this is Abby who, along with E.J. the caddie, was the star of Some Call It Luck where she invented the swing suit. Abby's daughter was Claire, named after her maiden name St. Claire. Now that that's claire as mud, your final supposition is correct, though.
Comment from jmdg1954
Good morning, Jim. I'm a bit confused (which is not a difficult assignment), but are we to expect a connection with the likes of Abby, Alan, Callie or Tommy, somehow, somewhere?
Got it. Never mind. I went back through the post and saw Callie and Abby are cousins. Very good!
Looking forward to the direction of your story with this bit of info and the boring of Warren.
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Good morning, Jim. I'm a bit confused (which is not a difficult assignment), but are we to expect a connection with the likes of Abby, Alan, Callie or Tommy, somehow, somewhere?
Got it. Never mind. I went back through the post and saw Callie and Abby are cousins. Very good!
Looking forward to the direction of your story with this bit of info and the boring of Warren.
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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It's fun to bring in characters from other stories. Fortunately, they occurred during the same time period, so that made it possible. I write about the '80s a lot because I would have been close to the same age as my characters, and I know the era well.
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Which is why I can relate to your stories very well, being about the same ages?
Good stuff..,
Comment from Wendy G
Very interesting chapter, and a dramatic variation on the previous chapters, which adds freshness as well as giving new background material. It will be interesting to see the connection between Abby and Callie, and then indirectly with Alan. Perhaps Abby's miniature tools will be useful for incorporating into his project. Chad is a cruel jerk, rude and demeaning. He should have been thrown out. Very well written, as always.
Wendy
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Very interesting chapter, and a dramatic variation on the previous chapters, which adds freshness as well as giving new background material. It will be interesting to see the connection between Abby and Callie, and then indirectly with Alan. Perhaps Abby's miniature tools will be useful for incorporating into his project. Chad is a cruel jerk, rude and demeaning. He should have been thrown out. Very well written, as always.
Wendy
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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I appreciate this perceptive review very much, Wendy. I like the way your mind works. Your instincts are very good.
Comment from Kari Ann Rouse
The expressions are soft. I would think many women would think of very different expressions if being criticized for being female. I believe your target audience will enjoy.
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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The expressions are soft. I would think many women would think of very different expressions if being criticized for being female. I believe your target audience will enjoy.
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your review. That's a fair criticism. I've introduced a character into the story who many readers would not understand that she would be incapable of a more pointed comeback at this point in her life. That's the risk I run with bringing her into it.
